/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

Gonna post a couple of character designs from this month, if you guys have any feedback let me know!

1/2

>>6189963

2/2

>>6189965
>>6189963
Uh... Blog?

>>6189963
proportions seem off.
just compare head size to where the breasts end. arms look too short and thin as well.

the other pic looks fine.

>>6189980

https://www.artstation.com/mikejordana this one

>>6189963
>>6189965
you should render more this is way too abstract for industry
in the industry they more often look for a more, painterly finish if you will

>>6189965
I really like this. I like the hat and the shape and how it sits on the head, I also really like the shapes. Especially the leg wraps and the fur neck.
I think the crit is the shoes on her are a little off. They look modern, like modern nike kicks or something. Maybe should go for something more fantastical to match the rest of the motif

>>6189963
This one gives me "Rainbow Bayonetta" vibes. L It is also very good, I can't find something to pick at here.

Swag

>>6189963
do you want a redline?

Haven't posted it on socials yet so ill take any critique.

Also, a years progress I guess. Someone once told me even though im improving, the "appeal level" of my art is exactly the same. I think about that a lot.

>>6190073
Lmao why do you lie ?

>>6190503
is this a man? they have a mans chest but wheres the bulge?

Tried a different approach to inking.

>>6190586
Maybe im wrong but I don't think most dudes walk around with noticable dick bulge

>>6190673
>t. short dicked balding retarded incel with a foot fetish

How's this

>>6189978
I fucking love this

>>6190816
Nicely rendered. The witch's anatomy could use some work, particularly the ribcage and hips. I wouls also make the popsicle a bit slushier to increase the illusion that it's melting rather than sweating. Otherwise, it looks pretty good.

>>6190816
good art but ruined by the digital airbrushed coloring

this would be incredible if it was done with better coloring, you already put all your Art Character Level points into drawing, time to put some into painting

>>6190816
What are your socials?

>>6190990
Thanks, it was basically a colored sketch so I didn't really put much effort into the lineart
>>6191019
Yeah I'm still learning colors, I don't think they're that bad as you're saying but I do agree I could had done better
>>6191135
https://www.instagram.com/necrononymous/

braaaaaaaaaaaap

tried something new, to lazy clean up

>>6190944
thank you so much anon!

1, nevermind.

>>6191505
2, nevermind.

I've been trying to improve one of my screentone styles.

sketching has become a lot easier lately.

faster and more fun,

>>6189801
>alternative art style
>first image is anime
are you guys for real

>>6192000
and the ones with actual original stylization always get ignored. the absolute state of why see.

>>6191927
Sick, great colors

>>6192000
this general should just be converted into the draw general because stylization is all that's done on the board now
>>6192097
appeal matters, being different doesn't make it interesting

>>6191927
Cool shit man
>>6191963
Would fuck those feet

>>6191963
Looks broken from the waist down.

>>6191927
Love your style. You got any socials?

Back again with another animal for my Stardew Valley type game. Trying to keep it super simple.

A cartoon about a conehead who goes on /ic/ too much.
This should seem familiar for you.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ilrBszenSD8

After ages and ages of trying to find a tattoo artist, so they can do the GOD OF HYPERMETH justice… I just said “fuck it, I’m bored” and started drawing Flowey smoking meth, because I’m terrible at humanoid anatomy, I suck. This design could be pretty sick if it was cleaned up, but eh, I can’t be bothered :/ I’m mentally exhausted rn

drew my friend

Trying to steal that impressionist swager to some of my pieces.

>>6192495
They're pretty cute. Not much to say though

>>6192153
copy that

>>6192272
waist up too

bump

>>6193501
cute friend, cute sketch

>>6193501
V cool, what was your blog?

>>6192913
Great shit man. How did you do these weird voices? They are so fucking cool.

>>6195721
I just throw on a bunch of effects from audacity until it sounds approximately how I want it too.

>>6196091
it sounds exactly like i thought it would. Fucking god bless.

>>6189801
lol, that's my drawing. Thanks.
I tried to paint a beach.

>This is so fucking adorable
gimme your blog RIGHT NOW

>>6189978
>This is so fucking adorable
gimme your blog RIGHT NOW

>>6196961
cute, the waves could definitely use more depth, they feel a bit flat against the water especially as you get further out.

>>6196988
cccc

>>6196988
blog?

>>6197626
https://twitter.com/ArtKlinck

>>6198634
blog?

I gotta clean it the fuck up and finish it, but i just wanna return to cartoon monke.

