/jp/ - Otaku Culture

I enrolled a Songwriting course and this is my first song with actual lyrics, /jp/.
http://vocaroo.com/i/s05JYJ6ObpKt
Lyrics http://pastebin.com/TXCkSB2W

I'm not exactly a singer, but the goal is showing the idea.

made thing

>>12642032
I don't know, man. Practise more. For now, try to not record inside a tin-can, with a mic proper mic.

>>12642014
What the HELL is that dude

I recognize that girl. I'm not sure I should feel proud of that fact though.

>>12642087
Looks like he was trying for a "photo-realistic" style.

>>12642161
Spookster

>>12642161
Why are all your drawings called temp? Why not better give them a real name?

A little sketch, training a bit with curvy proportions.

>>12642212
I like Dolores or Veronica. if I ever have a female drawing I'll call her like that.

>>12642214
>606x1100
>3,72 MB
FUCK

>>12642232
SHIT
SHIT MAN I CLICKED IT

Now I have BonziBuddy installed.

>>12642136
Photo-realism takes days to get done properly. More of an observation painting done in 1 hour, thus the sketchiness.
Input is preferred to sarcasm, but fine rendering wasn't the goal from the start.

>>12642131
You've been around for too long. We are one now.

>>12642232
Forgot to set down the resolution, it's still at 300.

>>12642212
Whatever gets saved as temp is stuff I don't care to have permanently on my computer. I'm terrible with naming things anyways.

>>12642272
Wow, rude!

>>12642240
that looks like something you obtain taping the tablet pen to your cat's hands pal, if you expected something more than funny comments you should have posted something not half-assed instead. probably you still need to lurk more even after all this time

Draw a cute girl

>>12642214
>3.72 MB
Fishy as HELL

>>12642301
Minute made Cute.

My digital drawing of Aya Ueto donw with a mouse. hope you like it.

http://aortafx.deviantart.com/art/Aya-Ueto-Digital-Painting-462331334

>>12642281
Whatever jays your pee, man.

I guess I'll do a series out of this.

>>12642568
You drew this with a mouse? Holy shit.

I added more shading, DL this version kudasai

I want to hug him warmly

Last thread I saw someone asking about the /jp/ music project.

If you're looking for the tracks, the entire dropbox can be found (still) through this link: https://www.dropbox.com/sh/7vymrf03krqs545/xMtFnbHOQo

That includes the whole of project 1 and a failed 2.5 project folder (which was basically just recompiling 2's songs but adding album art).

About the project itself, it was really just a collection of anons compiling a list of tracks they made for (or before) the project. It happened twice, the first being more diversely populated than the second, also the organizer was different for each one. We sort of got complacent on the second one and only really worried about the album art on the day of the deadline - it didn't go well with the organizer and he decided to release the album as is. Fair enough, but some decided to push through with adding the album art for the sake of completion, but only 2 people ever resubmitted their tracks, so they didn't bother anymore.

That said, I wouldn't mind doing it again. I still have access to the old dropbox and email I used to organize the project. Also, i still have contact to all the contributors (for project one only, unfortunately), since they had to mail me to access the dropbox. No telling if they're still up for it though.

>>12642988
I'm all for releasing at least once a Comiket, that'd be a generous deadline and more artists could participate. From what I've seen from the previous projects, most artists had to contribute twice to make an album.

Also I don't think you need to contact the first contributors, the project is for people lurking the board after all. If they're still around, they're welcome.

Should the project be in a separate thread not to saturate this one? An IRC channel? I personally wouldn't mind keeping it here because I both draw and compose, but I don't speak for everyone.

>>12643047
To be honest, we just settled in what was already the /jp/ project thread because the idea come up there. We never made our own thread and updates were never often enough to deserve one. I wouldn't mind just posting in the OC thread, if they would have us. However I'd like to discussions to stay in /jp/, so that passers-by would have a chance to notice and possibly, contribute.

I don't know what it is but it looks pretty spooky. Perfect for Halloween.

Sometimes I don't have a clue what to draw.

>>12643067
Well count me in for C87 then! If you volunteer to take the lead on organizing files and stuff, create some basic guidelines so contributing folks can join and it's set.

>>12643137
This is clearly a Ghost from Tibia evolving into a spider.

>>12643153
Sure. I'll get everything ready soon, but you can start emailing me, as before, at jpmusicproject1@gmail.com, so I can invite you to the dropbox when it's ready

>>12643153

I liked old tibia. My ISP didn't though and we fell into one of those awful bandwidth traps during the dial up days. Early 2000s internet was a horrible memory.

>>12642914
I gave up

>>12642568
>patreon
>street art
>that dork beard
Just fuck off

>>12643557

Whats wrong with patreons?

>>12643165
The dropbox is ready and I'm ready to invite people into the dropbox if anyone wants to join.

As for
>some basic guidelines

I suppose the old ones will do:

Anyone can join, and the minimal requirement will be that it's somehow "music" and not just "you saying 'fuck' in the mic a couple of times"

Furthermore, to make a proper release, we'll also need an artist as soon as possible, to immediately avert the last minute fiasco of project 2.

Now if we want to be ambitious and take the suggestion of >>12643047 to release in Comiket (I doubt this would be possible), we will need to set a tighter deadline to match the date and we'll need someone who would actually go to the trouble of wading through the bureaucracy of Comiket, set up a stall, etc. In other words, a whole lot more problems than I think a disorganized bunch of /jp/sies can handle.

>>12643646
It's not an official, physical Comiket release, just a spiritual one, released on the same date. There are some circles who do that, specially baka gaijins like us.

>>12643653
Ah. Now you're making sense. Sure.

When was it again? Best make sure it's a realistic date.

>>12643661
Around New Year.

>>12642240
>Photo-realism takes days to get done properly
I think you're thinking about hyper-realism. If so, the references you have been using will not suffice. Although I do suspect you're thinking about photorealism, and no, it doesn't take a few days to do a study like this. The goal of photo-realism studies is to capture light, as the name suggests, to properly convey forms and value separation. What you have done is merely taking colour and isolated details and assembling them onto a flat surface, disregarding the construction of the shape using values. The result is a horribly incohesive layer of color that looks flat when viewed near or far. Link related is an example of good photostudy: http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2013/224/c/f/_20130812_by_ra_lilium-d6hrcns.jpg
Remember to capture the light, anon.

>>12643732
I can do that better in grayscale, how to deal with stuff changing color all the time, supposing I want to directly work with color? The constant color picking causes all this isolating.

>>12642568
If you think you will impress the /jp/sies you are sorely mistaken. A drawing from photograph is not impressive at all when there is so little personal input to the piece. You are making a "photograph" when the camera does a better job than you. There is an odd stiffness within your painting.

>>12642568
You're in the wrong board. go here: >>>/ic/catalog
don't feel obliged to come back, in general normalfags aren't very welcome here, specially if begging for money

>>12643754
He's a street painter, copying photographies is standard practice. He's rather good, the stiffness is a minor thing compared to the many shitty realism I see on walls around.
Gotta give props for the stubbornness on using only mouse though, next step is going full etch'a'sketch.

>>12642568

Had to see what the fuss was about--are you joking? Photoretouching isn't digital painting. You maybe able to trick the stupidest of deviantartits but not me. I don't even want to redirect you to /ic/ because they'll rip you a new asshole, just leave this site.

