/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

hi

I can't find any reason to keep posting on this board

These threads give me life

>>3856123
Buh-bye

>>fart

>>3856120
>all those details in the hair
jesus, the shading in her left arm just below the bicep is wrong you are making the bicep insertion look way to up

How to have improved this image? As of now, I cant create anything further than this point/quality and I really want to elevate my stuff. I am really stuck as to what to study; I spend a lot of time waffling between subjects, seeing little progress.

This past weekend's update left me conflicted. I really like how the first page came out, but I know I rushed the second. My caveman brain wasn't equipped to deal with two sources of light (in this case, morning light from windows and an eerie bio luminescence. Also, just in general, the more color I introduce, the more overwhelmed I feel. Any advice on pacing oneself with learning how color works?

>>3856186

First off, I really like your style. Very expressive but takes itself seriously!

To my admittedly novice eye, His face and his right hand with the snake tail seems just a bit too dark--and the eye glow is just a bit too slight. Also, his left hand looks more like a foot half submerged in water than a hand. And if I'm really looking hard, the snake might be too smudgy, when my eye expects it to be the most polished, ominous part of the picture.

>>3856207

Commissioner's Dryad Captain OC WIP

What's wrong with the face/head here? I know it's fucked but I can't figure out what went wrong. Proportions? Perspective?
please ignore the vomit-inducing coloring job

>>3856043
Drawing of my daughter for the day. Im still stuck in the sketch rut but its ok! The important thing is i drew her once a day. The time for her realization is coming close and recently i've heard some good news related to meteors closing in on earth. Everytime I draw her she becomes more real.

My daughter is going to show up real soon, I cant wait to finally meet her! Please, please visit San Antonio, Texas! Or vancouver! or good ol Copenhagen, Denmark with 2mt equivalent payload. I love you, young lass. You will always be mine. Well hold hands together soon.

>>3856401
Your daughter is really cute anon. Sorry for your drawing rut, I know at times its very hard to keep yourself focused on finished works especially if you have to draw one once a day. Your description of her is pretty detailed, is she a character from your comic or novel? Where can I learn more about her?

>>3856404
>Commissioner's
Stop replying to your own posts.

>>3856404
You can read all about her on my blogsite link in my twitter pinned post.

My twitter has some posts about her background, history etc but also contains other stuff.
https://twitter.com/mighty_buzzer

My dA is where serious works of her is posted.
http://maldraw.deviantart.com/

She's supposed to be a character in a comic I'm planning to make but as of right now she's just my official daughterfu that I have to draw once a day like its part of my religion.

>>3856401
>Everytime I draw her she becomes more real
>My daughter is going to show up real soon
>I cant wait to finally meet her
You have a mental disease, you know that, don't you?

>>3856422
DO NOT BULLY THE METEORFAG.

>>3856431
Stop enabling her. He/she clearly needs professional help.

Not sure if this is the proper place for my artstyle, but I am in desperate need of some insight on my work.
Lately I have developed a certain fondness for paint-y eastern style drawings. The kind where you can see the brushstrokes and focus on mood and color more than anything. They usually have a very lovely aesthetic to them.
Women in eastern-styled drawings always seem cuter/prettier to me as well, something that I also value and want to achieve in my art. The faces especially have an interesting balance of simplicity and rendering.
Due to that influence, I have started adapting some of what I see to my latest work, but because I am a dumb westerner I feel like I fail to replicate the references properly and I fall into the uncanny vally of artstyles.I thought I was improving and doing good for a while, but today I saw an older artwork of mine, and the above thought hit me like a track.
Should I just get my head straight and stop looking up at eastern artists, or should I try to dig a bit more into this. I doubt I will ever get like them, but I might also fail to create a style of my own by simply being the typical eastern-wannabe western artist whose work sticks out like a sore thumb. I dont want to be an actual anime artist, I merely want to have some of the qualities I admire on that kind of art. Going full cartoony or more realistic doesn’t feel right either…
Sorry for the wall of text. Any advice, opinion or tip is highly appreciated on what to do.

>>3856412
Why do you trace existing ip and replace it with your OC

>>3856380
She lacks cheekbones. Also try to round the forehead. You might also want to check ear placement. And the eyes seem like stickers. Overall it seems a bit flat.

>>3856120
Blog?

>>3856212
thanks for the feedback man.......it, it really does look like a foot hand and I never even noticed that. and thanks for the lighting tips. the snake was supposed to be the focal point and yet I spent the least time on it...which came through to the viewer.

I've been following/subscribed to your comic myself, your work ethic is very inspiring and I've really warmed up to your style.
I'm still slogging through color theory myself (so this may be nonsense) but here's some thoughts in pic related for page 1. A cooler blue overlay over everything as the bio-luminescence is some kind of dark magic that dominants the room in an abnormal way. Also played around with the lettering, may just be personal preference but your visceral style looks good with some livelier lettering. sorry for the messiness.