>>6199495
>>6197675

Penny from pokemon i drew today

>>6200495
Alt version

>>6190816
Damn, unless I’m out of the loop this is the first time in a while I saw something genuinely creative.

I need crit pls

>>6189801
started a new redraw. what do y'all think of the sketch?

>>6196961
blog?

>>6200932
cool image ruined by using that shitty brush that makes things muddy and hazy
looks good on thumbnail only like that, its a shame its a good painting

>>6190816
Rough, but it's funny.

>>6200954
I like the brush, gives texture and I don't need to focus too much on cleaning up the details. Gibe my an alternative if you have one.

>>6189801

>>6200980

Recently I downloaded daz3D and was sketching some ideas. I think I'm going to have to give to composition and color a second revision, to see what I can come up with to improve. Make more appealing, i say.

>>6197052
Are you saying something like add a little blur for depth?

>>6200942
@ribosoma_42

>>6190673
with clothes that tight? They do. Unless they are wearing some sort of hard crotch armor underneath

bump

>>6200917
did some tweaks and i think it looks a bit better

>>6201062
Love Chapulin Seinen and your other drawings. Hope to see other interesting stuff in the future brub.

*spreads buttcheeks*
BRAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAP *farts all over thread*

Just about to start coloring this…

>>6200959
>>6200516
Thanks, but apparently socials disagree since nobody seems to give a fuck about the shit I post

>>6202676
You should make the bottom pod a bit smaller and behind her leg to give a bit of depth, its kinda flat
Also the sword should be a little shorter, or cut out of the image, because all the empty space around it makes the image kind of unbalanced

How do you make sure your comics are paced for 4 panels every time. I keep landing on 3 panels or 5 panels and it’s messing up the rhythm

>>6202716
by actually writing them before drawing and also researching the simple format of 3 or 4 panel cartoons like intro-setup-punchline

literally just a single google search

>>6202714
Ya you’re right…Maybe I’ll draw a destroyed city in the background and add an extra pod somewhere. Thank ya kindly for the input, much appreciated.

>>6202716
You draw the 4th panel first, then work your way backwards.

>>6202723
But i always want to draw a specific interaction. Like for this one I couldn’t reduce down to 4 panels. I would either have to cut out the pregnancy grip punchline and end it on pregnancy brain, or combine the forgetfulness into just losing the phone, but its still really dense.

How would you have expanded the 3 panel to 4? Or reduced this 5 panel to 4?

>>6202737
This is kind of what i do now.. its a hot mess

>>6202774
Short 2 panel

>>6202893

>>6202774
The first panel is superfluous. It's just a less effective version of the second panel. You could cut it, and absolutely nothing would change.

>>6202900
holy shit man, you are a comic savant. We couldn’t figure it out, and we were over complicating the solutions on the back end. Thanks!

Sometimes I get caught up in documenting every detail that happened I am unable to identify the necessary details from the noise

>>6196961
i love this, i would just say maybe make sure your lightsource is consistent. the sky and the shading on the rock suggests midday, but the shading on the character suggests the light source is behind her, like at sunset.

other than that i like it

>>6202894
I'm gonna hug your nuts, i love your work.

Did this one, I tried to give it a "made on paper" kind of feeling, with the lineart and colours, but idk if it came out good.

>>6200825
It looks really cute, really nice anon

Been doing a lot of anatomy study lately. Seems to be helping. Also is this pose convincing?

>>6203425
Try a noise filter

>>6203512
I feel like the foreshortening is off.

I'm trying to make this pose interesting but I'm fudging the anatomy.

>>6203608

>>6203611
it looks fine you baby
perfectionism is the enemy of good. finish this drawing and then learn from the mistakes you made doing it on the next piece.

>>6203512
I agree on the foreshortening being off, the arm looks shrunken, but I'm not smart enough to know how to fix it.

>>6203536
>>6203639
Good eye. I increased the size of the bicep and shoulder and that seems to make it a little better. Thanks for the help, bois

cat lady

>>6203999

>>6202035
finished it!

ne pouvons-nous pas aspirer à la grandeur?

>>6205473
How do you add the grayscale that you have now to the final color version that you make later? Or does it get discarded later? Just a general question

>>6200709
This is fantastic. I can imagine this as an animation where everything is wiggly like Home Movies.

>>6189801

>>6204408
This took too long and definitely was not worth, I'm probably going to do again in a few months.

