Hey guys, please critique my comic

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Couple scenes from my comic Shade and Shine. If you want to read more; The rest is at www.shadeshine.com

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Why.. why am I reading this?

>captcha: blame weed

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>>1531988
Ummm, If I had to guess... Weed?

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>>1531999
Hm. Makes sense. And still I am utterly engrossed.. by.. go to the website and read it from the first page without starting to click Next.

My judgment is clouded, though.

>weed doesn't cloud judgment
The hell it doesn't, I can't tell apart interesting from trite right now.

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>>1532004
dude, why do you have a girly name?

[Anonymous No.1532005]

>MS Paint
>Poor coloring (some areas you missed)
>Shit forms
>Poor comic layout
>Bad story telling
>uninteresting panels

stop it.

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>>1532005
>Poor coloring (some areas you missed)
if i had to guess, it was done on purpose

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>>1532005
Well I have no plan on stopping. Thanks for your opinion though.

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>>1532008
If I had to guess, OP is fucking lazy and stupid.

[Anonymous No.1532013]

Here is the beginning of Volume 3. Kaith is a pretty sweet story teller :)

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>>1532005
Paint looks better than this, this appears to be made in GIMP by someone who doesn't know how to use GIMP.

[Anonymous No.1532080]

you bought a domain for this?

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>>1532078
Thought I had re-saved these with a higher quality. Will get on that. Here is what it should look like. Although I have a feeling you are the type to badmouth stuff regardless :p

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>>1532090
Why is there a fluffy hat with a giant dick rising up into it?

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>>1532094
Because it's the mystery of the giant cock hat. Duh. Maybe if you read it you'd have known that.

[Anonymous No.1532109]

Your art will improve substantially if you beleive in yourself!

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>>1532109
It already has :) But I am going to keep making them so I imagine it will keep getting better. For example <---

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>>1532115
*heroes

[Anonymous No.1532122]

is this just a /b/ raid or does this guy seriously think this is good

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>>1532122
It's just some idiot marketing his shitty comic, I don't know why this hasn't been locked/deleted. We don't need [21 images omitted] to give a fucking critique OP.

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>>1532123
Nope, just wanting genuine feedback. No ones forcing you to read it. I don't really mind if you only bash thing things because you enjoy it, give real feedback, or like it; I posted it in the proper section.

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This guy gaves you some pointers and you just blew it off
Youre obviously here to market your comic, which needs alot of work. It looks like it was made in MS Paint, tons of little bits are uncolored like you used the MS paint, bucket tool and missed a bunch. Its very poor quality and looks like a 12 year olds doodle. It is barley even critique-able because it dosent even look finished

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great stuff, i love it!

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>>1532143
Telling someone to 'stop it' is not a pointer dude. If you ask your soccer coach how you can improve and he says "Quit" That is not advice. If he gave real advice I would have appreciated it.

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I want to fuck that.

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>>1532146
>>1532155
>this desperate for attention
>>1532161
stop posting

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>>1532163
You don't have to look at it dude.

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>>1532146
Thanks man :)

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>>1532115
Requesting R34 of that sexy loli

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>>1532151
>Telling someone to 'stop it' is not a pointer dude. If you ask your soccer coach how you can improve and he says "Quit" That is not advice. If he gave real advice I would have appreciated it.
This anon said you should stop making comics in this way, not quit drawing. Your soccer coach would tell you to stop if you were spitting saliva all over the soccer pit too.

The thing about your comic is that it could as well be a written dialogue without pictures, and it would be the same thing. Your characters have no facial expressions, it's stylised but not appealing, sometimes even ugly. Yeah, I know it's your artistic choice to make it simplified, but it doesn't change anything.
You could as well write the dialogue in the post and add 3-4 narrator lines, when your characters eg. start rolling instead of walking.

So, why do you even make it a comic in the first place? These drawings just get in the way.

You should read this thread >>1529509, it would help you, but you seem like one of these people who don't want to change anything and just pretend they want help to market their stuff or get some positive, unconstructive posts. For marketing I recommend tumblr and for dumb, empty posts - deviantart comment section. I might be wrong about you, but hey, I am on the Internet so I can tell what is likely, even if it's rude generalization.

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>>1532195
That guy is fucking good. I wonder how fast he can do that; that's not yours is it? Because fuck that's some good work. And maybe I did read annons message incorrectly; Thought his advise was to quit.
And compared to my skill when I started I have improved immensely. I had zero art background a year and a bit ago and have continually tried to improve, adding more backgrounds and trying to add art that compliments my text. I seriously have looked at each post and took what people had problems with to heart. The more I draw the better I will get; So if I forced myself to try and draw my best on the first day, it would take forever and be REALLY bad and I would have probably gotten disillusioned. I am taking what people are saying seriously, be it negative or positive. And it is a work in progress. For example this is my first go a year ago <-----

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>>1532184
Okay :)

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>>1532263
>the more i draw the better I will get
only if you're drawing with intent of learning.

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