/jp/ - Otaku Culture

I made this template for a thread here and I was wondering if there was a better method for giving a lineart drawing aliased lines than what I did. Here's my method:

-Select the white parts of the image via color range
-Invert selection
-Make a new layer, and paint the selection with the pencil tool, creating the aliased lines
-Create a new layer and bucket fill it with white
-Delete the original lineart layer and merge the aliased lines and the white background layers

If anyone here has experience with Photoshop, is there a better way of doing this? I feel like my method is a bit convoluted.

>>17134569
That's pretty good, anon. I'll try it out.

I want to get good

>>17134993
That's decent. It'd look better with more confident lines, though, especially on the sword. Try to make curved lines in one brash move. Keep it up!

alice has had enough of the shovel beatings

i can only draw guys /jp/

I realized that I forgot to add a command to merge squads back, despite already having a split command. I fixed that today.

Made this few days back. I quite like how it turned out so far.

https://soundcloud.com/sinsack_agi/when-djent-has-sex-with-folk

I did one of remilia but it isn't very good

>>17137066
reminds me of boss music

>>17137085
looks like a dude

>>17137085
Though her proportions are off I kinda like it, and the drapery of the dress looks pretty nice despite the weird design.

>>17137085
spooky

>>17137085
You need to work a lot, but i definitely see a lot of potencial here, no joke.

>>17139696
>>17139730
having you approval makes me happy

Inspired by this post
https://www.pixiv.net/member_illust.php?mode=medium&illust_id=62823868

>>17139851
Cute

I'll just sit here and wait boku to post some draws.

>>17066316
>>17122048

thanks heaps guys, finally got some time to work on it a bit more but i feel like i'm pushing myself into a dead end

>>17142288
Don't worry about it anon. Even if you find yourself at a dead end, just push your way straight through it!

hope to colour this eventually

I've had a shitty wacom, or whatever the name of the tablet is, for 3 years now and used it twice, for osu standard which I never even liked anyway. I occasionally sketch with my mouse and before that I used my laptop mousepad for 7-8 years. Why am I so retarded? I just feel like using the tablet always felt not accurate, which is ironical because neither does the mouse.

>>17146343
It took me a while to get used to drawing in one place while looking at another if that's what you mean. Just keep practicing/using the tablet in my opinion.

>>17146359
In my head I seem to have emphasized the fact that it might just be the tablet itself that was actually wonky and not me, but I don't know how to fix it. I'll try again when I am free of exams.

Well, everyone keep trying and do your best.

>>17146523
Why would it be the tablet...? Don't blame the tablet just because you're not used to it, we've all been there.

>>17146680
Because what I felt like in the 2 times I've used it in years was exactly this https://twitter.com/Thomasintokyo/status/870263310024757248

I had tried playing around with a cousin's tablet in the past and, outside of the initial getting used to confusion, it was fine. It's different.

>>17146740
Okay, well that's not normal. But how have you not looked into this in the 3 years you've owned it? I hope you have the right drivers installed.

>>17147605
I thought it was a problem with the drivers too, which I couldn't fix at the time and made me frustrated, and then stopped giving a shit about it because I never took my drawing passion seriously enough, just an occasional hobby. I'll try again because of you now.

Holy shit I even forgot it was black.

Anyone have any experience in sculpting and have a favorite sculpting material? I want to give it a try, and so far I'm thinking of working with medium Castilene.

https://soundcloud.com/pointfour/faith-in-the-new-sequence

making shit with sd90 is fucking ace but slightly annoyed that I have to record everything through Audacity

>>17146259
phew

Yeah, same as years ago, even with updated drivers and having followed all possible procedures to avoid my Tablet from acting weird, I still can't do certain movements that will make it not recognize my strokes or whatever. No wonder I used it twice in years.
>try to train vertical strokes upwards to downwards in a fast pace
>it just draws dots and doesn't continue the trace down, can't even write a "K"

>>17150331
nice

>>17150536
try older drives and/or other programs.
newer doesn't always mean better.

>>17150536
disable windows flicks

>>17150536
what tablet are you using?

>>17149013
your music is nice. it's very 2hu-esque and catchy.

I've got a new job so I couldn't draw that much. Please forgive me /jp/.

>>17151420
Will do.
>>17153293
Will try.
>>17154371
https://www.amazon.com/Wacom-Bamboo-Connect-Tablet-CTL470/dp/B005HGBEYS

>>17154438
That's very cute.

I like drawing cute girls.

>>17150536
Are you drawing on MS Paint?

>>17155051
Yes (I'm cancer and I draw very sporadically, never got a proper program, would once the tablet works) but it gave me the same results in other programs. I like the way your draw hands.

>>17150536
Open services and restart the wacom drivers.

When my laptop broke last year, I had to borrow a 5 year old toaster from work, and I would constantly have to do that to get the tablet to even work on it. It's worth a try at least.

>>17155155
Thank you for your help and everyone else's. When I get it fixed I'll update my situation, thanks.

What should I do to get motivated at coloring?

>>17155310
I make myself color and shade my stuff because I know I need the practice and experience.

I doodle some cirno yesterday

>>17155394

>>17155398
Cute. A tad too westernized for me, but cute.

>>17155398
and one rumia

>>17155310
Forgive me for doing this with a mouse, but isn't her leg kinda displaced?
That said I think her face is pretty cute, and you should color her!

>>17155407
>>17155398
>>17155394

I like it, it's a very cartoony art style but it's not actively offensive to the eyes like modern cartoons

She feels good!

>>17157163
Yeah It looks pretty weird in hindsight, thanks for the correction.


>>17155338
I'll try to do that.

>>17157372
And after...

