/jp/ - Otaku Culture

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>A year later you had to say goodbye to your sister.
>You tried to hold back your tears to no avail.
>"It's okay she said, I will visit soon." She smiled while hugging you tight.
>Afterwards she coldly hugged your mother. "It's for the best your mother said." placing her tail on your sisters.
>"Best for you." She replied. Pulling away she stood in front of the huge bear-like man that was her father.
>He placed a hand on her shoulder. "I know you hate me for this, but I hope you will come to realize the error of your ways."
>"You will see how MGcity is with your own eyes and you will see how right I was."
>"Also don't let your mothers parents corrupt you to much." He smiled.
>"Probably not as much as you did." She replied coldly.
>Your father sighed.
>She boarded the train and as it took off you couldn't even chase after her with your mother holding your hand.
>"You will thank me for this someday Jonathan." Your father spoke.
>You never did.

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