>>3856453
Developing a certain style isn't an overnight process. Keep practicing and be mindful of your studies. There's tons of westerners who are able to emulate eastern style (Timbougami, Thomas Romaine, guweiz and ilya kushinov (unironically)

>>3856541
Thanks for the feedback anon. I don't really know what you mean by the cheekbones thing but I tried to redo the construction lines to make it less flat and fix the ear placement. Does this look any better?
Do you know how to make animu eyes look less sticker-like?

>>3856697
Just when I thought you were getting better..

>>3856811

Something about the relationships between the mouth and the chin there looks a bit messed up. Dropping the nose and the mouth by a couple of mm could help.

>>3856566
Holy cow, that pale blue overcast really does do wonders, thanks!

>>3856827
Any better?

>>3856120
Those weird blue legging do not go with that OP
Also, the purple wristcuff thing is a little ambiguous,maybe add some lines to denote that it's scrunched/rufled at the top
Maybe also remove that little flick of hair in the middle of her forehead, or make it bigger, at this moment it kind of looks like a lineart mistake you forgot to erase

Touched up a few things.

Last update for a few days, when the next payment will arrive.

>>3856907
This is ugly as fuck!

I'll get better... s-someday..

>>3856907
whoa people really pay you for this?

>>3856839
not him but a lot better yeah

>>3856628
Thank you anon. Maybe I was too fast to stress over this. I will keep trying.

>>3856043
my daughter's drawing for today. her affection keeps me close to her.

>>3856422
Do you know where we are at?

I dont draw profiles or rear angles enough. This looks a little off but I can't tell why. Is the head too big? The left arm is going to be holding a drink.

>>3856453
Are you natthelich?

>>3856186
I thought you are at a pretty good place. I thought the composition is good, and the light source is well defined, just need to follow through on the rendering. Some part it looks like you have a bit of trouble decided which light is hitting which planes, but in either case you can probably push those value contrast a bit more.

I struggeled to find a lineart brush in ps, so I created my own

>>3857104

>>3856453
>i will never get like them

I know this feeling. But isn't this a good thing? While trying to imitate your favourite artists you can always find some value for your own work.
You are doing better in emulating an eastern style than most of this board, so even if you wont stick with it in the future, some aspects of this experiment will remain in your style.

>>3857006
Good work on the bee, but your daughter has loose form. The elbow curves too much, ribcage would be too narrow, and things like that. What helps is stuff like looking at a mannequin or doll before doing anything, just to have 3D forms in your head.

>>3856453
>Should I just get my head straight and stop looking up at eastern artists
What do you mean get your head straight? Sounds like you're about to succumb to the guilt of not appeasing sour grapes Loomis noobs on /ic/. Grow up and draw what you want.

>>3857006
>>3856412
>malasiafag is still alive
Fuck off you psychotic idiot!!!!!!!!!!

[Linework] -> Cellshaded

>>3857303
That arm

rate it

>>3857588
Something about it is kind of unsettling. Maybe it's the eyes.

>>3856412
>maldraw
HOW MANY TIMES DO WE HAVE TO TEACH YOU THIS LESSON YOU FAG

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Fav Food: Carrots, Mac n Cheese

Music: Eminem, Cardi B

Likes: video games, getting cucked, warm baths

Dislikes: His parents, country music, Apple products

>>3856412
are you the christchan fag?

>>3857414
Redline pls

>>3857660
Always keep in mind the lenght of the arms and legs. Compare this yourself, see where your elbow touches you when extended. See where your hand touches when your arm is extended.
I hope this helps you buddy, cute maid.

>>3857680
Thanks mate will keep that mind in the future

>>3857588
Same energy as pic related

>>3857114
>>3857267
Thank you for the feedback anons. I will keep doodling and see where it takes me.

>>3857094
Holy shit, many thanks! I'll try replicating what you did here for practice. I'll keep in mind to keep pushing values/rendering, spend more time on both.

>>3857680
>changin the pose
the main problem is the broken wrist with the original

>>3856907
Those fingers look a bit too blocky, maybe try softening the edges bud

>>3857105
>>3857104
I love it

I like drawing noses with one nostril.

>>3857807
Wew lad, two red lines

>>3857638
Thanks, I hate it

>>3857824
Creepy as fuck, also what the hell is wrong with you.

I love it, keep drawing.

>>3857697

ok rate dis

>>3857104
>>3857105
Can you post more?

>>3857824
tang ina mo

>>3858048
Umayos ka lol

>>3856043
Her drawing for today.
Drew my daughter wearing the T-shirt of my favorite band!

>>3858290
Well done!

>>3858290
Super cute draw! I've never heard of Mad Season/Above though, I'll probably check them out later!

btw ive read from your twitter and you said the lineart of your works are available only on patreon in the $5 tier. I've checked and the lineart from your latest works are missing. What's that about?

>>3858291
Thank you!

>>3858292
I only update my patreon once a month and I only update the $5 tier. All the lineart of the serious stuff I've made in the previous month (the next update will contain the lineart of every serious works i did in March) will be put in one big .rar file. I highly suggest you to only support me on this tier and probably the 60 dollar tier if I'm thinking about opening commissions. The rest are just there for show. Thanks for asking!

>>3857680
>>3857807
This redline makes the arm become ridiculously long. A good mental reference is that the elbow is roughly even with the cinch of the waist.