Yamame is fat
>>17155406
>>17157172
yeah I don't like drawing too anime-esque, kaiba and astroboy are kind of my big referents

>>17159835
Gud taste

>>17159835
I meant the nose, it just reminds me of the tumblr nose I hate. But it's your artistic style choice, so I am in no place to change that.

>>17155398
cute!

>>17160858
>tumblr nose
I will shamefully justify my actions

>>17134569
Despeckle, posterize to 2 levels?

and Ray Moo

>>17162125
Cute!

>>17161836
Tumblr nose is more than only that. I think the confusion comes from whether the gray on the nose is weird blush like tumblr tends to do or if it's just a shadow. See here for more examples: http://imgur.com/a/D6WNF

Drawn with my finger so it's pretty sloppy.

>>17162322
my grey dots are just the shadow of the triangle in the base of the nose.

>>17162506
You are fine by me then

>>17159835
Kaiba is one of the most anime looking things I've seen and your art doesn't really resemble it. I have a big problem with the way their hands/arms are, rather than noses though. They're also making those really over-exaggerated expressions that western cartoonists like to use.

Their faces are also... uncute. They don't have to fill up all the available head space.

>>17162730
Im sorry man next time I say something inspired me I will try to draw exactly as it looks, and never look to western cartoonist, I hope this looks better, thanks for the criticism

>>17161836
Still resembles it to me, I just see the triangle shadow. But it's just my shitty opinion, I like your art.

>>17162125
I love this.

>>17162789
That doesn't look bad actually, but it's a bit generic. I like your actual style though, it's pretty nice.

Now adding netplay so I can play with my fellow online friends.

>>17162354
I really like this aesthetic.

>>17162354
the thumbnail looks very cool

An attempt at making some sort of squid girl.

>>17154438
what kind of tablet if you used a tablet at all did you use to draw that? it looks cute

>>17166068
Filename and reverse image search leads me to think that he didn't draw that. But correct me if I'm wrong.

>>17165528
Can't wait till this is done so I can mop the floor with all of you!

>>17165528
>>17165843
thanks for the kind words.

I'm applying for the humble bundle partnership beta /jp/!
I want to get paid for shilling games, which I already do for free. Wish me luck!

/jp/, am I doing something wrong? Whenever I try to draw, I can't last more than 20 minutes before my fingers start going stiff and it hurts to even move them, Because of taht, it's hard for me to ever finish a drawing, since by the time the pain goes away, so is my motivation for that drawing.

>>17166835
you might just be holding your pen wrong, holding it really really tight, pressing too hard, etc.

Take regular short breaks and stretch.

JP, I gave it a shot. Trying to draw more every night.

>>17167121
wish I could violate her ;_;

>>17167121
she looks like a cute youthful mom

Tried to do a cover.

>>17167237
And another render.

>>17167121
Orihime?

https://soundcloud.com/pointfour/heartbeats-of-a-burning-god
New song. Wanted to capture the similar feeling the music stage 3 played in TD without it being exactly that song.

>>17170111
You are capturing zun's style so well you even captured the reason why I don't like his music.

>>17170111
Are you still working on your game? I like the music. Keep it up.

>>17170111
Did you make this from scratch? It's really good.

>>17162354
that's fucking great

>>17175835
I almost forgot that we're in summer, sorry.

>>17166835
I'm sure it's from keeping your hand in the same position for too long and gripping too tight. I started pausing every few minutes to stretch and adjust but that goes out the window once I get really into it
Just draw faster :^)

>>17167121
>>17167157
Aye, cute mom

>>17167237
Shouldn't there be a "the" before each title? It sounds like some chinese bootleg thing

>>17177009
> The Hero and the demon king

That sounds terrible. Also that makes it more sounds like those are unique titles.

i'm working on an original song done in the style of yellow magic orchestra's first two albums

http://picosong.com/7zya/

>>17177478
It does not.
Unless those are the character names, it sounds rather odd. There's no reason to drop the particle as if it were plural. Even if there were more heroes and kings, we're not refering to them in a general sense so the particle is still needed.
You could use "a" to have it sound less unique. I think that sounds like a tale or a legend, you know? Like "Once, there was a hero and she went to throw down with a demon king."

Rabbit with climbing animation. Soon I shall put the rabbit in game and make it work. I got caught up in work but I'm back at it.

>>17180847
Why doesn't it climb with both its back paws at the same time? Because it's a humanoid bunny? Pretty cool by the way.

>>17181056

I suppose this was the only way I knew how to make the climbing animation look acceptable to me. I may try that though.

>>17181061
Best of luck.

I want to touch people's hearts with music, but I don't know where to start. How did you start /jp/?

>>17182739
do you want to compose and/or just play music?

>>17183211
not that anon but I would like to learn how to compose music but every music theory thing I look up seems to assume some base knowledge I don't have.

>>17183211
Both

>>17186280
My comrade

>>17182739
I asked for help on an imageboard. Then I got a DAW and some tutorials for it, tried a bunch of synthesizers (using only two right now).
Got somehow better at making sound with them after practicing and reading manuals, but as someone without any musical education at all I'm struggling at actually composing anything apart from short loops/melodies.
I tried reading some of the musical theory and couldn't really figure out how to put anything of it to use, I don't need to be able to read cheat sheets or play a piano, for now at least. There gotta be something of use, but it's too much to look through.

So I think I could really use some help there, too. I just want to make sound and then music from it in a DAW, is there anything of music theory that can help me with composing? Maybe something for synthesizing, too? I did read the respective manuals but now I'm mostly blindly trying to make something that doesn't sound too weird.

>>17155407
Little Rumia is NOT A DRUG ADDICT!

