/jp/ - Otaku Culture

>>10853741

That's called poor execution. Having a developed story doesn't mean every single element is planned out, it means you know what you're writing about, what the plot is (major points and some minor points), and what you want to do.

If you're looking to make a RPG, then start out by writing an RPG story. If you're looking for a puzzle game story, make them a detective or something. In the same way that a story does not build gameplay, gameplay alone does not build a story; you need both.
That said, it's easier (and preferable) to start with the story so you know what the scope is, what resource you may need, and have a way to cut off feature creep.

A 'story' doesn't imply a long, drawn-out text; Touhou has a 'story' in its game that defines who the bosses are, kind of why they're fighting, and not much else. It's the starting point, not the entire system.

>>10463114
Finally had some time to play through it. I'm also a VN writer, so I'll try to be gentle (also, I wrote these as I progressed through the game, so they may be a little repetitive)

-I really liked the intro and mood (log-in screen)
-character designs are nice too.
-dreaded -> dreadful
-'I had to leave -> we had to leave?'
-'a feeling that she had no ill intentions and that she meant harm to no one' -> 'a feeling that she did not mean any harm'
-That's why Ashley, Stewart and I sneaked into this retreating ship... ' -> snuk. There are several grammatical errors like this throughout, you'll want a proof-reader before releasing
-Raven comes across as a bit of an airhead, assuming it's intentional (doesn't really think things through, often uses simple language, little planning, etc)
-'It is 'faith' that we encounter on this day' -> Fate, not faith.
-'I jumped on Stewart and made him evade some giant insect charge.'
-Add more descriptions in general. What is the surrounding? What is the Raven thinking? Is there more to it? She's implied to be simply and straightforward by the writing currently, but she still may express more complex thoughts.
-Also, MC can think reactions. Really delve in to Raven, what she's thinking, why she chose to respond how she did. It doesn't need to be long, but it adds a lot of character and detail. Remember that the player 'is' Raven right now, and will know everything going through her mind.
-Are Steward and Raven close friends? Why is he so invested in arguing with her? Is it how he is? It's not entirely clear why he acts how he does.
(Post too long, splitting into 3 parts)

>>7558638

No, I think it's a pretty good game. Take Pheonix right, grimdark, and eroge, mix them together in good artwork, and you get Kara no Shoujo. I also enjoyed the lack of angsty teens being angsty, it actually focused on the main plot and the ideas it wanted to express rather than trying to be school-life and hide the ideas in the background.

My main complaint would be the shift towards a less frantic pace in the second half of the game, but one can't get everything.

>>7556024

I actually buyfagged (after the DRM was added), and I couldn't get the DRM exe to work, even talking off all the firewalls and whatnot. The DRM free .exe works find though. Go figure, eh?
No installation that I'm aware of...
(yes, pic's unrelated, but I don't have any Kara pics yet)

>>7486043
Actually, only /w/ and /jp/ (no classy contractions that I know of). Though I was in some of the argument threads on here not too long ago, so it's likely lingering aftereffects.

Agreed. I like the new design in general (minus the ring pop), but it just seems....moe. So moe. And screams eroge.

Also (just reminded of it), if one wants to see the difference between the Miku and her voice base, watch Yozakura Quartet. The blue-haired catgirl is voiced by Miku's voice base.

Is there a guide for getting into Vocaloid music?
Like the recommendations charts on /a/?

Would you please post a chart?