>>6206449
Really good anon. It's always worth it.

Sketching on company time

>>6202775
Banging these out. I couldn’t figure out what fart and kick onomatopoeias to use

>>6207708
disgusting

>>6189801

This cartoon has been an exercise in composition and graphic design.
It'll be done in like... a few weeks maybe, I'm busy.

>>6205473
How do you add the grayscale that you have now to the final color version that you make later? Or does it get discarded later? Just a general question ???

>>6208721
Trying out a few things today

i gave up with the shoes but im still mildly proud of somewhat finishing this

>>6205473
Tiny, tiny hands

>>6208723
Garbage!. . . . . Hot garbage!

>>6205703

>>6209147
Shut up man its good

WOAH!

>try to draw a sexually mature and mentally developed individual
>it gets called pedoshit
why?
is it the badly drawn feet

>>6209331
>>6202893
>>6202894
I feel like you could use some more interesting fonts.

>>6209340
The big head and large eyes aren't helping.

>>6202894
I recognize your art, i think.
Good shit.

>>6209340
Looks early teens at best.

You sick fuck.

>>6209307
>>6209450
You're in a wrong thread.

>>6209340
You may want to look up how human body proportions change with age. But if you're from (and drawing for) some SEA shithole, carry on, this is perfectly mature and developed by medieval standards.

>>6190504
yes, I think it was me sorry man, you've imrpoved sure, but they feel the same if you know what I mean.

>>6209286
I like this. If the toes were detailed I could fap to it

>>6209691
Until this thread I thought you and the guy who you quoted were the same person.

>>6190504
Nobody ever told me, but I do feel like the appeal effect of my shit stays the same despite improvement
Probably there is some kind of limit to my imagination I don't know.
I'll keep making stuff because I've decided that I'm going to die on the hill of art career, but it feels so hard, even if you get commissions and praise. Socials don't help, after I started posting again on them after a year the lack of attention I get really killed my mood
I know that feel.jpg

>>6210177
nigga, you have style blindness

>>6190634
>Girl.png
Could've sworn this was Sakurai Atushi. She looks very masculine, don't know if this was the intent.

>>6207708
I dont know which name i like more - Cowlostrum or Moosectomy. Wife says i am better at naming the pokemon than drawing them.

>>6207721
Is this less disgusting?

>>6210747
Don't take it badly, but imo it's in a weird place between being erotic, disgusting and funny, but not being able to be actually any

>>6210747
Your comics are always so flat. Everything is always just a straight forward perspective on a white background and it's just boring to look at.
It works with Sunday morning cartoons because nobody actually looks at the art and it's drawn with a shape tool and they can easily change locations. But yours has much more visual humor so it's more apparent when reading them that they're not a ton of variation going on.

>>6207708

Oh god it's gonna be a girl. That poor lass.

>>6210747
As a Professional anime illustrator, this image is the reason I decided to stop looking at this board.

>>6210882
>Professional anime illustrator
more like professional retard

>>6210882
pyw

>>6210747
Jesus Christ this guy got married and I’m still single

new in here.

I been avoiding coloring my whole life, so now i'm trying to correct that and experiment.

>>6210980

>>6210882
We have a lot of professional Anime illustrators, it means nothing

>>6206449
i would love to see more of the two styles on the right, gj anon

>>6210934
I have many other non physical qualities that make me an attractive spouse.

>>6210882
Do you think someone would hire me to make anime illustrations?

>>6210820
Wife has banned the color pink from the house. Not sure what the future holds..

>>6210795
>Sunday morning cartoons
Yeah I was going for a Sunday morning comic strip style… but I hate when it’s just talking heads. And I especially hate webcomic styles of expressionless copy pasted kawaii cats and dinosaurs.

I really like Calvin and Hobbes. I want to make something like that. Sometimes there are backgrounds and sometimes there aren’t. I’m afraid if i put in a background it will be less readable, but i guess that is the challenge, and something that i should not be lazy about. Maybe the coloring is too much and I should just go black and white? I’m open to other suggestions on improving the presentation and readability. I feel like I’ve changed the typesetting a dozen times already. But i think the handwritten text feels like it matches the drawings better.

>>6210794
I am duke of all trades master of none. If I had to pick one of the 3, I’d want to focus on funny. What comics do you think are funny? The only comics ive ever found funny are Calvin and Hobbes and foxtrot. I recently read the invader zim comics and i think 1 or 2 arcs were chuckle level funny.

