/lit/ - Literature

>>1128059
Only situation and ending described. 3/10 because no information.

>>1128042
Oh, well. Whatever works for you, man.

>>1128026
>>1128030
Genius.

>>1128016
Maybe make them dangerous in another way? I'm just saying that the persecution/segregation angle is more engaging than the common overthrowing of society.

>>1128015
Good. Regular and even mediocre ideas can become good and even great if written well. Try not to fuck up. I'd rather read your story when finished, critiques during the writing process can only mostly hurt.

>>1128014
>where a premonition

That should be were. I'm only saying this because the story has potential and you shouldn't taint it with bad grammar. 8/10.

>>1127984
Murder rates increase because people killed the mutants, not the other way around. Suicide increases within the immediate families of mutants. Make the mutation fast spreading and ditch the wolverine claws. Find something else which would be immediately noticeable but not crippling or overpowering.

>>1127989
1/10 for being a choose your own adventure post.

>>1127974
>left for dead with nerdy lead
>college
>texas
>stereotypical personalities

4/10. It's not even an actual story idea, it's just a general zombie situation. Romero would be proud though.

>>1127962
>cliched mutant/zombie story
>lame mutation
>segregation themes
>implying there would be a long moral debate for politicians

6/10, has potential if handled well.

>>1127954
>supersoldiers
>generic sci-fi
>struggle of a common character

Possibly made unbearable by poor understanding of science, 5/10.

>>1127931
old story plot is old. the added complication is fine but a possible plot-hole.

a vague 7/10 for a vague idea.

>>1127942
nothing wrong with /co/mrades, but tvtropers are a bunch that I dislike. Over analyzing easily recognized pieces of fiction is like analyzing the paint from which paintings are made, plus they have this self-repeating bunch of pseudo-memes which get really annoying after a while.

Your story idea is fine.

>>1127937
you have no idea

>>1127928
>A guy meeting a three legged girl an becoming instantly obsessed with her and fetishizing her 3 malformed leg.

sounds like a thread on /r9k/. 3/10 for plagiarizing.