>>17190166
she just needs some sleep

The only thing you have to learn before proceeding is the notes in the keyboard. It'll help you to visualize.
If you ask me why are they arranged like that, using only 7 letters to represent 12 notes, it was an arbitrary decision, so deal with it you like it or not.

https://www.musictheory.net/lessons
Next thing is follow this since it teach you musical notation. Whether you actually use it or not it doesn't matter since all it does is making easier to learn certain concepts so it's useful.
When you get to chords progression stop. Get harmony and voice leading by Aldwell. Explaining why chords progression works is hard but this does an excellent job. I mean, it's so good you don't have to read it all.
Here's some supplementary material to the book with audio samples. http://sfcmtheory.com/harmony_supplements/harmony_supplements.html
If you can't find it by yourself then ask me to upload it.

About music structure there isn't much material but have this as an introduction
http://teoria.com/en/tutorials/forms/phrases/
Then you proceed to analyze songs by yourself, listening for phrases and how do they relate to each other. Same for sections, listen for them and see how they relate to each other.
There are a lot of "analyzes" people made that you can see here https://www.hooktheory.com/theorytab/charts/chart/new
If you search for a certain song chances are that it's already there. It has plenty of touhou songs.

There are even less resources for melody since it's a thing you get a feeling for but there's this
http://www.calvin.edu/academic/music/pdf/Figuring%20Out%20Melody.pdf

It may seems like too much but I hope it helps you all.

>>17190203
I don't think the blushes in Cirno look too good with her tanned skin, cute drawing otherwise

An arrangement of 魔術師メリー I'm working on right now.

https://soundcloud.com/user-295122663/demo/s-7KV9j

I'm still new to audio production so even reaching this point took me far too long, but at least I don't dislike how it turned out so far. Might be the first track I'll actually be able to finish. It still needs a lot of work though.

>>17191623
>991343001855
Is this some reference?

>>17191909
No, I just couldn't come up with a name so I typed in some random numbers.

>>17190313
Thank you for the resources!

>>17166389
Im saving this in my HDD

>>17166389
Who's the chick on the left?

>>17195888
she's that one bitch from kagerou project.

>>17195888
Can't say I recommend the series, but I think her design and the animation of her song Souzou Forest is too cute.

>>17191623
I like it a lot, anon. Keep going!

>>17162322
>http://imgur.com/a/D6WNF
Thanks for the nightmares, man

>>17178510
Keep it up, I love early YMO.

>>17200196
I'm sorry. To be fair though, you kind of knew what you were getting into when you clicked on it.

>>17190203
Yeah I have to agree with the other anon, blushes look a bit generic and what you'd find on a tumblr drawing. It'd probably be better without. The blushes on the cheeks look fine though, just remove it from the elbows.

what facial expression should she have, /jp/?

>>17207421
a happy one

i tried today, /jp/.

I love Marisa.

>>17212964
>it rotated
i hate mobileposting so goddamn much

Netplay coming along nicely. Just kidding, it's a total pain in the butt.

>>17212888
Trying and succeding as always, nice.

I'm working on becoming a professional shill.

>>17215139
thanks for the bump

>>17167126
Good sir, If you must, please make sure it is at least consensual!
>>17167157
>>17177009
Many thanks! Just really glad it actually turned out cute and desirable.
>>17167332
Is that what she looks like now? I thought she was even more stacked than this.

JP, I gave it another shot. Sorry this is not OC; quick sketch of my shipdaughteru. Will try hard to continue the line art and coloring in the coming days.

>>17215879
>shipdaughteru

>>17215879
Cute ship. Keep up the good work.

>>17214239
That seems interesting.

What's the game gonna be about?

just fuck my shit up

>>17218334
It's a fighting game as you can see.
The mechanics will be heavily borrowed from melty blood with some inspiration from gg and bb.
I don't know how the characters are going to look and I only have a vague idea about how they're going to play.
The story is something about demons, I don't know.
I'm not doing this alone, or so it was supposed to be, but well, I might as well be alone.

>>17218542
I pity you, probably surrounded by idea guys. But ganbare!

>>17218957
I couldn't have said it better. Although I'm not very creative, to be fair.

>>17218542
I could help you out if you need help fleshing out your ideas. We could talk here or wherever place you find convenient.

Drew a mentally retarded girl trying to eat a butterfly.

>>17218542
How many characters will you have and do you already have someone who animates them?

I would be interested but it seems way out of scope to do.

I tried today, /jp/.

>>17214239
Thanks!

>>17223882
I like it a lot. Looks like everything has a velvet overlay to it.

You guys are very good. I am jealous but happy for you.

>>17223882
Because you tried today, I'm going to try today as well.

And maybe even tomorrow!

>>17224176
Gumbatte!

I tried again today, jayp.

Le bump for the great justice.

>>17233746
>le bump

>>17134547
Guess OC means Original Content instead of OCharacter?

>>17233857
Not like we made all the 2hus
Or maybe we're all ZUN

>>17233857
Well, it's general. OCharacter fits in OContent. You can also post /jp/ related stuffs like Touhou for example.

How do I into drawing guys?
I can do some doodles but they aren't that great. I want my stuff to look more realistic but without stop being anime-like.

>>17236276
Go to /ic/ and read the sticky.
You will need like 10 gorillion hours of study and practice to reach a decent level thought

>>17236276
visit /ic/, do the exercises. It'll take years and years and years.

I haven't drawn Cirno for awhile.

Someone drew Cirno as a dominatrix for me like half a decade ago. It was pretty good. Thanks if you're still here drawanon.

>>17236516
OH I FOUND IT

>>/jp/thread/S9510922#p9532754

>>17236355
>>17236442
But what's the point?

