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>>46568045
You had my attention at Chubby Letty.
This is pretty good for someone's first story. I was genuinely shocked when I found out that this is apparently unfinished as it actually feels pretty complete other then the abrupt ending. A scene where Lettyfag gawks at "his" new supersized hitbox is an obvious inclusion to add though.
>I also want to change the set up
This one is actually one of the best ones I've seen teebeehache. Like how it starts thanks to a Rumia chase & I'm glad it doesn't try to skim past the actual transformation process. Other then that no real complaints other then some of the descriptive choices could be phrased better (the trap aesthetic.one in particular probably could've used another draft.)