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>>12734452
Oh hi PSAanon, I thought you were kill.

You're kinda lacking on the descriptions of things in here. I guess it's OK to not know what Sir Matthew looks like if he's Mr. Self-Insert MC, but the same shouldn't apply to everyone else. I mean, in Part 1 you don't even tell us what colour Glesni is. Let alone mention the cute little sloshing sounds when she moves, or the moist, slimy feel when Matthew holds her hand.

It sorta feels like you're too fixated on advancing the story, before letting us get comfy with its characters first. It's certainly possible to spend too much time bogged down in description, but I'm sure a happy medium exists somewhere. Somewhere further than "Knight meets slime, knight adopts slime as daughteru for no obvious reason after they've only known each other for about 400 words"

I liked your PSAs and I like slimes so I only expect good from this, even if it's a bit barebones imo. Keep me informed of new chapters plz

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