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>>12011639
To be honest, I really don't like it. I mean, sure, I made it, and I'm really proud of the plot I made, but the writing... Just reading the first post is painful. The lack of experience is obvious. As well as the lack of description. It's almost never explained where the protag is.
>Rin may pay good price for a new spirit
I shoulda wrote "Rin may pay a good price". Or "may pay a lot of money".
>Kinda like a caretaker, but more sexy.
Shoulda wrote "sexier." Who the fuck say "more sexy"?

Well, at least I learned a lot with that story. I just wished I could've finished it properly.

>>12011684
Expectation is the first step toward disappointement. I learned to never expect anything.
If you think that way, you'll never be disappointed. But sometimes, you'll be pleasantly surprised.