>>12643781

even these suck

>>12643782
>Submitted on June 20
Stop falling for the bait.

>>12642683
Keep going, we need different types of art.

>>12643781
>He's rather good
best chuckle I had in a while
>>12643782
Done already.

>>12642683
Do cat mouth chan next

>>12643787
BItch ass niqqa is u fuggin joke chillaxin yo kebab like datt git out tha O' da Jay-P turf mathafuckar

>>12643768
Cute but saggy boobs.

>>12643768
Cute but not in my 2hu folder. Fixing it right now.

I made this, it's meant to be a theme song for one of my close friends. I hope you can hear the emotion I put into it.

MIDI: https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/30614076/ChrisHoopersTheme.mid
MP3: https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/30614076/mp3/ChrisHoopersTheme_.mp3

>>12643787

I never see oekaki in here. Which site has the best program?

>>12643937
i think the issue is most oekaki/tegaki sites are dead

>>12643935
10/10

>>12643937
>>>/i/
Just use the built in program there.

I wanted to draw something for halloween but I'm still too depressed. sorry /jp/

>>12643768
I like your drawings a lot. They're very simple and cute

>>12643989
I take it you've never been there? /i/ has been busted for years.

>>12643943
There are literally hundreds of them that are plenty alive, especially the big ones like oekakibbs and thewaterducts. It is true many have shifted to paintchats.

>>12643573
Because it's for pretentious hipster douchebags aside from using it as an alternative to kickstarter to fund your R-18 project

>>12643137
spoopy

>>12642568
Just how the fuck this shopped photos faggot found this place.
man and I thought /jp/ touched the bottom with Tnox. what the actual fuck

>>12644245
>June 20
Seriously, are all of you this dumb to fall for it?

>>12644254
What are you even talking about
give me a single good reason for someone that isn't the author to post that here. trolling? seriously?

>>12644256
Reminds me of an actress

>>12644291
Looking at it completed I most certainly agree, though I'm not one who'd be able to name whom the resemblance belongs to.

scare

>>12644660
Where's the spooky in this? I Just see a cute girl

>>12643663
Sounds alright. About 2 full months. We'll need a more specific date a bit later, but for now last week of December to first week of January is a proper deadline, I think.

>>12642014
>>12642683
That's absolutely horrifying dude, what's wrong with you?

Well, happy halloween /jp/

>>12645141
What the hell is wrong with her feet

>>12645151
maybe he's a foot binding otaku

>>12645141
I like the dress a lot

>>12642071
This is the equivalent of a sketch in music. I only got my notebook's built in mic anyways.

>>12644716
b-but she's definitely acting strange!

http://com.nicovideo.jp/community/co2506617

>>12645569
Yes, having a neutral expression and looking forward is definitely strange.

>>12645860
Okuu needs to lose weight

>>12645860
Pretty tasty fat, but your line quality is also all over the place. You want to avoid such huge, blurred lines like on her thighs and bikini bottoms when the lace on her top is so thin and crisp.

>>12645976
I've always struggled with keeping my line weight consistent. I've tried to keep it towards 14px but I always find myself instead erasing my linework with my linework tool by merely increasing its size habitually. I did however do this within one day though, which is far faster than I used to be able to do.

>>12645860
Nice!! Do you have a pixiv?

>>12645141
HIPS LEGS
Looks like you scaled the picture down on the x-axis, making her look vertically.
Aside from that, your coloring seems neat.

A small hole you can swim in to.

I guess I gotta start working on my programming some more eventually... For now I guess I'll just keep painting stuff until I can be bothered with it.

>>12646446

Ah, I forgot to resize it!

>>12644792
Don't be rude to the new vomit-chan.

I tried again today, /jp/.

TRICK THEN TREAT

>>12646838
Whar a lewd loli

>>12645569
previous version was much better
Now this is generic girl no 93275

>>12645141
it looks like you put too much focus into the details and colouring, rather than looking at it as a whole. for example, her feet/shoes look like an afterthought.
>>12646300
cute, i love salamanders
>>12646760
top middle looks super interesting, but you're not planning to finish any of these, right? bottom left reminds me of myst
i think you need to work on your values more though, the black and white ones don't read well

>>12645141
Cute, your rendering and clothing are usually quite nice but you need to work on proportions and not hiding hands
I like the dress too

>>12646892
Did you just sass sleepy about values? Looks like you need to check yourself before she trashes your ass on the ball court.

>>12645982
You've improved at least, but you should really try working on your construction before doing lines. You'll be able to draw from more angles, rather than just front if you do.

A lot of your drawings lack that, especially the older ones.

>>12647136
Oh look, the clown is back

>>12647159
>>>/ic/

>>12647175
He was being helpful.
There is nothing wrong with criticism. I also agree on the black and white ones being hard to make out, specifically #4.

>>12647230
>There is nothing wrong with constructive criticism
Fixed, and agreed

Fiu, took me the whole aftertoon but at least finished it, here is my drawing for Halloween.

>>12647433
>804x900
>3.73
Learn to export your shit already.

>>12647433
Its cute man, but seriously 3.73 MB?

>>12647433
>3.73 MB
What spooky thing did you put in this

>>12647461
>>12647529
>>12647540
Why do you even care about that considering 3.73Mb is almost nothing ? The image is supposed to be quite huge with a high resolution, just quickly resized it for the 4chan size limit.

>>12647540
Its filled with witchware. I tried downloading and now the sys32 of my laptop transformed into bats

>>12647547
It's a black and white small res png, normally that makes it a small image but it's spookily large

>>12647547
There's nothing really wrong with it per se just a little weird. Like a really limp handshake. Yeah sure it's not "bad" but it's not what you expect. Also it's spooky.

>>12647547
You can post the same image with under 100kb without a perceptible quality drop. Instead of sizing it down but keeping the huge-ass filesize, why don't you post it in a higher resolution or smaller filesize? A jpg 80% is more than enough for a B&W sketch.

>>12645860
That leg/hip area looks really offputting.

How do I unsubscribe from this blog ‍ ‍

Happy halloween /jp/

https://soundcloud.com/moon-tone/witches-brew

>>12647547
Please check your university speed internet privilege.

And the colored version.

>>12647547
>The image is supposed to be quite huge with a high resolution
>804x900
that's not huge and resolution is pretty low.

>>12648152
> the original size is quite huge
> quickly resized it

>>12647811
I didn't like your earlier tracks but this one is pretty good. It sounds like it could fit in SOTN.

Happy Halloween!

>>12643933
I think the bubbly sound of the synths tone the feeling a bit down and gets funny, but the music is good.

>>12647811
The base notes seem to be apart from the song atmosphere, but the melody is very good. This could greatly benefit from some stereo exploration.

>>12648177
>quickly resized it
>this invalidates the big resolution is responsible for big filesize claim

Happy halloween /jp/

It's rushed so I couldn't finish most of it

Not really original content, but I hope you enjoy it.
1/3

>>12648614
2/3

>>12648618

>>12647547
Kindly off yourself.

