/jp/ - Otaku Culture

perfection ?
ok
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H2fgKLfqslM

>Separated, by one dimension.

;_;

I was outside and I thought of this really nice poem but no one responds to it. I want to die.

I honestly cant believe this.

Only one legitimate reply. Just one.

Only ONE. For my poem!? Is my poem really that bad? It can't be because then people would come and say its bad, but ONLY ONE PERSON DID!. Ahhh!!! I can't believe this. I was so excited to write up this poem and post it on /jp/ and see how people like it, and I get nothing!

It's driving me crazy

WHY IS MY THREAD SO REPULSIVE?

>>9340076
Get the fuck out, attwhore.

>>9340076
What're you, 12?

>>9340126

You are telling me that if you, a layman, created a creative work that you are proud of and shared it with a community you affiliate with, and that community did not even ACKNOWLEDGE your work you wouldnt be stunned?

Not bad, although I personally would have written the last line as "Separated, by a single dimension," rather than just using the word "one."

There once was a maiden shrine
who would clean up all of the time
She dressed up in red
had a ribbon on her head
and her armpits were simply divine!

Well, you like Marisa more than I do, and I thought I liked her... well, a lot.

>>9340162

I like one instead of single because its one syllable. Seems to flow easier.

>>9340227

Yeah! I like Marisa a lot.

Even if people here ignore this thread, I know Marisa is happy. If she's ever having a rough time, she can remember that people like you in the outside world are there for her, even if only in spirit. And when everything is going well, her day will be brightened even further.

>>9340302

This would be beautiful, if she was real.

I can name the references I noticed in your poem

Deva: Yuugi
Princess: Kaguya
Blade: Youmu
Time: Sakuya
Moon's Fountain: Hourai Elixer

Neat!

Good job, anonymous.

>>9340259
>one
>single
>both are one syllable

I enjoyed the poem though.

>>9340449

Single is two syllables!

can someone write a poem about Koishi?

She deserves one!

>>9341211

Koishi is a cute girl
She rolls on her oversized eye
She wears an oversized outfit
It is adorable

>>9340076

Patience, young grasshopper. /jp/ is slow.

I enjoyed your poem. Marisa is my favorite <3

>>9341211
makin' mad stacks
flash da yellows and da blacks
an when niggaz tryna step to me
my hat helps me relax

/jp/ needs to write more poems

gaaaaaaaay

>>9344115

Marisa.

>>9344114
I've seen better poems at Gaia from my boyfriend.

>>9344115
Fuck off back to /v/, you shitposting cunt. Reported.

>>9345060

Your boyfriend is Gaia!?

>>9345060
I have had a loli said she dreamt about me, and then she drew me a picture of what I looked like in it. Do you even lift??

>>9345054

That picture gave me a crush for Marisa.

>>9345125
No you imbecile. My boyfriend used to reside at gaia.

>>9345462
Oh ho? Think you can keep up with her?

>>9345483

I wish. I hope she likes my personality and doesn't care about my mediocrity in all fields of life. That's the only way I could woo her.

>>9341211
I want my dick inside Koishi
To make her scream out loud "oishii"
My wish; become the kami no shi
And grant her quick death.

Her sister Komeiji cries aloud
Her sorrow draws forth a mighty crowd
Disregarding them I stand up proud
And give her the dick

My hot cum sprayed upon her face
Her visage now does appear a disgrace
And dribbling down to her dress of lace
My seed does run softly

Her sister's corpse borne in my arms
Her rigid face ceases to bear charms
Lol xD man whadda fuck
This is a great shit

>>9345621

Koishi deserves more respectful poems!

>>9345621

Very good creative writing. I wish my brain could be creative but all I really do is rip other people off.

>>9339803
>Time stops when I gaze upon your hourglass figure.

She's 12 you sick fuck.

>>9345744

Nuh uh, she's like 21!

>>9345658
You're right, I'm sorry. I am genuinely repentant.

Have you seen Koishi Komeiji?
She has not come home in awhile.
It's dangerous here for a girl like her
And I do so miss her smile

You think you've seen Koishi Komeiji
But now you've gone and forgot?
She's an adorable pure-hearted girl
With worry for her I am fraught

She was the vandal, Koishi Komeiji?
Speak not ill of her, you churl
As you say, she lives in Hell
But she's the sweetest little girl

My loving sister, Koishi Komeiji
Desires nothing else in the world
But freedom from needs, from musts, from wants
From the slander at her you have hurled

Koishi Komeiji, Koishi Komeiji
It's almost 2AM in Tunisie
Flan will be on, so please hurry home
So I can finally take it easy

old enough for kisses

Where's the shit-eating grin?

Little ice fairy
Who plays in the snow
How you live your life full of merry
And with a lifelike glow
You shine above the rest
Everything you touch becomes ice
As a result of your jest
No matter the price
I would give the world to hold you in my arms like a doll
Little ice fairy, though not very smart
Whose touch freezes all
But my heart.

Yuugi the deva, strong and brave
Who lives in a hellish cave
No one can stand to your elegant might
You make my groin feel extremely tight
I wish you could know my magical love
But all I will get is a push and a shove

>>9345863

Very skilled poet.

>>9346085
>>9346186

Cute!

Time-maid,
What are your secrets?
What do you desire?
Can we talk about you while we light up a fire?
Where do you come from?
Why are you here?
You serve a mistress whom you hold dear.
Who is Remilia?
How did you meet?
I wish you would indulge this poor ol' NEET
Why do you hold back?
Why do you lie?
Is it because you are really shy?
Time-maid of utmost efficiency
I wish you could be with me.

It sure is a lot easier to make a rhyming poem than it is to make one that doesn't rhyme and have that kind of appeal.

Introverted Youkai
Why do you hide?
You waste all that beauty
Being inside
I wish you'd come out
The world would be better
Come to me and accept the letter
It is written in my mind
You have my soul in your hands, please be kind
Open the seal, gaze into my heart
If you deny, i'll throw myself in her cart.

Satori
Marry Me

Ill beat Remilia with my fist
For what she has done with her red mist
Ill strip her down, nothing but flesh
Hm, I think we could really mesh
Ill pound you senseless, you wont remember
Where you were last September
Ill call for your sister
She'll inquire "What mister?"
Ill tie her down, with a gun full of lead
If you refuse to give me head

Shameimaru!
Where are you!?
You cannot capture my shame,
For I am really lame!

/jp/ - Poem Culture

Any poetry otakus here?

>>9346484
Ted Hughes is my favorite poet

>>9346447

Stop raping Remilia!