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Take 3 on my Beksinski tribute painting.

Thoughts?

>> No.1463597

Hello, One-Vox. I think you've done some better pieces in your life.

>> No.1463599
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I... like it?!?

Good job, anon. If this were a little more polished, I wouldn't hesitate to buy a print of it. Can we see Beksinski tributes 1 and 2?

>> No.1463634

>>1463597
I know, but I'm hoping it's worth finishing

>> No.1463648

Do you post your art anywhere?

>> No.1463669

The face feels off balanced, and its rather distracting.
Im enjoying the color.
The post sticking up closest to the viewer doesn't feel very grounded.
Im drawn to the right side of the image because of the red line on the ground leading up to the middle, and how the clouds drift into the right. So im getting stuck in that boxed in area under the top right of the T (If you're going for that, whatever, but i thought i would mention it.)

I like it, but yeah, i think youve done better.

>>1463648
Google One-Vox, do some leg work.

>> No.1463732
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angry hangover stomach all day, I should probably be drinking more water

And I think this version is stronger.

>> No.1463779

I thought I saw you post a version without the face and it looked a lot better.

>> No.1463816

>>1463732
Might just be me. But it feels to clean. need a bit of grunge in there. ;)
Very nice work however.

>> No.1463923
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>>1463779
That was a the previous version. I thought it was too empty, now I feel like I'm just throwing everything at this piece trying to save it.

>> No.1463952

>>1463923
I really like this. A lot better than the new one.

>> No.1463968 [DELETED] 

If you think you'll seem artsy or deep with this you're kidding yourself. If I didn't know better I'd say whoever did this has some skills but the mindset of a teenager.

And that's probably true anyway

>> No.1463969

>>1463923
Yeah for real, the face is just kinda bad. This old version has more mood.

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>>1463923
nigga this is way better.

>> No.1463986

Studied anatomy yet?

Do you even try to improve anymore or do you continue to let the competition pound your ass?

>> No.1463994

>>1463986
Douchebag alert.

>> No.1464007

>>1463732
I really don't like this one.

>>1463923
>>1463584
I'm conflicted on these two. One needs a little something more, one needs a little less. The old one was better IMO however.

>> No.1464034

Just wanted to say, I love how the material at the top seems to be a both wood and bone.
That's a nice effect.

>> No.1464044

>>1463584
I have three words for you, OP, if you ever want to succeed as an artist: Loomis, Loomis, Loomis.

>> No.1464064

>>1464044
you've revealed your newness

>> No.1464069

>>1464064
>not detecting sarcasm
>Two to the zero to the one to the three

>> No.1464076

>>1464069
it's june. too early in the summer to be pulling that shit.

>> No.1464105

I wouldn't call the face "bad." I actually think it rounds out the composition nicely. My problem is that it detracts from the inherent creepiness of the image. Your original composition shines in that area. The face need's to be more ethereal and scary looking. Try painting the face as if it were a part of the cloud instead of giving the eyes and lips a solid form. Also consider the fact that we are viewing the face head on. It keeps the piece from being as dynamic as it could be. Experiment with tilting the head a bit to make the composition more dynamic.

>> No.1464110

>>1464069
>Two to the zero to the one to the three
B-But that equals 1...

>> No.1464120

>>1463732
maybe if the edge on the mustache wasn't so hard

>> No.1464398

>>1463584

I think your image lacks the unlikely combo of subtle humor and unease that his images often contain.

Maybe consider the tribute from the conceptual side of the work, not just the physical.

>> No.1464409

Comeback when you do it in oil.

>> No.1464663 [DELETED] 

So appearently we have mods now who delete random posts. I wrote a critique yesterday and now its gone.
And me too, fuck you /ic/

>> No.1464664

Really feels like you are capturing the essence,
Gj op

>> No.1464667 [DELETED] 

>>1464663
i don't know what's going on with that, i had a similar experience. maybe it's just 4chan fucking up?

in any case, it'll still be in the archive
http://fuuka.warosu.org/ic/

>> No.1464668

>>1463584
I like it, but i really cant appreciate digital over oil

>> No.1464678 [DELETED] 

>>1464663
>>1464667

4chan has been entrusted to aliens.

>> No.1464679 [DELETED] 

>>1464667
According to that archive there's only one post that was trashed in this thread, and it wasn't much of a critique.

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>>1460847

"I posted a reply for you guys at 4 am in bed but it got deleted immediately which was worrying because it was innocent... if you're a mod and deleted it you can let me know why."

>> No.1464711 [DELETED] 

>>1464679
which

>> No.1464721 [DELETED] 

>>1464679
Since when do mods delete posts? What the fuck is goin on? This is an outrage!!

>> No.1464736 [DELETED] 

>>1464711
Check for yourself nigger, the other guy linked to /ic/'s warosu archive already. Nothing that was deleted in this thread looks like it was critique.

>>1464721
Pretty sure we have a janitor now, though I have seen mods post publicly on here. I doubt either of them are responsible for deleting posts though, since apparently they were all deleted almost instantaneously.

>> No.1464739

>>1463584

It's great.
However, I feel that the massive area of harmless, clean sky isn't so helpful towards your goal.
>>1463732
and I don't like this one.
>>1463923
that however is pretty cool. I too would have been tempted to add more if it were my painting, but emptiness can be effective.

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>>1464678

>> No.1464747

I knew you were on... nevermind.
I think that your "third" attempt is really good, and I must say that I like it the most, maybe because has a sort of poetical tension in it. That sounds really really pathetic, I know. What I want to say is that that version seems to be deeper in meaning. In few words: the face in the clouds is really a good idea and it's worth to be finished (even if I would keep it, overall, more or less like it is). I would suggest - my personal opinion here - that the face has to be like is really made of clouds; as it is now seems more made of stone. But maybe you had already thought about that.

>> No.1464749
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1464749

Why not paint Beksinki's face in the clouds instead of that androgynous nondescript implication of a face? Make him an actual part of your piece, y'know?

>> No.1464811 [DELETED] 

>>1464749
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>> No.1464818

>>1463584
sometimes less is better. don't add many things to it. it looks ok this way.

>> No.1465549

>>1464818
i concur