Does anyone know how to help stop my jellyfish? I finally changed it so it can be an increment that also has a speed limit but if he's moving and I want to go into the other direction it is very hard.

http://a.pomf.se/vbojpj.webm

http://pastebin.com/0TKmUXQC
I imagine I will have to make an if statement for a positive and negative value so I can change them?

>>12648702
You can try to make the increment double in size if it's a different sign from the current velocity. If you're planning on implementing proper physics, you can ignore it until you implement friction and that should solve it.

>>12648724

Oh I see. I forgot about the linear drag. Thank you.

>>12648702
Why does your jellyfish have an eye?

>>12648765

To make him appealing. People think things with big eyes are cute.

>>12648765
I think it'd be cuter without that eye. Or at last, that eye, in particular, to me looks more creepy than cute.

>>12648765
Besides his reason for the huge eye, jellyfish are capable of seeing.

>>12648536
Cute! and sexy

>>12645141
I kind your coloring do you have twitter or pixiv?

>>12646760
I love the colors. Really feels like the beginning of an adventure.
Though your pictures with humanoids in them doesn't strike me as good.

>>12648536
Why are they out of candy?

Well, I tried to go outside instead of drawing all night for the first time in 6 years and ended up getting in a fight and breaking my only pair of glasses. Happy halloween /jp/.

>>12649073
>ended up getting in a fight
Wow, you must've been a douchebag.

>>12649073
How'd you end up in a fight?

>>12649083
>>12649086
no blogging
[spoilers]I accidentally bumped into someone while trying to close out my tab. I fucking hate my life.

>>12649073
Stay here. We love you, friend.

sorry i'm late
but happy halloween /jp/

>>12649132
Your on your way. Please observe proper anatomy when it comes to facial structures and arm joints.
Marisa looks great, not so much for Reimu.

>>12649136
yea, I kinda rushed Reimu
I had more fun drawing Marisa, it turned out better

>>12648979
I'm sorry, I don't post my art anywhere but here. I don't draw that often.

http://a.pomf.se/rnssmr.webm

Now he has a shock ball to destroy those pesky fat fish!

I wish I weren't so lazy. Fortunately I've made some 'big' progress in terms of some of the programming. Once the fish chase if they get too close I can then work on something more intricate like talking to other jellyfish.

I have no idea how to do that though.

>>12649374
So this is like Ecco the Jellyfish?

>>12649383

Yes. I am not ashamed to admit it! I'd like to try and bring something new to the table but so far I haven't been able to do much. Plus I don't want it to turn into some awful gimmick. I'd rather it be fun to play.

>>12649374
>I have no idea how to do that though
here's a hint. alternatively you could make jellyfishes develop mouths, hands for sign language or smartphones for reaction image communication

>>12649395

No I meant the programming required...

>>12649396
But programming is hard.

>>12649398

Using google helps. I tried using one of the unity answers places once and screwed up the question and panicked and then figured it out before it even got approved so I panicked even more. It's much better to just search around and read documentation.

>>12649396
I don't remember that Ecco did, though I'm sure you were able to talk to other dolphins. Probably a button press? Or maybe just by bumping into them?

Anyway, you can check, on button press if there exists a jellyfish beside the main jelly in the direction it's facing.

It's probably much easier to implement collision detection first, so you can easily tell if a jellyfish is beside your jelly

>>12649396
Bind a key to run something like public void fishTalk() in the level and have it break; if the jellyfish is too far away. Simple, but would have issues dealing with multiple jellys that are close and interactive.

>>12649475

I'm not sure what that means but I will try to figure it out.

>>12649402
>I tried using one of the unity answers places once and screwed up the question and panicked and then figured it out before it even got approved so I panicked even more

Somewhere, 5 years from now, someone is going to have your exact problem. They are going to find your thread, and in it there will just be 1 reply: "nvm fixed it myself"


>>12649411
Ecco talked and interacted with things using his sonar shot. I'm also slightly concerned there are like 2 or 3, creator included, who want it to be Ecco like but seem to have not spent much time playing Ecco.

>>12649506

No I was sure to explain how I fixed it.

>>12649498
I dont know how unity works, it says you can use javascript, but I have no idea how you're coding so this may not be useful.

This is where the key handler has all the button commands for each level, my game has about 10 but this is just an example. So what happens is when I press button 3, which is defined in the KeyHandler class, it trys to run the setTalk() in the fish or jelly or whatnot class.
public void handleInput() {
if(Keys.isPressed(Keys.BUTTON3)) fish.setTalk();}

Then in the fish/jelly class you have your called loop thing that trys to determine if the player is close enough to trigger the event.
setTalk(){
if(Math.abs(player.getx() - x) < 120 || Math.abs(player.gety() - y) < 120) {(interaction code goes here)}}

Again, no idea if this is remotely helpful, but just throwing it out there in the off chance it is.

>>12649521

I think I understand now. I use C#

>>12649506
Well I don't wish to rip ecco off wholesale.

>>12648951
Thanks
>>12649023
She ate them all

A bit too late, but what the heck.
Happy Halloween, /jp/!

Made this quickly (with a mouse, could be arsed to tablet)

>>12649969
Cute

>>12650100
I don't get it

>>12651117
Dat Stravinskey

I posted this a couple threads ago, but now I've taken the time to color it.

>>12649969
>>12647433
Nice work, good job!
>>12646838
Lewd... and good.
>>12645860
It's good to see you have improved your drawing again.
Delicious Okuu's okuus too!

>>12649616
Please do post your game so I can play. I would love to give feedback and enjoy some comfy as fuck floating around.

>>12648070
>>12647433
Yeah, fuck off back to /a/ drawthread
you're also cunt anyway, nothing of value will be lost

Mod, fuck off

>>12652974
Janny actively supports crossposting.

About a week ago I posted a story about Nue, and got some helpful feedback. Here is the updated version, I hope the problems pointed out have been resolved.
http://electric-ant.deviantart.com/art/Goin-UFOin-433590353

>>12653871
Write a story about how I become a great erotic artist and take revenge on my clan buying the whole village with the dark powers of porn money and fame, turning it into the capital of european doujins

A quick sketch of Watamote.

>>12652657

I will probably post something soon once I get some more functions working. I want to get talking to NPCs, with a text box. Put some things onto the pause menu, HP and working transitions. Right now my transitions doesn't quite work.

I don't understand how IENumerator yield functions work. I followed a tutorial right but it has never worked for me.

outside of speaking and transitions the rest shouldn't take too long if I'm not lazy.

>>12654692
Looks like a sketch with a certain dairy product as the template.

>>12654692
A quick sketch of Guacamole

How dorky would it be for a gaijin to release a game during comiket?

>>12655118
So long as it's not shit, use the fact you're a gaijin to your advantage.
Maybe some people will want to see what a foreigner can do.

>>12655127
They really don't care if you're a foreigner. In fact they want to have even less to do with you.

>>12655127
That's an interesting point, how would one go about advertising in this case?
Only posting it here wouldn't be very effective but I'm not sure how to approach it

>>12655142
Would they be more or less inclined to shank me if I was a foreigner?.

>>12655150
If by shank you mean ignore

http://misakoisaqt.tumblr.com/post/101498927222

Hi guys, I made a new song. I really like the ending of this one, I love the shoegazey sound of it. Though I'm not sure if I totally like how the song kicks in.

Anyways, hope you like it.