>>17236565
to get good

it's relaxing after a while even if you're shit, continuous improvement at really anything is something good to do

and drew mado

>>17236516
>>17236521
>dominatrix
????????

>>17236566
But you're still going to work hard just to be shit for a few decades.

>>17236580
I found this picture to be pretty inspirational. Nobody takes decades to get good at art if they work on it.

>>17236636
What's the point?

>>17236648
If you don't see one, then it isn't for you.

>>17236651
I kinda dont.

>>17236661
then art isn't for you.

>>17236667
That's not going to stop me from drawing though. You have no power over me.

>>17236651
Yeah, I just don;t see the point in practicing for years just so I can draw some barely passable anime girl for a handful of people in the Internet.

>>17236680
you gotta do it for yourself anon

if your only validation from making good art is having other people tell you "oh anon, you're such a good artist!" then you're not really interested in getting good

>>17236733
Because I draw for fun.

Speaking about drawing for fun I drew Nigga REtard heart throb Koishi.

>>17236733
Well that's a dumb reason.

>>17236462
>>17236571
>>17236768
>"Hey guys look at my art do I fit in yet?"

>>17236789
Wow bully

Took way too long because of a particularly nasty cold but here's a thing.

>>17236733
What if I want to get good so people can tell me I am a good artist? Is that still doing it for myself or is that not really interested in getting good?

Not meant as a troll rebuttal, actually curious.

how good are you at drawing nicetack's reisen

>>17229756
Cute stuff as always, dude. Digging it a lot. Please keep up the great work.

>>17223882
Also amazing. Really digging the hatching.
>>17212888
And the values on this one are really great.

>>17215879
Pretty solid. Don't give up, dude. Gonna finish it?



Two little things, one I whipped up three weeks ago:
https://soundcloud.com/sinsack_agi/when-djent-has-sex-with-folk

And the other one from today, after two weeks of not being able to record anything:
https://soundcloud.com/sinsack_agi/ideas-2606-03

Working on something for [wsg], might as well post just the animation here

She's an oldie but goodie

>>17236521
Seems that I was in that thread.
man its been so long

Any drawing lesson simpler then Drawabox?

Do whatever you want with it, foot it, cab it, Iron Horse it

>>17241972
Can I ignore it?

>>17241962
drawabox is super simple though

starts with basic lines and pen control, just grind though it over and over again, there's no shortcut for building that fine motor control

Also it should be mentioned - do NOT use a tablet for those exercises, it leads to a bad habit of ctrl+z drawing in which you draw a line, undo it, and repeatedly draw the same line over and over again until it either "looks right" or you give up.

>>17216296
Need to take care of her and send her to the best college so she can achieve her dreams.
>>17217091
>>17240997
Thank you! Trying to!

>>17242240
Its not simple enough for me.

Here's some Hecks I made for a Valentine's thing.

Can I get any advice on how to make this dancing Rika look less awkward?

>>17212974
>>17224127
>>17229756
I like these

>>17247019
animate all the way through, it's obvious you're just flipping the sprite and reversing the animation

Also use keyframes, the end of each stroke is a good one, and note that body parts tend to spend more time near the ends of their strokes - e.g. a batter hitting a baseball is going to have more frames at the wind up and at the finishing pose than the actual swing.

>>17247141
Thanks for the tips, I appreciate it.

oh hey guys

?is this where you've been hiding

I miss jellyfish guy.

>>17248745
NICE
Irisu is a great bunn

>>17247692
Oh hey it's you. Your girl is very cute, as always.

>>17247692
welcome back!

i like to draw on grey backgrounds because it hurts my eyes less when i look at the screen for an hour

>>17242048
>Can I ignore it?
Yes I cried, Yes I cri-hi-hi-ed.

I tried today, /jp/.

>>17240997
Thanks! That djent piece is pretty badass btw.

>>17247692
>>17248745
Cute!!

I saw that Riyo has his own line of nendoroids and I'm jealous as fuck. When my time will come?

>>17258976
Grey backgrounds also help to emphasize points of attention like eyes if you like 'em gleaming.

>>17261007
This is the sort of generic western artwork that I come on /jp/ to avoid.

>>17262795
Why are you in a thread about western artwork then?

>>17262795
How about you just ignore them like a proper grown up instead of acting like a feminist? There is nothing bad about this, it's solely your tastes so deal with it. Especially when he's nothing new on those threads.

>>17246965
Those are some cute Hecks!

>>17219926
The thing is that I'm not the guy with the ideas. I don't think any of my ideas are worth anything anyway.
I can redirect you to the idea guy if you want. I trust him since he's so good at fighting games.

>>17222092
4-8 but if everything goes well it's likely 6. There's an artist, and he is a self-proclaimed wannabe artist, but don't mind him since we're all amateurs and he tries his best.
We're doing the 'moon/style' that melty does so we can get at least 3 times the amount of characters planned.

Also, I'm sorry for replying so late. If you're interested I can give you an email or a maybe a discord invitation for the group. Don't worry, there isn't the usual faggotry that plagues discord.

>>17262795
Don't be rude.

>>17263184
Because I don't hate all western artwork. There are many very talented posters in this thread.

i guess i won't try today then.

I tried again today, jaypi...

>>17265793
nice concept
would still waifu

The sun in the CAPTCHA looks comfy and warm
Crossboarders run amok and free
They gather to shitpost and check their dubs
The first page belongs to newfags

The clover on kek's flag is leafy and green
Discord vomits drama and pain
Hit by a flood of flavour of the month
The first page belongs to newfags

Teenagers demand sauce and curse the panda
General threads ooze cancer all day
Pointless /pol/itics kills another thread
The first page belongs to newfags

>>17267271
Oh banner ads, banner ads, with your malware!
These children have waited to see
The morning will come
When it's time for bed
The first page belongs to newfags
The first page belongs to newfags
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Hello /jp/, it's been a while.
I'd like to share a few pieces of concept art for characters from my novel.

