/jp/ - Otaku Culture

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>>5902373

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>>5902380

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>>5902388

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>>5902394

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>>5902400
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shit sucks.

[Anonymous No.]

I can't read it.

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>>5902373
to me, she was the first reader
what are you writing there? nipa-
furude rika
she was a class president with excellent grades and popular with everyone
on the other hand, i was dark and my grades were from middle down

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>>5902476
d'aaw

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can't read shit captain

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Penis jokes

[Anonymous No.]

Oh Lawd

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>>5902476
.....Continue

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>>5902476
Continue please.

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>>5902380
Different, much less competent anon than the previous translator

People (women? no clue what the kanji next to 女 is) seem to enjoy reading my short stories.
Writing my next work is becoming enjoyable.

Uh... yeah. That's probably not at all what it actually means and I've run out of recognizable kanji.

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その人は私にとって初めての読者でした。

一体何を書いているのですか？

古手梨花…クラス委員の彼女は容姿端麗で興宮中全体の人気者でした

対する私はと言えば、地味で暗く、成績も中の下でした。

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そんな彼女が私の小説を楽しそうに読んでくれている！

私は次の作品を空くのが楽しくなりました

梨花ちゃんが笑ってくれている、

梨花ちゃんが泣いてくれている、

梨花ちゃんが怒ってくれている…

この時間が永遠に続けばいいのに…

私はそう感じていました

[Anonymous No.]

ある日　私は　担任の鷹野先生に呼ばれました

小説を普くのに時間を割いていた私は、学校の成績がみるみると落ちていた
のです

続きは書けましたですか？

触らないで！

ど・・どうしたのですか…
八城先生……

先生だなんて呼ばないでよ、私は梨花ちゃんみたいに成績だって良くないし
、誰からも期待なんてされてない！

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　どうせ小説家になんてなれないのよ、

　奇跡でも起きない限り？

　すると　彼女はやさしく笑って、

　奇跡なんて簡単に起こせるですよ？

　八城先生が読ませてくれたたくさんの物語…
　そのカケラがボクの心に響いていますのです

　これは奇跡といえるのじゃないですか？

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次の日から、私は梨花ちゃんからみっちりと勉強を教わりました。

梨花ちゃんと同じような成績とはいかないまでも、周りから文句を言わせな
い程度までは上がっていました。

ほら、この奇跡の魔女ベルンカステル、

これ、梨花ちゃんがモデルなんだよ？
　
それから夢のような月日がしばらくつづいた後、

…何かてれくさいのです

梨花ちゃんは突然に転校してしまったのでした。

[Anonymous No.]

けれども　私は小説を書き続けたのです。

大学入学にあたって上京し、出版社へ売り込みをつづけました。

…だって、奇跡なんて簡単に起こせるのだから！

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Whelp, I'm in a pretty good mood today /jp/.
>>5902373
To me, they were my first reader.
What ever could you be writing about? NIPAH
Rika Furude... The beautiful class president whose popularity was known through the entire Okinomiya middle school.
Compared to me just ordinary and gloomy with below average grades.
>>5902380
That girl reads my novel so merrily!
Writing my next novel has become an enjoyment.
She laughed,
She cried,
She became angry...
I had wanted...
That this time would last forever.
>>5902388
One day I was called to the office by my advisory teacher Ms. Takano.
As I had put even more time to writing my novel my grades had obviously suffered.
Did you write the continuation?
Don't touch it!
Wh...what's wrong... Hachijou-Sensei...
Don't add Sensei on my name. My grades aren't as good as yours and nobody is expecting anything from me!

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>>5906007
>>5905995
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>>5905953
>>5905934
Thanks, you ruined my mood. You just invited the fuckwits into here.

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>>5905903
Please stop translating. If you can't even guess out of context that it's kanojo (彼女), and that 'sonna kanojo' means 'that girl', your Japanese is even worse than mine, and you aren't at all able to translate something like this. Please practice some more before trying to translate a kanji-ridden text like this. (Also, since you didn't seem to recognize 'sonna', I recommend taking a look at Tae Kim's guide to Japanese grammar: http://www.guidetojapanese.org/learn/grammar , it's a very helpful resource.)