>>12642032
I would really recommend not going into any further course teaching songwriting because while they may give you helpful tips you will only ever make good music by loving to make and play music and by practicing for hours and hours and years until you think you're a little less shit than you were the year before, then you keep trying to improve after that. Not learning in some school course.

>>12655232
I would like it if you used some different synths. Those things sound very obnoxious to my ears.

Maybe you could upload all the audio files/synth program files so I could try a remix? I'm no good, but it would give me something to do for a while instead of just drinking until I throw up every night.

>>12655232
This is probably the worst piece advice I have ever received, anon.

But your song is cute! Shoegaze is my least favorite genre and I could still appreciate it, although I can't quite catch the lyrics. And maybe it's the shitty phones I'm using, but it could use some more bass.

>>12655649
Not that guy, but actually, this is the first time I've heard of songwriting as an educational course.

I guess it's up to you, if you think they're actually teaching you useful things and not just stuff you already know, or providing you with motivation. Because my fear is, they might be fleecing you.

>>12655687
It's a free course and it's been proving rather useful. I have always been satisfied with my melodies and my writing (even poems), but was never able to actually put lyrics into a song or create a song out of lyrics.

The classes are similar to screenwriting classes I've had, in that they show you some rules and general directions, methods and structure. And of course, this might sound very stiff if you are all about muh artistic freedom, but breaking the rules is just a matter of time.

This is like learning color theory or even standard music theory, in a sense that everything is possible, but having a bit of education on landmarks and starting points greatly benefits your craft. All three of my recent sketches went way better than any of my failed attempts in the past, where I counted only on my guts.

>>12655722
>free
All you had to say.

Does anyone know how to use invoke repeating for unity? I thought it would repeat the script over and over but I guess there's no delay between the steps?
http://pastebin.com/AqvKBe0u

also how do I make a value be in an opposite direction but keep a certain value? I am trying to use this:

rigidbody2D.velocity = -(rigidbody2D.velocity * 0.75f);

I want it so you get pushed a certain amount so if you're going slow you still get pushed away long enough to not be stun locked.

Once I figure that last one out I could do something else neat with it.

About the music compilation project, in light of a very recent e-mail I received, I think my explanation of what we're doing may not be clear enough. Let me explain:

We're putting together music that we, ourselves, made. Putting other people's music without permission in the album may be troublesome in many ways, as I'm sure you understand. If we're talking about theme however, that is unrestricted. Doujin/Touhou/etc. remixes, completely original music, what have you. All is welcome.

Also, another part of what we need for the project is the album art. Ideally, we'd need 2 - one for the front and one for the back. More art is better, of course, as this will allow us more pages, such as "inside front" or, if one is truly enterprising, a (fake) CD design. Of course, there's no real CD since it's just going to be just a .zip file anyway, but the idea is there and it's fun.

If you have any other question, or if you want to contribute to the project, you can email me at jpmusicproject1@gmail.com so I can invite you to the dropbox

>>12655863
How does dropbox work? Do I have to download some crazy program? I would rather just send everything in an email.

>>12655920
Unfortunately, yes, but I wouldn't mind being your middleman for uploading to the dropbox. In any case, email you can me.

>>12655920
Unfortunately, yes, but I wouldn't mind being your middleman for uploading to the dropbox. In any case, you can email me.

>>12655851

I don't need help anymore. The problems were solved.

>>12651121
Thank you for your interest.

>>12655970
Tei is meryl streep?!

>>12642988
Yo, anon who asked last thread here. Thanks for replying, so it's a compilation album? Ahh thought it was an actual group collaboration :/
Is there a specific theme or anything?

Still, wouldn't mind giving it a go if more people are interested. Anyone else up for this?

Also, think I figured out how that creepy HL2 radio loop was made. Thoughts?

https://a.tumblr.com/tumblr_negp8aweWN1srdovqo1.mp3#_=_

>>12656576
Please refer to my explanation here:
>>12655863
Hopefully that should clear up any question. I'm not sure what you mean between "compilation" and "collaboration", but the intention is we make music individually and collect them into an album. I'm not very sure which word that would fall into.

>https://a.tumblr.com/tumblr_negp8aweWN1srdovqo1.mp3#_=_
2spooky
I like it, though. Wouldn't probably need to be longer if it's a proper loop. Nothing kills the spook than a repetitive ambient sound. You can submit it or any other track you made for the project.

>>12646838
Nice work

>>12647811
>https://soundcloud.com/moon-tone/witches-brew

You've improved since the last post; only thing would be to ease up on the pads and strings + increase dynamics/lower compression for low end (can't really hear the LH/bass)

Wonder if this'll sound like with additional bells/glockenspiels/croatles or an organ...

>>12655232
jesus tone down the mix clipping game too strong
not really a big fan of shoegaze so can't comment on that
but yeah give the mixdown another look. Sounds like you tried to boost everything to hell trying to get the mix as loud as possible

>>12655479
"lol it's not edm so its shit"

>>12655687
Oh boy, you're gonna shit yourself when you find out about Berklee
But yeah most songwriting/production courses are obvious scams, still if rich kids wanna become the next top DJ, who are we to stop them?

>>12655863
So there's no actual chat then? Seems kinda troublesome discussing over threads/email

>>12656614
>So there's no actual chat then? Seems kinda troublesome discussing over threads/email
It's worked for two projects so far. There isn't much to talk about for the most part anyway. Just some regular updates on status and deadline from me and some discussion on specific tracks from time-to-time.

>>12656576
>>12656576
Please refer to my explanation here:
>>12655863
Hopefully that should clear up any question. I'm not sure what you mean between "compilation" and "collaboration", but the intention is we make music individually and collect them into an album. I'm not very sure which word that would fall into.

>https://a.tumblr.com/tumblr_negp8aweWN1srdovqo1.mp3#_=_
2spooky
I like it, though. I think it would probably need to be longer if it's a proper loop. Nothing kills the spook than a repetitive ambient sound. You can submit it or any other track you made for the project.

>>12656614
>"lol it's not edm so its shit"
Edm? No, I wanted to do it with all the stuff I have laying around my room. Sorry, but I've been at a loss for my own music for a while so I was thinking about re-doing his as maybe a pickmeup to try and get back into my own music. I'm just that selfish.

http://a.pomf.se/wcgjxa.mp3

I tried to make some headway for the next jp album, but Ive lost all steam after this part. I hope I can finish in time. Still need vocals and analogue inst, but it's a start.

>>12656657
Whats edm again?

>>12656781
edging dick masturbation

>>12656781
Electric dance music, if I remember correctly

>>12656576
[x]anime screen cap
[x]emoticon
[x]tumblr
[x]non-/jp/ video game
Nice "I'm a crossboarder" meme, dude. You pulled it off well.

>>12656789
>>12656781

Erotic dance multiplayer

>>12656872
Oh and the actual song is just talking about penis too. +1. That's a shit, a grat one. Congrats man.

I wish I could make my drawings look more appealing as just rakugaki or sketches. Many of them I don't want to make anything more of than just that.

>>12657363
She has a tumor on her right hand

>>12657363
Your drawings are good but they're far too lewd, and giant breasts aren't exactly appealing.