This is a very confused lunar emissary who does not understand why humans relate rabbits to carrots. I mean, there are no carrots on the moon, after all.

>>17267308
The lower curse of her nose is at too much angle and the shadows in her eyes are too big.

The face also resembles a pig, so I don't like it personally.

>>17267308
An earth rabbit maid, her short haired sister, and a certain lunarian hermit.

The rabbit in the top left, Ethel, may appear to have long hair--but it's actually just a pair of very lengthy ears.

>>17267330
Oh. I'll relay that to the artist.

>>17267331
An old, smokestack of a moon hare reminiscing on the past.

That's all for now.

>>17267331
These are pretty good as concepts, but the alignment of eyes (relative to the rest of the face) of the left girl needs to be checked.

>>17267336
Something is not okay with the lower third of the outline of his face, particularly mouth and the upper lip with moustache. It looks kinda silly, ruining the impression.

Anyway, care to elaborate on the novel?

>>17267349
Oh, certainly. Here's my blurb.

In a tiny town, hidden among trees in the middle of nowhere, lost souls and dusty vagrants huddle in alleyways and shake in fear. In the corners of their eyes, walking among the passersby, the rabbits are coming out of hiding.

A fallen star carried with it a messenger from heaven. A white, shining angel, come to talk peace with the earth. But they had no use for her; they cut her open and stole her holy blood, leaving her to die.

Amongst fading streetlights, braving streets prowled by zombie people high on narcotics late at night, unphased by tales of a new drug said to make you 'lose yourself in their lunatic red eyes,' a man finds a white rabbit bleeding to death in a parking lot.


It's entitled A Cup of Moondust, and it's a psychological horror novel about a rabbit from the moon calling herself the lunar emissary who's come to make peace talks with the local group of earth gang rabbits. However, not all goes to plan.

If you'd like, you can read the prologue and first chapter, here.

https://pastebin.com/T5bXw0LW

I apologize in advance if I'm making too many posts about it.

>>17267271
>>17267274

What's the original tune?

>>17267404
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=29Mg6Gfh9Co

>>17267404
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=29Mg6Gfh9Co

>>17267365
Starting a novel with pretentious grandiloquent phrases might be a bad idea. Admittedly, I wrote the text below before I resumed reading and found that your text is actually fine in this regard, but I'll leave it as a reminder just in case.

Your style is quite pretentious. What is your target audience? You need to choose it carefully and cater to its needs. Generally a modern man has little time to read lengthy grandiloquent phrases as the plot yukkurily unwinds, and he might get bored before it starts getting interesting. Learn from the most successful fanfictions. You have to capture your audience from the start. I would personally suggest HPMOR (another series, yes) or Touhou mecha. Or whatever well-received fanfiction you can find on touhou-project.com.

Yes, all of this applies even if your novel is free. And a boring commercial novel probably gonna ruin your business if it's the first one.

Overall I found it to be interesting, and I want to know any available info regarding its release.

P. S. Giftrapped? Is this intentional?

>>17267612
The opening prologue is grandiloquent in an attempt to grab the reader and briefly explain the concept of a moon rabbit through a familiar, real-world event.

The rest of the text is more approachable as it is told through the lens of an average, if downtrodden, man--though the narrator/main character will sometimes slip into rambling thoughts where he describes things with exaggeration and imagery.

It's also not fan-fiction... though as you can likely tell, it is heavily inspired by Touhou.

Thanks for reading, and your feedback.
I want to release it this fall, and am working on its 3rd revision right now. I'm going to self-publish it on Amazon and perhaps a few other places, and it's not going to cost very much.

PS no that was a typo, though I might leave it, considering that the writer for the post in question could have just as easily made that error himself.

>>17267663
No, it's just that the first few lines are over-the-top. It gets better soon enough, but trying to catch the attention of a modern man with overly pretentious phrases is likely to bite you in the ass.

Yours truly, professional translator/editor and occasionally a writer as well. Please mind that I'm not a native English speaker.

>>17267685
Oh, I see. Well, I had been told many times that the first lines are the most important, so I guess I tried to make them really noteworthy.

>>17267663
Btw, your MC has got quite puffy cheeks. He seems pretty well-fed and healthy for a man who has to rob people and lives in slums next door to a drug dealer.

>>17267767
I'll relay that to my artist, as I'm pretty sure he's at least partially basing the MC's face on my own.

And I'll stop hogging the thread now. Sorry /jp/ OC people.

>>17265793
Why does she have a flag on her head?

>>17258976
Would pay for a quickie behind a Denny's

>>17267972
Because you don't browse r9k. Yes, really.

>>17267774
You seem quite popular. Why not make your own thread?

>>17268273
I'm not, I'm pretty sure that was all just me and one guy replying back and forth.
Sorry for semi-hijacking the thread, I didn't mean to do that.

>>17267308
The style creeps me out.

how do i git gud at character design /jp/

>>17269319
Thicker eyebrows and a hat.

>>17269319
she needs a silly head covering, also more frills or ribbons or other shit

we are making 2hus right

>>17268276
Can confirm.
On the latter, I don't think anybody minds.

>>17269319
When you draw 3/4 views, the eye that's farther is supposed to be smaller and partially covered by the nose. Here we see the opposite.

>>17265793
How many places do you usually post your art in. I've seen this three times now.

>>17241161
this is good

>>17269319
You act like you are their panties.