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>>5906023
>That girl reads my novel so merrily!
>merrily
Yeah that was a poor choice of words there.

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>>5906023
Please continue. Waiting impatiently for the rest...

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>>5906053
Man I enjoy being able to deny others pleasure. Excuse me while I now masturbate.

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Using >>5906023's translation

[Anonymous No.]

I can understand this, but I'm unable to translate. My japanese isn't good enough to transcribe with precision such things.
Cute story.

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

Bored... will continue later if someone finishes the translation.

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>>5906094
Okay, I'm too lazy for this, so you continue. Your version looks better anyways. Good luck!

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> にぱ~~~~~
Thanks, at least i know the correct spelling now.

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

more later, maybe...

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>>5906111
Change it to joyfully or intently.
>>5902394
I can't become a writer anyways
Unless a miracle happens!
She then gave me a gentle smile.
Miracles are easy to make you know?
All of those stories Yachijou-Sensei let me read... That shard echoes within my heart.
Isn't that what you would call a miracle?
>>5902400
From the following day onward I received severe tutelage from Rika-chan.
I can't have as good grades as her, but my grades became a level where others had no room to complain.
Look, this witch is the witch of miracles, Bernkastel.
You were her model.
This had continued on for some time which following,
That's a bit embarrassing. NIPAH
Rika-chan had abruptly transferred schools.
>>5902406
But I still had continued to write my novels.
After enrolling into a college in the capital, I continued to sell my novels to a publishing company.
Because, Miracles can easily be made!

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>>5906216
>Miracles are easy to make you know?
>All of those stories Yachijou-Sensei let me read... That shard echoes within my heart.
>Isn't that what you would call a miracle?
Okay, this was just too, too...sheesh.

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>>5906244
Rifyu should stick "D'aww Erika", penis jokes and naked-George?

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>>5906224

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

cheesy, but d'awww anyways

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

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>>5906275
The comic in general is good, but the way that part was executed was just too cheesy.

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

thanks for the translation~

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

http://www.mediafire.com/?u31008pmswcbup8

rar with v2 of certain pages

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>>5906244
Thinking reverberates would be better than echoes now that I look at it.
And piece instead of shard.

That piece still reverberates within my being.

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>>5906417
Thank you

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>>5906504
Why "piece"? Most people don't translate カケラ, when used in the When They Cry series, as "piece", do they?. I've usually seen it translated as "Fragment" for Higurashi- and Umineko-related stuff.

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

page 4, v3

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page 3, v2 - fixed a misplaced comma

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>>5909158
Can I make a rar with that v3, or do you want to update the existing one?

[Trollkastel !Nipa.MUHj6 No.]

meant to sage the previous post...

page2, v3 - edited in the book title

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>>5909181
http://www.mediafire.com/?v9mk29maxpp6snm

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>>5909205
Thanks.

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>>5908600
Why should I care what other people translate things into? Does it sound better? Does it make more sense? It looks good, and I don't care if they want more references to the main story.

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>>5909239
It's called "being consistent". It's obvious what the intent there was (using "kakera" in the same way MARIA uses it at one point in Umineko), so you go with the established translation.

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>>5909260
>I don't care if they want more references to the main story.
Consistent? I never translated the story. If I translated it then it would be consistent with what I used. If you want better translations then ask someone else then.

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>>5909239
"Piece" is an ambiguous term, and in Umineko, it's a term different from kakera, referring to entities on a kakera (similar to chess pieces on a chess board).
Fragment, on the other hand, does not have this ambiguity.

The link to the original game is important because every story Hachijo has written is a kakera, therefore it's important to use at least a term that implies she's referring to the world, not the writing itself.

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>>5909574
And on that subject, fragments should be plural because every story is on a different kakera.

And in case people didn't notice, this is a direct nod to how Ryukishi started writing his stories (he wrote them for his best friend BT. He recently passed away suddenly, but Ryukishi continued to write stories even now his first reader can no longer read them).