Can't fault you as an artist though

>>12655479
The opening voice synth and piano right? I thought it was a little sharp on the ears too, unfortunately this keyboard is all I have to make do with. And I don't know of any good soundbanks to download that sample vocal keyboards.

Do you have any experience mixing songs? I guess I can upload the stems if you really want.

>>12655649
S-sorry, just how I feel about the topic. And I'll add the lyrics in the next post.

>>12656614
Yea, I realized it was overloaded and over-compressed to hell. I guess I didn't really like how it sounded so I just kept overloading it until it almost sounded lo-fi. Which sounds cool, but listening to it now.. yea, it's tiring on the ears.

So here's a new mix, much quieter and hopefully better dynamically. I also raised the bass slightly per one anon's suggestion.

http://clyp.it/qqpgx3un

I'll post the lyrics in the next post since it'll run over the 2000 word limit.

>>12657418
"Common sense says turn on the heater
A pragmatic heart says I should die
My blood is starting to bare a striking resemblance to the ice that's outside

They say there's no breaking, what's set in stone
But a million years, and a million winters could corrode us

How will we see when the snow holds up the windows?
How will we see when our angst blots out the sun?

Oh, I don't know
I'm only sure as lives go
We've failed

How will we see when the snow holds up the windows?
How will we see when our angst blots out the sun?

Oh, I don't know
I'm only sure as lives go
We've got to keep trying cuz

Common sense says turn on the heater
A pragmatic heart says just let it die
Our love is starting to bare a striking resemblance to the ice that's outside

Oh can you hold the shrugging of a mountain
Oh can you stop the sigh of the sea
I know temperamental faults I shouldn't shrug
Confident ignorance will ruin me
So if she wants you don't try to resist
For her will alone, you exist
Try to hold the shrugging of a mountain
Try to swallow the sigh of the sea
But don't let her know you're resisting
Your hopes and dreams she'll bury"

It's about a relationship where the one girl is super dominant and egotistical, but very charasmatic, and it's ripping the relationship apart, yet she doesn't know why and falls into a depression because of it. The first half of the song is from her perspective. The outro from the guys.

And fuck, listening to the intro again, it really is grating ;_; Does anyone know how I can make it less sharp? I tried an equalizer on the choir but I don't want to cut too much of the high end off.

>>12657439
a night sky full of cries
hearts filled with lies
the contract--is it worth the price?
a soul pledged to the darkness
now I've lost it, I know I can kill
the truth is just beyond the Gate
(very nice guitar riff here)
Tears streamed from my squeezed-shut eyelids
My reason and the fragments of my blood are repeatedly undermined

I don't want anything anymore
(My exposed feelings go around and turn 'round)
I don't feel the same way as before
(Gang bang, son of a gun) (sic!)

In the crack between two entwined chests
This parched body that only desires will--

Imbue itself into the night with filthy fingertips
And wrench you open until you're torn to shreds
And its peeling emotions will creak in a shallow sleep
If it can erase just about everything entirely right now

The sun will rise, so close your eyes
Downfallen (Fallen) Falling
Hold inside
Just AWOOOOOOING in the shadows

>>12657613
Beautiful

questions for you, jay pee

As far as visual novel stuff goes, should I draw the BGs or the character sprites first?

Second - what is the size of the standard hugpillow, and what would be the appropriate dpi?

>>12657804
thank Takanori nishikawa of TMrevolution fame

>>12657831
You should write the story first, and use stock images for backgrounds.

>>12657363
Other than that hand, pretty hot.

>>12656780
You're such a worrywart, anon. Don't worry. The deadline is about 2 months from now (as I've been told). Take it easy.

I've uploaded the work-in-progress I have for the music project to the dropbox. I'm a bit satisfied with the existing sound, but I'm unsatisfied that it's basically the same cycle repeated thrice, with one only being superficially different from the other two.

a.pomf.se/lgyjqk.mp3

>>12656780
It's very cute. I like it. However, if I may comment, the loud snare is slightly off with what the track seems to feel so far. If you were planning on making it just as loud later, though, ok.

And, if you would like, I might suggest the following as the next uh... tune(?) to the sort of synthesized xylophone.
http://a.pomf.se/cpnuqa.mp3

>>12658214
I don't find it boring for being looped, the several layers add interest. The only thing I can think to add some flavor would be a vocal-ranged instrument, the mid section seems a bit hollow.

>>12658302
Could you give some suggestions of some vocal-ranged instruments?

http://pastebin.com/frWGfQYD

>Cannot reference a type through an expression

The line where I reference it in the for loop doesn't work. I don't know why. Isn't this the right way to call a function?

>>12658339
I used a Clarinet, but anything goes. Harmonica, synths, piano... hope it helps.
http://a.pomf.se/dxnafw.mp3

>>12658386
>http://a.pomf.se/dxnafw.mp3
Ah sweet. I got the idea now, thanks.

Please observe the top left corner.
http://a.pomf.se/txpqdh.webm
I was able to finally get my health variable to work with a hud!

I'm not sure how to save those variables between scenes though.

One day, you are out hunting on the mountainside when you are caught in a snowstorm and collapse. When you come to, you are greeted by the rich smells of cooked food. A female figure is bent over a pot of steaming vegetables, her back to you. From her headballs, you recognize her as Aya, the crow tengu. Terrified that she’ll eat you too, you throw off the blanket and try to climb out the window, but your immense belly gets stuck.

“Awake already? You sure are a spry one!” Aya says, as she drags your corpulent mass back through the window. “It’s a good thing I found you when you did, otherwise you’d have been buried under all that snow!”

Turning around to face her, you expect to see some grotesque mockery of a human form, but are instead shocked to see that the youkai in front of you is a gorgeous girl! Her dark eyes shine with nothing but kindness and she sets a bowl in front of you.

“Please, eat up. You must be famished,” she says. Your mouth waters as you inhale the delectable scent of steamed vegetables and some kind of meat. Wielding the chopsticks like a seasoned pro, you shovel the nourishment into your fat cheeks.

“I hope it’s to your liking. I… haven’t cooked for someone else in a long time. It gets so lonely up here, on this mountain, sometimes…” she trails off. Hey, is that booze?

“Yes, it is! Would you like some sake? Here, let me heat it up.” You down the alcohol in one gulp. It travels through your gut like a flaming tapeworm. Fuck it, you chug the bottle.

“This might be a bit forward, but… do you think I’m attractive?” Aya asks, fidgeting. Without speaking, you rub your greasy palm against her soft cheek. She closes her eyes and leans in, and you meet her lips with your own. You slam your fat tongue into her delicate mouth, feeling her lips tremble like leaves in a summer breeze. Your hands drunkenly assault her supple breasts.

>>12659133
Suddenly, you feel something stiff poking your leg. Aya covers her face with her hands as you peer down at her lap. Something was making a tent in her skirt. Tearing off the garment, you are greeted by the sight of Aya’s penis, her slit winking back at you.

“This shame is why I was sent to live up here, alone, on this mountainside,” Aya says, between sobs. “Just me and my dog…”

Her penis shows no signs of softening, and you want to repay her for rescuing and feeding you, so you wrap your hairy mitts around her shaft. She shivers at the touch, as you begin to rub up in down, feeling the bile build up in your throat as you continue the disgusting task. Aya’s breathing quickens, but she shows no sign of orgasm.