>>17271088
I want to be a cute girl's panties.

>>17134547
A drawing of Elf Yamada I'm working on~

>>17271854
legs too short, make your canvas bigger

>>17272539
Legs are fine

>>17272539
4000x4000 is big enough, senpai

I see there are a few writers here in /jp/. Would you guys like to form a writing group? We could read each other's works as we write them, give and get feedback, the works.

>>17275266
My writing comes and goes with my depression, sometimes I don't write anything for months. Then I'd go into a manic phase and vomit pages of unedited prose into the group before vanishing. I think many other /jp/sies behave the same way.

>>17275266
I'm a writer! But I don't like writing anything gross or evil.

>>17246965
Pretti gud Hec dude
>>17247692
Good stuff as always. I especially like the hands of the smallest and the very right one.
>>17247953
Me too, dude.
>>17248745
Oi that's really charming. The brush really complements the drawing itself.
>>17258976
She should go lifting. That gut is sticking out a bit too much.
>>17267308
She looks like a cute fuggboi.
>>17269319
I wish I knew. I'm pretty bad myself.
>>17272539
That's just one of many issues.
>>17272651
kek no they're not.


>>17261007
>>17265793
Thanks, dewd. I'm quite happy with how it sounds, too.
Great sketches and drawings. I like the second one especially; why is she so pale?

Another one. 12 seconds of personal glory.
https://soundcloud.com/sinsack_agi/ideas-2706

>>17275634
That'd be good for a game over continue countdown theme.

i tried today, /jp/.

>>17276602
Prove it.

>>17276602
Not very hard, apparently?

>>17275634
>She should go lifting. That gut is sticking out a bit too much
I think it's sticking out just enough. Wanna smother my face in it!

>>17276797
>>17276820
O-okay..

>>17276979
Oh, that's quite nice. I like the subtle details, like the contours of their feet and the muscles lines on their legs/arms.

Demon bitch is awfully spunky looking.

>>17276990
Thanks! I won't continue with it though; the proportions and details aren't consistent with what I had in mind. A light and mood practice with it.

Began reworking on designing the secondary characters of my personal project, got a big amount to do.

>>17276979
That demon better have a HUGE schlong

>>17278065
I'm sure you do.

>>17278561
What?

Should I learn to draw or learn Japanese?

>>17281357
You should learn to make your own decisions

>>17281357
drawing is useless, i'd rather be slightly able to speak/read/write japanese than be a half assed artist

>>17278065

>>17247019
Plan your keyframes.
Weight and balance, squash and stretch, ease in and ease out, and watch the timings.
You know, the works.

I don't really know anything about art, and I'm mostly just doing this for fun, but how does this look so far?
I'm going to work on it further later tonight, trying to learn how to shade everything properly, and I'll probably thin out the lines a bit too to make it look more organic. The lines if the finished work are still going to be fairly thick and sharp, though.

>>17281357
Are you going to read or need to read japanese in a daily basis? If not, then learn to draw amd forget about japanese.

>>17281406
I feel the opposite way. How curious.

>>17281710
he looks pregnant lmao

>>17281954
Well, that would be okay for a preschooler, and I'm not exaggerating here or shitting at you like d/ic/ks usually do. For more mature drawing you need to learn how to look at your drawing critically, flip your canvas, and align the facial features, for starters. If I were you, I would memorize the flaws, drop this picture at once and draw several more.

Once you learn to align the features properly, you have to learn how to make the face appealing. Right now it looks pretty uncanny even at the thumbnail, not to mention the full-sized pic. Don't forget to add eyebrows as well. Oh, and draw thicker necks, pl0x.

>>17282049
Yeah, you're probably right. I'll just go ahead and delete it then, I guess.

>>17282047
Bad case of beer belly, no bully.

>>17281372
>You should learn to make your own decisions
Not that anon but if I was able to make my own decisions I wouldn't be wasting all my time on the fucking Jay

For those that draw or write lewds: are you able to fap/shlick to your own material?

>>17282049
>>17282083
Actually, in addition, go fuck yourself. Your criticisms are perfectly valid and fair, but who the fuck opens up with "that would be okay for a preschooler"? Your post loses nothing of value by dropping that first bit. I know I'm awful at this, and I know that I'm just asking for trouble by not using a tablet to do this sort of thing, but all I really wanted was someone to tell me what I'm doing wrong. And sure, I appreciate you doing that, but at the same time opening with insults when someone is clearly insecure about their ability to create anything at all is kind of fucked.

>>17282137
Grow a thick skin, you big baby. You won't get anywhere with that attitude. The internet is not your hugbox.
When someone tells me I'm dog shit all it makes me is want to get better.
And I'm not him if you were wondering, and I also think you're shit.

>>17282129
Why, that's why I draw lewds in the first place! Not to be confused with artistic nude pics. Of course, only to those that actually get me hard enough.

>>17282137
I don't mind your retaliating. Please do so if it makes you feel better. Just mind that only those who aren't discouraged by harsh criticism can really excel at anything creative.

wew lads

>>17282173
This is true. Every learning artist needs that guy who tells them their art is fucking trash. You'll never improve otherwise.

>>17282173
I know, I apologize. I just took that comment as a personal attack, when I shouldn't have.

r8

>>17282244
That's not OC, I've seen it before.

The paradox of Theseus' Ship, as told by the ancient Greeks, posits to the reader the situation of a boat travelling across the seas. As it travels its captain Theseus and crew must replace equipment, wooden planks, railings and so forth as they break or wear out. Eventually, every piece of the ship wears and is replaced. The Greeks would ask: is Theseus commanding the same ship he first set off with? Or is it an entirely different ship, since all of its parts are replacements?