>>6211316
OH i also REALLY like The Oatmeal. Making a comic like that would be really cool

>>6209340
>>6209356
>>6209370
>>6209462
So this general is Twitter Westoids central now? Damn how I miss the "old days" of /ic/.

>>6210190
I like your work but you havent appeared on my feed, so don’t feel bad, algorithm might actually be screwing you

>>6211445
you dont know what his work looks like

>>6211316
hey man. You get a lot of shit and I think it's unjustified. You have considerable skill and persistence. I'm happy for you two becoming parents. Hope it all works out well

>>6211423
I don't see what upsets you.

Welp

>>6209331
Fucking love this

>>6211316
I think colors are fine, maybe lighten up on the blending some and maybe rely more on cel shading. It keeps thing easily readable in addition to just being faster.
Have you thought of maybe looking at something like oglaf for inspiration, seems like it'd be up your alley at least.

>>6211996
oh my god, you drew favorite character.
i love you and your art with the power of a thousand suns wonderful HxH person.

>>6212518
Thanks friend, big hxh fan here too
Tho I'm a big meruem fan, so might be drawing him next

>>6213021
oh hey
he, komugi and ging are my close second favorites, so right on, man. stellar taste in reads and fanart. very cool.

>>6210172
thanks anon. no feet at all in this one so sorry about that.

>>6206449
agreeing with the other guy. i like the right two, but the two on the left also fascinate me. try some of those too if you like them, i sure do.

b a l d

>>6212065
I like the two girls on the right.
Post more cute girls

>>6211316
>What comics do you think are funny?
I don't read funny stuff in general, I'd say Calvin & Hobbes too
I think that what you should do to focus on the funny side is to keep things strictly sfw, that alone should make the occasional horrible stuff funny instead of unsettling
Take it with a grain of salt, just imo and I really don't consider myself good at giving advice

>>6189801
my robot girls

Making a patch. Any critiques?

this is my first time drawing in weeks. it has been difficult to push myself, but need to get the drawing ball rolling asap

>>6209307
awesome work
>>6206449
cool to see your brush and drawing style pairings

>>6200980
very nice!

I spent more time than I expected on this, it really took me a while to draw this pose. There is something about the foreshortening that tells me yes, something else that tells me no. I want to go to bed.
The background is to misslead and not show so much negative space.

>>6216475
>>6216555
>>6214875
blog?

Today’s automatic drawing sketches

>>6216555
i love

>>6202894
HIP DRAIVE

love it

>>6217237
blog onegai!

>>6214875
colour em

>>6217237
https://twitter.com/marrii1n
>>6217682
soon soon

>>6200496
this is not what thread meant by alternative

>>6210747
Stuff about milk, really got milk on the brain recently.

>>6211526
Spanks buddy

>>6212462
Point taken, usually i try to stick to pretty simple comic coloring for time, but i wanted to color the cow a bit more. It doesn’t look like it matches the same style tho.

I looked up oglaf its kinda funny. Sometimes i feel like people run out of stuff to write about. The oatmeal guy only creates content when he has something worth saying. I kind of like that idea.

>>6213811
Yeah i might dial it down later if i make a family comic so that i can show it to people we know..

>>6218445
i mean, they are not wrong either

>>6218598
>>6218600
The values and brushwork on these is fantastic.
>>6218595
>>6218593
Was the purpose of these to look like street art? It has this chalk and spray paint feeling.

>>6218629
Since the 2010s, social networking sites in the Japanese-speaking world have increasingly incorporated expressionist elements in their published character illustrations.
While this was initially chosen out of a critical awareness of character illustration and contemporary Japanese pop culture, it is now becoming merely a decorative choice.
I would like to use a different format to approach the concept they initially set forth.
This text was translated from Japanese using deepL translation.

>>6218598
別人なんだけど、こんな所で日本人がいるなんて驚いたね。
結構好きだ、その絵。確かめたいが、あなたの絵なんだね? そうだったら、ブログや置き場とかあるのでしょうか?

>>6218812
自分のツイッターアカウントです
その他はプロフィール欄に
>https://twitter.com/RAN89_634NO

>>6218842
ありがとうございました。こっちはブログを放棄したが、新しいのを作ったらフォローするつもりです。

気に入った作品を参考して、rkgkやってみました。

>>6207708
>>6210747
>>6218478
>"I want to make something like Calvin and Hobbes!"
Ah yes remember all the piss shitting nipple breastfeeding comics Bill Watterson did?
just awful

Trying a new workflow

>>6219070
too dark overall, needs more value balance/contrast between the bg and shadow on the character

>>6216475
super cute roll-chan

>>6218842
KONNICHIWA, DUDE! I DON'T CARE ABOUT SPECIFIC ASIAN TYPES BECAUSE I DIG ALL ASIAN CHICKS!