“No, don’t… please…” Aya whines, as you lower your face into her lap. She cries out as your lips wrap around her cockhead. Wrapping your tongue around her shaft, you bob your head up and down, feeling the blood pump through her dick with every lick. The throbs increase in tempo until finally, she gasps and cum gushes forth and into your throat. The taste is indescribably horrible, and your revulsion over giving a youkai a blowjob overwhelms you and you vomit forth your own torrid mixture of food, booze and cum all over the girl’s face and breasts. Your shame only lasts long enough to see a sword poking out from between your ribs, before your dying, bloated mass collapses on top of Aya.

The end.

>>12658535
Why did he die? That's almost heart breaking.

>>12659221
He has always been very frail...

>>12659252
He just kinda floated to the bottom and disappeared.
I'm saddened by my similarity

>>12659137
>you are greeted by the sight of Aya’s penis, her slit winking back at you.
ಠ_ಠ I laughed. Nice story.

I have updated my track. Though I used a violin, which I understand wasn't in the list you provided, I hope I got the essence of what you meant by 'vocal-ranged'. Also, I extended the end to be, I think, more fitting.
http://a.pomf.se/yofzdx.mp3

>>12659221

it's okay once I discover global variables he will have lives.

http://a.pomf.se/uubtox.mp3

I was messed up last night and did some one takes improv. I completely destroyed the settings when I was recording the guitar, but I have no idea how to even play it, so I guess this will just remain as is. Ukulele is so far off on some places, but I guess that's the breaks for my shitty.

I'm trying to arrange Suika's theme Broken Moon. The song is in the minor pentatonic of C, but I don't know how to harmonize chords with a pentatonic scale and have been doing some guesswork. Should I consider it C minor? D#major? Help.

>>12659432
Nice! A violin is fine too. I guess now it's nicely layered, and the outro fits it. Good job.

>>12659612
OH DEAR LORD, DO YOU EVEN COMPRESSION?

I'm not very good at making things sound underwater. http://a.pomf.se/quchwx.ogg
It sounds more like wii menu music...

On the bright side I suppose I got my variables working. somewhat. Object orientated programing hates global variables which is a shame.

>>12659782
>D#major
Do you like sharps?
If you're trying to reharmonize the track, just do whatever you want, even harmonizing it as D locrian would work, otherwise just follow the original harmony.

>>12660146
>making things sound underwater
What makes something sound "underwater" is the instrumentation. Find some music that sounds underwater to you and try to imitate the sound.
>http://a.pomf.se/quchwx.ogg
This sounds pretty bad. Can you post the midi data?

>>12660146
Don't at least mario do waltz or something for underwater stages.

>>12651197
i love it

>>12660146
Fuck OOB's opinions. Do whatever the fuck you want.

https://soundcloud.com/projekt_p/varning-bred-last

Smooth jazz remix of the first hidamari OP.

Tried to study Susumu Hirasawa's music by making a sort of copy of WORLD CELL, but I uh...gave up somewhere along the way and just settled with something that sounds remotely similar.

On that point, does anyone know where I can find a choir instrument that doesn't just go "Aah" at least, I'd like all the other vowels covered.

>>12661698
Use vocaloids?

>>12661752
Well, yeah, the thought has come to me before, but god that's going to be tough, just mixing the voices just right. What I'm really hoping for are probably some pre-made vst or soundfonts.

>>12661698
Soundiron Olympus Elements

>>12661770
I'll take a look at it, thanks.

>>12661682
Something is odd about the pace, but I can't pinpoint what, anon, sorry for being this vague.
Loved the melody arrangement. I've just started watching Hidamari last month. Not dropping, but hardly getting to season 2.

>>12660588
I'm going with Cmajor chords and doing fine so far, turns out it's just like harmonizing folk in Ddorian.
The sad bit starts now, where I have to forget the original melody and try to make it different from the original to add some flavor.

>>12661768
Shouldn't be that hard. Make the melody a MIDI file, import to Vocaloid and get the vowels you want. Then you get it back as a wav to your DAW and apply any extra effects.

http://a.pomf.se/mblqnh.webm
Fatty is now angry. Although I can't figure out why he moves slower if hes facing the direction he isn't initially moving before he triggers to chase you.


>>12660737
oh okay. I don't know how to make it a midi because it wasn't really a true midi to begin with and he instruments keep changing back to piano. I was just trying some stuff out. I think I may go back to what I had before which is songs like these.
http://a.pomf.se/drirsx.ogg

Kinda gave up

>>12662270
The area around her pelvis and thighs looks good.

>>12662240
Check if you're applying acceleration to the last facing and not just the current facing.

>>12662403

I think I might have to rewrite it a bit. It was very lazy when I put it together.

>>12662406
The problem probably isn't THAT fundamental, but okay.

does this look fucked up perspective-wise?

It's supposed to be the second floor of a library by the way. Ignore the crappy coloring, I just slapped some on there, and I willl add more distinguishable details in the final version

>>12662413

Would you know how to fix this?
http://pastebin.com/f6y9wpdS

A visual representation
http://a.pomf.se/wbbzoi.webm

It never actually hits its spawn point perfectly but I just need it to stop when it's in the general area, or go directly to it. vector2 doesn't have slerp though. Once I get that finished I will just need to make it not leave he water, turn when it hits something, and turn on a timer and I think the scripting for generic fish enemies is finished.

>>12662773
You probably want something like this. Don't forget to sketch the eye line and make a vanishing point.

>>12662810
Let me get this straight, so in the code, rigidbody2D represents the fish, right? And what this code does is, if the distance (I assume between the fish and the jelly) the direction is set (facing, I suppose), and if the fish's position is equal to it's spawn point, the velocity is reset to 0,0 and chasing stops, did I get this right?

>>12662836

No if the player gets too far from the fish it swims towards its origin. It should reset but he doesn't which is why he ends up swimming in a circle.

>>12661698
By the way, this is what I have now: https://soundcloud.com/vapor-hands/lyrica-memoria

I''ll try >>12661770 and see if I can switch up the voices so it cold seem like they're "singing".

>>12662841

>>12662841
Ah, I see. That's because the fish position probably never actually gets 0,0. Only within decimal a fraction of it. You can do two possible things: One, you can change the check from rigidbody2D.position == spawnpos to something like (don't know the syntax) absoluteValue(rigidbody2D.position.x - spawnpos.x) < 1 (ideally, your minimum velocity) && absoluteValue(rigidbody2D.position.y - spawnpos.y) < 1 (ideally, your minimum velocity),

or

when initializing the return to spawn point routine, you can set a variable like returnDirection = Direction(for example) LEFT, noting which direction the fish is heading to get to the spawn point. Then, once the fish changes direction, you can almost be certain that the fish has arrived at their spawn point. Though, you might need to set a "vertical" direction, or the fish might stop somewhere above or below the spawn point if it reaches the spawn point's x too early, while still having some y to shave off.

i drew something

>>12656886
I've been fucking compromised
Well played, detective.

>>12662881

Oh I see I figured it out. I
http://pastebin.com/xPP021FM

It within 1 point so it's not even that noticeable if he goes off.

>>12663124

I changed the square root comparison to being less than 0.5 so now it's within the same decimal placement.