I have recently been considering /jp/ (and to a broader extent 4chan) along the same lines. When the big Jay was first created, it had a distinct audience of defectors from /a/ and Something Awful, a discussion repertoire of VNs, Touhou games, 2ch shitposts and other weeb nonsense, a meido that moderated lightly, and a distinct culture that discouraged the use of outside trends such as greentext.

However over time all of these elements of /jp/ board culture have been replaced. The old users have either gone to Gensokyo or forced out of their basements, and are replaced by a new crop of children from Twitter, Reddit, Tumblr, and other boards. Most topics except Touhou have been discussed to death and are replaced with cancerous generals. Meido was long killed off and replaced with the jan-man. Finally the old BBS-influenced board culture has been replaced by the same bland mix of /v/ and social media/IRC chatroom culture. Even the old weeb ads for onaholes have been replaced by the same clickbait scam malware ads that you will see on any news site.

The URL resolves the same as it did in 2008...but am I visiting the same message board?

>>17282173
>Why, that's why I draw lewds in the first place!
That's interesting to hear. Usually I just write for reasons of intellectual masturbation but lately I've been looking for something I can pursue that isn't wrapped in five layers of irony.

>>17282279
Interesting observation that definitely holds a bit of truth, but is this really the thread for it?

I appreciate that you recognize your writing is essentially just masturbation but, on the flipside, I don't appreciate this nihilist self-aware attitude you take about it.

If writing is your deal you could use it to seek understanding of people/the universe/yourself, rather than for shitposts.

>>17282279
>a distinct culture that discouraged the use of outside trends such as greentext.
"who quot" is a neo-/jp/ 2010-11 era shitposter creation. It's the same as those retards who go "reddit spacing" nowadays.

>>17282279
Well, I'm not sure if I can say I was being perfectly honest here. Surely, some days, when my lower head gets the better of me, I'm frantically drawing and shopping lewds to relieve my pent-up tension, but... Right now I'm slowly drawing a BDSM picture of Sakuya with her two mistresses teasing her, and I'm pretty sure I would never fap to it myself, as I'm not particularly a fan of medium or hardcore BDSM and outright dislike anything with even the slight homosexual undertones (although I still find such jokes funny or make excuses in regards to imizu's art). Still, I'm drawing my idea without stopping. So am I drawing it for others to indulge themselves fantasizing about it? Am I just venting my subconscious frustration because I willingly refuse to lead social life and get myself a girlfriend (if, of course, I would be able to get one with my bad speaking skills and brutal looks)?

My explanation is this: (a) I want to get better at drawing, that's why I'm drawing more and more complex pictures with naked bodies as a clear sheet on which every flaw is most visible; (b) I want others to enjoy my works, which includes being able to draw something that makes your boner rip your pants in an instant; thus I'm conducting an artistic exploration of eroticism.

>>17282237
Don't apologize. These are the kind of people who insult others as if it's routine. You shouldn't give them a free pass if you don't like it. The advice is good, though and you should be able to take it onboard nonetheless.

>>17281954
There are a few things in this drawing that I think you could improve on.

The hat should be pointy, you said you weren't using a tablet I think you should really invest in one.
It looks like it's drawn in paint, you should get a better drawing program if that's the case.
The skin has patches of white for some reason.
Keep practicing, draw everyday and never give up.
Yes I know this has been pointed out but she is lacking eyebrows.

>>17281357
Try learning Japanese and if you can't seem to stick to it start drawing.

>>17276979
I like your sketches

>>17269319
Always start simple, that's the advice I'll give you.

Here's a lineart of one of my oc's.

>>17282183
>Every learning artist needs that guy who tells them their art is fucking trash
but what if you already tell yourself that your art is fucking trash

>>17284419
You need to know WHY it's shit. You can't learn from yourself, you need outside opinions and criticism.

>>17278065
>>17281710
cool! the lady reminds me of bayonetta a little.

>>17284421
Actually you can, but not at the initial stages.

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　　　|皿皿皿ﾉ__ﾉ ￣ ￣ '':;:,..　　,...;:''"
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This witch comes to your place and says he wants to eat some willows with you
What do you do /jp/?

>>17285950
*she

>>17285950
I ask who she is and how she got here then suggest we eat bread instead

>>17284646
I always wondered how do you make sjis art?

>>17286012
It used to be done in like notepad but these days, there's software for it

>>17286033
what is that software called?

>>17286038
I have （´д｀）Edit
http://www.gigafree.net/tool/aasupo/edit.html
And shitarabian
http://aavideo.s11.xrea.com/shitarabian/

>>17285950
Willows can shoot spears of fire, so I'll pass

>>17214239
Added palettes. I know it's not worth much.

>>17286011
I love your lines.

>>17286223
Nice. Do you have any characters other than Akiha so far?

>>17275482
Maybe if you had people who would be willing to read your work and give feedback, you'll get yourself back in the saddle more often? I don't know, but I think it's worth a try!

>>17275523
I don't like reading or writing gross stuff too, but evil is sometimes unavoidable, if only to give the good guys something to fight!

Maybe I could get the ball rolling. Here is a short story I just edited recently. I would love to hear your feedback, like which part you think needs work, drags on too long, missing, etc.

https://pastebin.com/Gjr9fRmr

>>17275266
I'd be interested in that, but it might just be a few of us. Writing's not as popular an art as say drawing.

>>17275523
I began writing seriously because I was tired of seeing evil things in poor taste become popular.

>>17286793
>I'd be interested in that, but it might just be a few of us. Writing's not as popular an art as say drawing.
That completely fine, a writing group doesn't have to be a big group anyway.

