/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>4786131
Pubic area is wrong.
Tattos on girl's neck looks like piece of cloth.
Legs pose too, it appears as she standing on his legs

>>4786131
Adjusted her face. Looked wonky earlier

>>4786131
why does she have a tiny french mustache

>>4786246
kek, can't unsee it now

>>4786131
The biggest problem here is that Horn's bored ass expression makes it look like she's reading a teleprompter rather than enjoying the dick. Kills the all of the sex appeal and makes the other girl look like she's outright out faking it. You can save shabby porn with a good face, but a bad face just takes you of the fantasy and ruins the appeal.

>>4786131
>this level of perspective and anatomy is what people pay for
hold me anons...

>>4786257
s-sauce?

>>4786225
Well thats my 4 months non-stop portrait study out the trashcan. Thanks dude

>>4786266
>4 months of "non-stop portrait study"
you're full of shit, theres no way you studied for more than 4 weeks and not be able to analyze your own drawing to figure out the problems.

>>4786275
pyw jelly beg

>>4786260
You should be rejoicing that the bar to making it lower than ever before.
>>4786263
The manga is calles Innocent, it can be mildly gay at times if thats not your thing, but it's a fantasy read so far (im alittle more than half way throught it) and the art is incredible.

Cool

>>4786275
I'm legit not joshin you, I've been drawing the asaro head and skulls, reading loomis and hogart. It just seems to get trashed in my brain when I draw anime, probs cause anime heads don't even look like they have skulls and I just seem to rule the rules of 3rd when I draw them too.

>>4786266
Don’t mention it, champ. The eyes are always in the midpoint between top of head and bottom of chin. But for extra cuteness it can be the eyebrows at the midpoint. Congrats on your first commission btw

>>4786257
Maybe that's the commissioner's fetish, some people are into emotionless sex

>>4786287
Watch manga materials' head video

>>4786319
Yeah, commissioner asked for a emotionless female and an overly horny girl.

>>4786319
>>4786328
You can have a deadpan face and still show that they are having an visible reaction to stimuli (body language, ephasis on speed, sweating etc.) This is just look like she's doing and feeling nothing and doesn't read as sexy, nor enjoyable.

>>4786366
> look like she's doing and feeling nothing
thats the point dude

>>4786396
Dead fish fetishists isn't an excuse to be complete uninspired with the commission, but to each it's own I suppose.

>>4786396
She doesn't even look emotionless enough, the light in her eyes signals that she's congizant and the body shows that some sort effort. If you're going to make her limp then make her LIMP. Have her realing back with her shoulders down, slightly parted the lip to so a slack draw, remove the light from her eyes, make the other girl emote even more, and draw the male gripping her hips as he forces her down onto her cock. That's infinitely hotter that this motionless picture that feels like a pose study rather than a good fucking.

>>4786613
I'm not drawing a dead body here, just a numb person.

Might be hard to read, but something more like this should be about right -- your perspective is all jacked. Might just need to start over.

>>4786131
I doubt you got a commission. The bar seems like it’s set pretty low

>>4786752
:3

>>4786780
Lmao the OP was way better perspective wise.

Don't forget the eyebrows

>>4786997
And pose wise. The face and lack of eyebrows were kinda...

Changed the crop, face proportions, posture, etc. Everything feels too symmetrical but i guess you did it intentionally
i'm not experienced in this whole anime thing, so i'd recommend looking up to artists like hews since it's pretty obvious you're emulating him (that's not a problem)
Not confident with the leg foreshortening, if this was something for a client of mine, i'd definetly look for references. Not sure about the expression too, i don't know the character nor the context of this pic

>>4786131
>can I get critiques on this.
The thing that stands out the most is the middle chick having her eyes way too high on the forehead.

Also your line is atrocious, work on it, this looks like you're having a seizure.

Welcome to the club I guess.

>>4786131
chick on the right isn't looking at the viewer

>>4787246
Who the fuck are you and where do I queue to suck your dick?

>>4787268
i post on pokinha from time to time

Are we really not going to talk about the absolute fucketry that happened to her leg?

Bro OP is gonna trace that

i noticed coomer artist think NUDE BOOBIE = SEXY
i mean just a naked woman isnt sexy hell looking at two ppl fuck isnt rhat sexy either
it really depends on angles and how u place your camera
op you suck at placing the camera, it is super unsexy and flat

>>4788370
the thing is it works, even if you understand just a naked woman isnt sexy it'll still do well to most people

>>4786257
It seems the author photobashed the clothes and the background

>>4788378
maybe if you are a teenage boy but anyone over 18 wont find any of the coomer shit ppl post on here fappable

>>4787246
theres actual good artists on /ic/ that help?

>>4788390
I bet you go to /vent/ and not on /las/

>>4788388
you think too highly of people

>>4788393
what's /las/

>>4786131
Zelda's face is supposed to be in a higher position from the guys's perpective but somehow it looks like her face is a mask that doesn't morph i'd suggest some simple adjustments

>Her Ears are too high it should be wayyy lower from that perspective detail the lower earlobe a little more and i
>Eyes are too level like she's right in front of him and not looking down to fix this angle them a bit outward
>She's supposed to be at least looking a little bit down to him not to be in a unconfortable neck position so sher mouth should be higher as well
>anon fixed it>>4786225 to a point her jawline was wayy too long just put the mouth a bit higher and it's good

>>4786131
Why does the gal om the left have an ahegao face when nothing in the pic indicates her getting pleasured?

it's not colored

>>4788390
We had simon/teal
I've seen bbbchan, marmalade mum, blooparchives and some other dudes helping now and then

>>4788399
A circlejerk of stupid beginners

>>4787246
how is going to learn if you do it for him

>>4787246
>op got paid for his scribbles
>meanwhile someone in the replies absolutely blows his """art""" out of the water for free
That's a yikes, honestly

>>4786266
What did you study for 4 months? No really what happened in those 4 months

Here's my take. Not drawing that gay furry shit though

>>4790704
>flat
>chicken scratched
/begs/ like you shouldn't be attempting redraws.

>>4790706
how about now

>>4787246
It may be a massive improvement but the face looks generic (dr graevling and sakimi have a serious problem with this), OP's face was "fresh" but boring.
t. Expert coomer

>>4790804
So you're saying OP had SOUL?

>>4786131
how much burgerbux equivalent did you get for your first commission?

>>4790804
more like t. stupid beg with no taste

>>4790757
The anatomy is bad and unappealing in everyway. The faces are small and uninteresting.

>>4789666
if you only knew how bad things really are

>>4791078
about three fiddy

>>4786131
just get a 3d model and make the position you want and trace it so you can skip all the hassle and you get fast cash asap

>>4787246
thinly veiled flexing

>>4792576
you need to post the images

>>4790757
they look mildly bothered

Here's my take, any feedback?

>>4794061
awful perspective, anon. you've clearly not had anybody ride your dick before.

I think the your drawing of the bottom left girl is good. No idea how to draw the animal ears, but I tried to improve the appeal of the main girl. Might've made her boobs too big, but that's just personal taste.

>this entire thread
Holy fuck you all are bad at drawing sex.

>>4794913
pyw

>>4794465
Do you even anatomy?

>>4788380
Looks damn good tho

>>4794937
Why is this phrased used so much on here? It sounds like a "no u" argument to me.

>>4795147
pyw

>>4795147
It's the go to response for crab comments, because if you're just gonna shit on people you have to be prepared to post your own work to be shat on. Try giving constructive crit instead of saying 'lol this sucks'.