>>12659137
>Your shame only lasts long enough to see a sword poking out from between your ribs, before your dying, bloated mass collapses on top of Aya.

I guess he got busted and killed by Momiji.

>>12663042
I don't get it. Context, please.

>>12663042
Oh man, the struggle. Their just doing their job, but accessories sure are assholes.

>>12657418
Much better, now that the mixdown's audible this is actually p decent

something's off with the piano at 1:57,
probably center panning or weird sus2? (idk) chord at 2:00
Try moving it to the side and adding reverb, see if that helps.

Make the strings stereo, leave mono for mainly solo stuff and what not


'Our' in 'our love' sounds kinda weird

also, rework or get rid of that double pedal kick; that along with the ride cymbal kinda ruins the 2nd part of the track

>>12657439
Very nice. Especially love that first verse, great stuff.


Overall its better, the mix could be wider by panning more instruments. Also the drums need more compression too. Otherwise it's an improvement!


>>12659782
>OH DEAR LORD, DO YOU EVEN COMPRESSION?

NOISECORE LIFE BRUH

>>12660737
uh, no. What makes stuff sound underwater is the lack of high ends, just slap a LP filter and you'll be fine.

>>12661867
How does one wrap their head around modes? It's scales that start from something other than the tonic, right?

>>12662851
do yourself a favor and get kontakt. There should be a copy of ewql gold floating around somewhere.
You'd probably want a library that has some articulation, as opposed to a static sounding soundfont patch like this
Like that koto/guzheng thing though. Needs to be panned slightly more though.
the song gets pretty stale quickly, probably cause of the string pads that play throughout the track.


Also, have a track.

http://clyp.it/jez3t5z3

>>12663222
>uh, no. What makes stuff sound underwater is the lack of high ends, just slap a LP filter and you'll be fine.
I didn't mean literally underwater, just music that fits an underwater level. I think the correct term is timbre and not instrumentation.
>How does one wrap their head around modes? It's scales that start from something other than the tonic, right?
http://www.reddit.com/r/musictheory/comments/16p0ij/a_short_howto_guide_for_using_modes_in_creating/
It's reddit but you shouldn't care at all.

>>12662240
It doesn't matter if everything gets changed to piano. I just want to make sure that you're doing what I think you're doing.

>>12661867
Thanks for listening bruv.
>Something is odd about the pace
Can you pinpoint any particular part of the song where it's off? The intro still feels a bit icky, but I'm not sure I can improve it anymore at this point.

Did you notice any distortion? I might just imagine it but it sounds kinda muddy at times. Might lower the bass or try some hp filters.

And you should definitely try season 2, it only gets better the more you watch. Not really a series suited for marathoning though, but perfect for relaxing after a hard day/week.

Im practicing proportion and poses. any help would be nice. her arms still look weird

>>12664916
I'm not art savvy, but doesn't her right arm look... broken? I think a non-broken arm can bend that way. Straight, at most.

>>12664916
Like this, I mean

>>12664924
mhh I think I need some sleep, didnt notice that at all. Thanks! >>12664924

>>12664944
forgot I had name on. Do her legs to be longer?

>>12664947
That depends on her age, I would make them longer.

Also although disgusting, this broken arm appearance is very common in females for some reason.

>>12665115
Holy fucking shit christ god damn.

Kids these days, man.

>>12642014
Just a drawing when Rinko gets confessed too.

>>12665222
Cute. Keep on keepin' on.

>>12665236
If you tell him that he'll never improve.

>>12665250
okay.

>>12665222
You need to study more anatomy. proportions and so forth.

>>12665250
Honestly I appreciate what someone thinks, so I don't understand why someone can't say something nice.
But never improving is a stretch.

>>12664152

Oh okay. Here:
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/10002025/game_dev/teting.mid

>>12665368
whoa thats really cute dude, now im too intimidated to post my stuff.

>>12665394

I also tried changing instruments.
http://a.pomf.se/zeicbh.ogg

>>12665397
Please don't be.

Havent contributed in a long while, so heres something small. Hope everyone is doing well. Keep working hard.

>>12662851
I feel kinda out of breath listening to this, as if there was too much sound filling but little actual instrumentation. Probably this violin section all around. Bring the Guzheng up, dry the violins a little (unless the overwhelming sound of it is intentional).

>>12663222
>How does one wrap their head around modes? It's scales that start from something other than the tonic, right?
Yes, right. It doesn't change much in terms of harmony or anything, you will usually have the same progression logic taking place, just shifted a bit.

The song I've made here >>12642032 is a typical folk music in that it uses Ddorian (verse) and Gmixolydian (chorus).
The verse progression is:
ii iii IV V vi V iib iii ii

The chorus progression is:
V Ic iic I IVc IV ii7 V

If we consider the D and G as 1 in their respective parts, this is like going

[1]234[5]412[1]

[1]454[5]77[51] < perfect cadence

I don't play any instrument, but if you are guitarist, it is useful to learn how to play modes in terms of muscular memory, skipping frets just like you do with the major/minor scale (which are 2 modes out of the 7).

About your track, it has a sorta generic electro David Gueta feeling to it, how about spicing it up with some harsher sound or atmosphere? But it sounds well done.

>>12664574
Turns out I downloaded the entire series before starting, so I'll have to spy it nevertheless. I don't know, the pace of the show is also very strange, I've watched a lot of slice of lifes (K-On, Lucky Star, Minami Ke, Azumanga Daioh) and this is the first time I'm bored while watching some.

I'll try listening and describing where I feel the problem or changes, let's see how it goes.

00:00 okay
00:06 it shifts
00:11 it shifts
00:20 it shifts
00:uh... guess it was just the intro after all. What is really giving me the impression things are unstable are the frequent pauses:
00:40
01:00
01:18
01:27
01:43
01:50
01:58
02:04
One thing I've learned about these pauses is to use them moderately and that they are more efficient if you play it normally (without the pause) before, and then surprise the listener by adding it the second time around the melody plays. Keep experimenting with the ornaments, too. Mordents, trills and shit are awesome when correctly applied (the one you put is one of them).

I got second monitor today. Painting with a whole monitor's space is really nice!

>>12642214
first off, resize your images.
Second off, use jpeg unless your image is transparent or has flat colors.

Fuck.

>>12642214
>3.72 MB
Wait, since when did 4chan go beyond the 3MB image limit?

>>12665514
give her some clothes you disgusting pedo

>>12666015
cute as fuck. So cute in fact that I might recant my opinion that the eye makes it creepy. HOWEVER, I will need a version without the eye before I do so.

>>12666325

His eye is his personality.

>>12666340
Hmm... You're right. I am soundly defeated.

>>12666366
He's wrong though.
The eye is the jellyfish's identity. Identity =/= personality

>>12665577
Ah yes, then I'm with you. It's a fault of mine to abuse pauses, this one is actually rather tame in that regard. Thanks again.

I've heard that it becomes better after season 1, but I liked it from the start so I can't really tell, but it might be worth checking out sometime in the future at least.

>>12665368
that's pretty well done

>>12665571
Ah, that makes sense. Thanks for the explanation!
Also what do you mean by harsher though

I hope you like bubbles.
http://a.pomf.se/kwnxpv.webm

Also I changed him a little. I've been thinking about instead of a constant gravity pulling that he would eventually stop and sit in place with an idle animation + a sine wave for going up and down (if I can figure out how to get it not disrupt his movement)

>>12666409
Oh I didn't realize.