THEY ARE SO DOCILE AND TIGHT, CAN YOU HOOK ME UP?

I love how seamlessly this artist got a nice hybrid art style of east and west.

>>6220020
Its a cute style, I want to see that girl getting fucked by the phoenix.

The phoenix looks a bit too goofy though.

>>6217771
How do you add the grayscale that you have now to the final color version that you make later? Or does it get discarded later? Just a general question ????

>>6204311
i like it
this sorta look gets big on youtube

>>6217304
Doodle. Practicing color.

>>6220020
first, i too enjoy deevad not his art but his contributions with resources, his pretty chill

second, stop being an east/west retard mongoloid

Barely ever get (yous) gib yous.

Todays workload

>oops, all anime!
Nice alternative art style thread.

>>6222312
You can post your drawings too anon, but I don't think being garbage is a style.

another wip

>>6222530
pretty nice, your texturing could use some work though. The hair especially feels very straw like as is.
Everything kinda does but you can get away with that on the clothes, not so much the hair.
bulkier sections of color with some implied strands would serve rather than this sorta hatching thing you got going on.
if you really want to hatch, just do it with larger flowing lines rather than the scribble.

>>6222581
ah thanks, i used an ai to generate it then painted over it so im still getting the hang of things. Just starting out.

>>6222761
Blog??

>>6222312
>4chan was created as an unofficial English-language counterpart to the Japanese imageboard Futaba Channel, also known as 2chan, and its first boards were created for posting images and discussion related to anime.
You can go back to tumblr/twitter.

first time I tried using a downloaded texture because there was no way I wanted to try doing the snakeskin on my own

Small aesthetic experiment for a comic I want to write...Any day now.

In my head I visualize being in watercolor so I'm seeing how viable this is. I think it looks nice, I think the messiness is synonymous with water color so I have some freedom to fuck up as long I have some clean lineart, but works better with really limited color pallets. Readability and contrast are the bigger issues.

wip

>>6222309
I like it, blog?

>>6209340
She's too thin and her body like a log. Try more of this look (right, just don't draw so big booba if you don't like soft girls), also notice how huge her eyes and head.

trying to combine moe and cartooning.

>>6224546
Super cute! Can't even say that it's "not anime".

>>6224222
Twitter is @reeolah

Glad u liked it. >>6224222

Trying to make vector art for a shirt. Any tips.
>>6224357
Looks like Albedo from Overlord.
>>6224546
Form in the shirt looks bad. Work on the folds and shading.
>>6224678
Badass.
>>6224872
Warrior has such a nice face.
>>6223971
Is this Windows 95 paint?
>>6222408
Forearm is fucked. But she looks cute.
>>6217810
Really nice. Post anywhere?

>>6225013
Thanks
https://twitter.com/hopelssromancer
https://www.instagram.com/hopelssromancer/

heron knight fella

>>6224546
This is really pretty! I really like your rendering, anon

>>6203611
>>6203616
got it further than I normally get things

>>6189963
Absolutely beautiful

more hxh weebshit

>>6226094
very nice anon

>>6219885
>I DIG ALL ASIAN CHICKS
>THEY ARE SO DOCILE AND TIGHT
Lol, maybe this was the case back in the 70's. You have very clearly never dated an asian chick. They are actually the worst.

>>6200980

>>6200980

>>6226417
tell me you are a vergin without telling me...

>>6226628
What? Speak like a fucking human.

>>6226857
I would wear them like gloves.

I really like tkmiz's rough, sharp, minimalistic style. I asked way back and it was identified as oekaki-style. Any other artists that are similar to tkmiz?

>>6228782
>Any other artists that are similar to tkmiz?
Yeah, check out the /beg/ thread.

How be this?

>>6229741
It uploaded sideways rip

>>6225103
looks cool af but the values are atrocious, seperate the background more, make him a much lighter value so we can see the detail and linework aswell.

im gonna have to start drawing instead of playing videogames every weekend huh

>>6189965
>>6196988
>>6208723
>>6209691
>>6216475
>>6225103
very nice

>>6226574

>>6231678
yea you're absolutely right, I'll lighten him up. Thanks anon!