>I began writing seriously because I was tired of seeing evil things in poor taste become popular.
I began when I got a little smartphone I could use to write with while traveling. I've been making up stories in my head for much longer, but I eventually wanted to write them down, at first so I don't forget them, but eventually, I thought someone might be interested in reading them too, so I started studying how to write good.

>>17286780
The big thing I'm seeing here is punctuation mistakes. Capitalizing improper nouns in the middle of sentences, putting commas after other punctuation marks.
Be careful not to use the same descriptor word too often, like 'suddenly' to denote something unexpected happening.
Putting onomotopoeia words in sentences (uhm, eh, ah) as if they were actual words isn't completely unacceptable in dialogue, but be sparing with it. In the form of writing, it just becomes bloat if you use it all the time.

All in all, this reads more like the script to a game scenario or something than a short story.

I was also going to complain that while this is told from the first person perspective, the narrator never seems to take part in what's happening. However, that appears to be a plot point in some way, so I'm not sure what to say about it.

>>17286657
Although creating a character is relatively easy and fast, I don't plan to add more characters since akiha is just a placeholder, and I really hope she stays as one.

>>17286867
Thanks for the feedback! I'll definitely get those on board for the next time I revise the story!

I just have a question:
>All in all, this reads more like the script to a game scenario or something than a short story.
I'm not quite sure what you mean by this. Is it because it's dislogue-heavy? Should I then reduce the amount of dialogue? Or do you mean I'm lacking in description? Though I'm not sure just how much more of the empty room they spend the whole story in I should be describing...

>I was also going to complain that while this is told from the first person perspective, the narrator never seems to take part in what's happening. However, that appears to be a plot point in some way, so I'm not sure what to say about it.
A-Ah! Don't spoil it!

Just kidding, but seriously, what did you think about it? When it came to me, I felt so clever and smug and pleased with myself, but I'd like to know how others thought about it. Did it feel jarring and unpleasant at some point?

>>17286989
It is dialogue-heavy, but that isn't necessarily a problem. The issue is more the sort of loose way it is written, with little attention given to formatting convention. If you read a little more, you'll probably see what I mean.

I was especially jarred with the "*KACHINK*" at the end. That is something you would never see outside of a comic book or video game.

As far as the bit at the end, it was just confusing. There's a character who is speaking, but the reader doesn't know who it is because their name is never mentioned. So the reader is wondering who is missing, when they are going to do something so you know who they are.
And then at the end they suddenly pop up in present-tense, when the story is told from past-tense, and it refers to a 'you,' when the narrator could only be talking to the characters. it is sort of clever I suppose conceptually, but it wasn't handled in the best way.

>>17287012
>It is dialogue-heavy, but that isn't necessarily a problem. The issue is more the sort of loose way it is written, with little attention given to formatting convention. If you read a little more, you'll probably see what I mean.
>I was especially jarred with the "*KACHINK*" at the end. That is something you would never see outside of a comic book or video game.
I see, I see. I think I'm getting what you mean now. I don't think I've studied formatting convention yet. I'll get on that, thanks!

>As far as the bit at the end, it was just confusing. There's a character who is speaking, but the reader doesn't know who it is because their name is never mentioned. So the reader is wondering who is missing, when they are going to do something so you know who they are.
And then at the end they suddenly pop up in present-tense, when the story is told from past-tense, and it refers to a 'you,' when the narrator could only be talking to the characters. it is sort of clever I suppose conceptually, but it wasn't handled in the best way.
Hmm, I see... that's a bit disappointing. I really want to deliver it right though, so I'll try to find a way.

>>17281710
Continuing.

>>17287159
I've always wondered about this, but never really bothered to bring it up till now, but... shouldn't it be 'heroine'?

>>17287236
Hero can be gender neutral too. For what I'm doing it fits better to name her like that.

>>17287159
Womanlets... when will they learn?

>>17287236
>>17287271
It's like you can't spell Hero without Her or something, right?

>>17287297
You also can't spell Hero without ero, right? Right?

>>17287159
Right?

I think I'm doing good so far. I usually suck harder than this at painting.

>>17287494
I like how vivid your colors are. Keep going.

I tried today, /jp/...

>>17286011
that's cute; i like it

>>17288585
cute cotton candy hair

>>17275667
It is rather hectic, yea. Thanks for listening dude.
>>17277004
>>17288772
And again, really nice stuff. Love that you're so productive and sharing these days.
>>17287159
Good job, though your shading let's everything seem so soft, which can be very weird at times.
>>17288585
>>17287494
You both (I assume) have big issues anatomically speaking, but a solid natural sense on how do design a pic, though very unpolished.
I hope you will keep going and get better.

Here's something I whipped up today. Had an idea under the shower.
https://soundcloud.com/sinsack_agi/rpg-seastuff-wip

>>17289856
Holy heck both of those were mine. I guess I'll work on more anatomy stuff, I thought my techniques were finally perfect. Wish you could've told me that before finishing this.

>>17289938
>I thought my techniques were perfect
Not to rap on you but that mindset seems bad? That is to say anyone can always and should strive to improve.

>>17289968
Perfect wasn't a good word choice, but "good enough".

>>17289938
Doesn't look that bad IMO. It's fine with your style.

Any of you dudes have the Cirno guide?

>>17134547
Just a drawing of one of my characters...
Haven't drawn the clothes yet.

>>17287159

>>17292689
Is "Hero" of the dwarf race?

>>17293491
No, just a small human.

>>17292689
I like your males. They look like hot latino guys.

>>17282173
>Why, that's why I draw lewds in the first place! Not to be confused with artistic nude pics. Of course, only to those that actually get me hard enough.
That's good to know