>>12665368
Cute. I love that you can see the strokes. It's boring when everything is perfectly smooth and blended.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K_NJCkkmR2E
I will never draw 2hus this good.

Sorry for the lack of a scanner!

>>12665394
Your song is in some kind of strange mix of locrian and lydian, which sounds unstable.
Just using the notes from a scale isn't not going to get you anywhere. You have to understand the relationship between them. For example, you have a lot of unsolved tritones that I think you didn't intend to use. They sound and resolve like this:
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0epyp6euhIw

Criticizing this is like criticizing the symbol drawing of a beginner. Learning some music theory is going to be of great benefit to you.

>>12666664
You draw like a girl, dude.

>>12667019
That's because I am a girl, "dude".

>>12667132
We're all little girls here. No need to be shy, dude.

>>12667066
Lightly sketched pieces will protect you from the truth. Once you lay down the structure this softly, it's time to apply strong, bold lines. It will hurt at first, but it will give your drawing solidness and eventually your drawing will impose its own forms, instead of counting on our imagination to fill the unfinished gaps. Go for it, anon-kun!

Another lyric attempt.

http://vocaroo.com/i/s1EXGy0RZCk7

The window is sprinkled with every star
Outside is the river so quiet and far
The willows are whispering a sleepy song
And into this trance I remember home

The body relaxed, the breeze so shy
As I listen in bed nature's lullaby
Drowsy at night, the moon come along
And into this trance I remember home

A shadow that won't let me sleep
A shadow that won't let me hope
The sorrow and pain for leaving behind who you love

A mistake that won't let me stay
A mistake that won't let me go
I run and never arrive

>>12663175
Freedom Wars is a mission-based thrid person action game for the Vita.
Set in a dystopian future, where scarcity made human lives a resource, you are a Sinner - considered to be worth less than the metal sheets your bunk is made of.
Your job is to reclaim ressources for your home Panopticum - large, autonomous and autarkic city-states - be it by scavenging scraps, hostile giant mechas, or other Sinners from opposing Panoptica.
To make sure that you're doing nothing but serving the Greater Good, you are accompanied by either a android or a gynoid, called Accessory, who observe you 24 hours a day, seven days a week.
At first, your personal space is pretty much non-existent. You are receiving penalties for moving more than five steps at once, loitering around for more than three minutes, lying down, etc.
I guess that was the punchline.

>>12663042
I love Freedom Wars. Fun game.

>>12667165
You're so right.

And here's it after

>>12666184
whoops

ohio jaypee

with love, /m/

Someone said it didn't feel right with just one bubble. so now he makes 3.
http://a.pomf.se/skdmen.webm

What the hell happened to Ham and the other old drawfags?

>>12669580
"Old drawfags"?

I'm still not very good with uniforms.

>>12669362
maybe make the bubbles layer under him or make them a little less opaque? it's kind of distracting right now, but that just might be me
>>12669580
ham occasionally posts on /i/ still. the rest probably got tired of this place or shooed off

>>12669734
What about bitch-tan? It's been a while

>>12669734

Yeah that was just a thing I did. I can easily make them behind the jellyfish.

>>12669741
>>12646760

>>12669734
>shooed off
This doesn't make me happy at all.

>>12669299
o h i o ! ! !

How long can /jp/ threads stay alive for?

>>12663222
Yea, mixing and mastering is definitely one of my weak points. I have trouble making sure the mix isn't too crowded (since I like to just layer tons of things in my song, it makes it even harder to make sure everything sounds good together) and making sure it isn't too muddy or bassy, or lack thereof. I should really look up proper use of compression and equalization. And you're right, it definitely could do with me recording more of the instruments in stereo.

And thank you! I really did like the first verse as well, I think it shows a definite improvement in my lyrics.

I made a piano loop a couple days ago and kind of just tinkered with it, and came up with this ominous sounding thing: https://soundcloud.com/misakoisaqt/why-dream

I didn't really use EQ or compression once again but I think the mix isn't as bad.

>>12663222
Forgot to reply to your other critiques!

>something's off with the piano at 1:57
Yea, I ran into a big problem here, where the chord progressions that make up both sections of the solos don't go together, so basically anything I played sounded out of place.

Which leads to this:
probably center panning or weird sus2? (idk) chord at 2:00
I'm not exactly sure what I was playing at that piano solo section. They sounded cool to me, but the chords I was coming up with I'm not sure if they even have proper names. And if they do they're some weird jazz chords. I've only been playing a couple of months so you'll have to forgive my ignorance.

>'Our' in 'our love' sounds kinda weird
This is because I made "our" shift between two notes, and vocaloid really didn't handle that well, unfortunately. I'm not sure how to break up the syllable to extend it naturally.

>also, rework or get rid of that double pedal kick; that along with the ride cymbal kinda ruins the 2nd part of the track
I really liked the triple kick pattern, I thought it gave urgency to the lines being sung over it, but I can make it quieter or less in your face.

>>12670067
Why are you so hasty? Go back to your own home board if you can't handle /jp/'s pace.

>>12670067
Should be up for another 3 days.

>>12670067
Why don't we make this the last one?

>>12670127
Whenever a maxed thread gets to the last pages I get nervous. What if someone posts something when I'm sleeping and the thread disappears? I can't be bothered to go trough the archive either.

>>12670641
>What if someone posts something when I'm sleeping and the thread disappears? I can't be bothered to go trough the archive either.

Well GOOD NEWS: moot enabled that 24 hour archival thing for /jp/ just for faggots such as yourself.

>>12670641
Also why would you turn your PC off?

Sunako is cute!

Alice just isn't herself today.

>>12671055
>>12672009
I don't get it

Now he splashes and the bubbles do not go above the waves

Does anyone who knows programming help me with speech bubbles? I guess it's a long shot considering you'd have to understand C# and unity which seems like a very specific combination.

>>12672598
It's almost 2015, and you haven't read Alice in Wonderland or Through the Looking Glass.

>>12672825
I've read both and don't understand it either. The drawing is very rough, so it's difficult to understand what I'm looking at. Is that the caterpillar?

>>12672798
You should make his tentacles spread as he's falling to make it a bit more realistic.

>>12673375
It's Alice and Aiwass-kun (who is a blue naga perched on top of a rock)

Is it actually possible to have the same precision of a real pencil with plain plastic tablets? I'm getting the impression that having your hand not directly drawing under your eyes is a handicap more severe than I thought when I started using it

>>12672825
I've read both, and they were painfully boring.

just made this. i suck, i know.

>>12673765
Well that makes two of us.

>>12672798
Cute. I wonder if it would be better if he were to rotate his head based on his direction? Like if he's going right, the relative rotation would be -90 degrees.

>>12673473
SAI has a pen stabilizer to smoothen your movements, but that's it. Some people use a paper sheet on top of the tablet to simulate the texture.

I personally didn't feel affected by using a tablet, it's like using a mouse. In my case, with the other hand, since I'm lefty.

What I had drew I don't even

>>12674232
lewd

How to into bodies

Talking buddies!

made a sketch of my OC, he is just way too cute.