>>6231535
Really nice coloring
>>6231688
Well done, anon, I'm doing the same

>>6229741
rad style, like the shading

So just what I observed when reviving my Pixiv account.
After almost 5 years of no activity on Pixiv, I posted a new fanart. Then immediately the activity shows that it has been already seen by around 85 users.
In Twitter, I posted the same fanart with the same tag but there's almost no activity, probably 5 views.
Mind you, my twitter account has twice the number of followers compared to my pixiv account.
This just shows that for new or small artists, Pixiv is still a better platform for art compared to Twitter for spreading your art.
I'm also using Pixiv again since I'm getting tired of looking at non-art posts on Twitter.

It sounds like a pixiv ad but I'm just surprised by the huge difference in activity.
Maybe twitter is better if you're on the 1k+ follower range? Idk.

Here some Ruka booba I drew last month for /a/.

>>6232918
I literally started unfollowing people who started talking about non-art stuff too much.

I don't care about irl life photos or thoughts, but I don't understand artists who retweet 10000 threads in the span of an hour

>>6232918
Twitter is good if you're able to get retweets going. Either by using trending tags or hitting popular influencers

>>6202908
hello, how is your process of studying characters or any topic? Thanks in advance and amazing work :)

>>6231843
>>6231438
>>6218595
>>6218593
this style is cute

moral orel fanart
>>6217507
@ribosoma_42

>>6192913
This reminds me a bit of Hylics, really great work.

>>6191927
Sick af anon. Keep it up

>>6211556
Bro who made this

>>6231688
got it done, never rendering again

>>6229741
very nice, get a cheap scanner from a thrift store

>>6232918
Deviantart lately has been really good at getting exposure, I've been getting 10-30 followers per 100-200 favs per drawing the last two months. Twitter is legitimately the worst at getting exposure and it's because you have to rely on cronyism (other people retweeting you). You don't need to do anything on actual art sites, the algorithm and your talent are sufficient.

>>6239743
beautiful

>>6239743
I love your stuff, the lineart is always good. Have a nice day anon.

>>6231739

I feel encourages to draw more.

>>6232232
>>6231843
>>6231438
>>6218593
>>6218595
>>6218600
>>6218598
make a blog you jap! AAAAAAAH

>>6232232
>>6231843
>>6231438
>>6218593
>>6218595
>>6218600
>>6218598
make a blog you jap! AAAAAAAH

>>6227246
Hahahaha, for some reason this really makes me laugh.

bump

How do you make flat colors look so appealing?

>>6243701
value

>>6244281
What tools are most valuable for this type of drawing?

>>6244286
Tools? wtf are a you talking about? You sound like a /beg/ pyw, it may be that you're just bad in general, it sure does sound like it by the retarded questions you're asking

crits?
Also whats a good rule of thumb for drawing appealing hair? I have a hard time seeing the locks or strands wtv as simple distinct volumes.

>>6244371
Im scared to draw black ppl bc I think ppl will call me racist lol

>>6244460
>im scared of black people
yeh, I don't trust them

>>6200932
that's sick dude

i'm copying the style on the right. what makes my art on the left look different/worse?

>>6246253
1) The head/facial features. It looks western.
2) Proportions, legs are too thin.

>>6246467
thanks for the feedback. is this better? was there anything else holding it back?

>>6246253
There are some issues with proportion and anatomy: the torso and arms seem a bit too short (especially in comparison to the rest of her body), the sneakers appear too heavy for such thin and long legs (to the point that it feels like she could injure her shin bones or ankles), and her right knee looks kinda off (like it isn't flexed in a proper way).

However, you could fix those problems by tweaking the pose, as well as the size of the body parts in question.

Smoother lineart, along with more readable and appealing silhouettes, will also help you get closer to the style you want, as the three examples that you included share those qualities.

>>6246589
Oops. I should have refreshed the thread before posting.

Not the anon you're asking, but the smaller head and shorter legs make her look better proportion-wise, and the face is indeed closer to the style you're aiming for.

I think the sneakers are still too large, and the knee continues to be distracting, but other than that your picture has improved.

>>6246589
Oops. I should have refreshed the thread before posting.

Not the anon you're asking, but the smaller head and shorter legs make her look better proportion-wise, and the face is indeed closer to the style you're aiming for.

I think the sneakers are still a bit too large, and the knee continues to distract me, but other than that your picture has improved.

>>6243701
by applying them to a cute anime girl.