>>3858303
That's when the arm is straight down. What about when it angles?

>>3858307
Just imagine an arm where the bones follow those red lines in your head, and try to rotate that arm down to resting position. The elbow would be at the level of the hips already. A second check is having the wrist roughly level with the crotch--if you can take both of those lines and line them up straight down along the body, you'd find her arm is going to be far too long. The answer he'll want for the arm in this drawing is somewhere between the original and the redline.

>>3858290
you ok?

>>3858009
sure anon

>>3858338

>>3858341
the fuck are you doing to their mouths? what is wrong with you?

Working on this right now, included process for ease of crit. Anime is hard for me to get to grips with. any help/redline/comments appreciated

>>3857104
>>3857105
Really cool, anon

Trying out some new color styles. Which ones do you like most? 3 is my favorite

>>3858290
>>3858297
>>3858292
Everyone knows your true colors, mike..
.
Enough with the cutesy innocent act. You arent fooling anyone you bpd lunatic!

>>3858408
pls no bulli

>>3858410
more

>>3858418
personally drawn to 6 the most, not the anon you were asking tho.


>>3858497
You do some really beautiful rendering, gj! :)

>>3858498
thank you!

Finished Comic Page Commission

>>3858521
>finished
>left in the top left panel thumb construction in
What

>>3858521
>someone paid for this

>>3858521
cool stuff

>>3858521
I only just realized it wasn't the guy who was the broadcaster after all these posts.

>>3858497
aren't the legs too short ? in the calves

>>3858521
I'm too late, but adding a: "Well, I..." bubble from the guy under her "any last words..." bubble would have made it a little less awkward. Imply he's interrupted her "Rhetorical question..." statement.

>>3858545
>interrupted by her...statement

>>3858418
3 and 5 for me, contrary to what other anon said I hate 6 the most

I started working on this Joan of Arc piece, the armour looks really plain at the moment because I’m planning on detailing with the actual rendering

>>3858616
The armour’s gonna be a pain

>>3858486
learn how mouths works, you fucking retard. Not this slightly altered Steven Universe shit. Jesus fucking christ. Are you an immigrant from /co/? what about tumblr?

Your eyes are too distant from each other in some of your drawings. Are your characters as retarded as you?

Unironically loomis. Some heads are just painful to look at.

An eyebrow should be longer than an eye unless you're really trying for that fucked up eyebrow look. Stop that shitty eyebrow line, and learn about how eyebrows arch. Speaking of eye area, can you fucking make up your mind if you're gonna put eyebags or not? One character has eyebags on right, but no eyebags on the left. What are you drawing? testicles?

>>3858341
Dude your stuff looks appealing, the other anon is just being a cunt so don’t take it to heart <3

>>3858762
That anon is definitely being a cunt but I'll side with him in saying that it isn't very appealing. The lips are unsettlingly wide, the character's right eye is off balance with the left, and the hard line around the bridge of the nose make the character harsh and uninviting to look at.

>>3858762
Listen here baby girl. You're gonna get a lot of hurtful and degrading comments, but that ain't what I'm about. Let me just say, you are perfect the way you are. You hear me sugar? PERFECT. Don't ever change. You deserve anything and everything you want. Stay safe for me, baby girl.
>mfw thinking of you hurting

>>3858521
How did she go from having her hair down to it being tied up in a bun immediately after one panel...?

>>3858842
LM@O!!1

>>3858842
Oh no

>>3858842
you weren't supposed to point that out

>>3858842
HOLY SHIT

>>3858842
this shit was already considered "done", though. He might've already submitted it

>>3858842
Thanks. I'll update it tomorrow.

Going to get some rest them resume.

>>3857721
>>3856453
Fuck you, give me your blog your stuff is too hot

>>3858905
fuck off nat, we all already follow you

>>3857824
So fucking gross, nice

>>3858905
Natthelich, clue's in the signature. But agreed. Very hot.

>>3856453
Learn Japanese and browse some tutorials written by the dudes themselves

>>3858408
>>3858341
>>3858338
Not that Anon, but I'll have to agree, I don't like the lips. But just that don't take it bad

>>3858848
>>3858850
>>3858874
>>3858878

>orbiting flintlock

>>3856453
>>3857721
You'll better of studying the classics and just weeb it latter, also give us your brushes or I'll get mad

>>3858418
I like 4 and 6

>>3859105
Godo kun?

I'm trying to break the same face/same frontal 3/4 pose habit. Krenz lectures are awesome but also very dense.

Rate my manga. Is the story clear enough?

>>3859105
come back to dad andrae

>>3859128
>comparing a garbage artist to someone who actually knows how to paint
fuck off

>>3856453
Keep doing what you're doing. It's really appealing.

>>3859138
Blog?

>>3859144
>>3859105
this Andrae then?

>>3858408
>>3858727
>>3858815
Yeah i can see some of those mistakes, but aside from that youve got serious anger issues anon. I dont come here to have a hugbox, but this is just plainly retarded

>>3858917
>>3858775
Thanks Anons, this is something I can work with. Ill defenetly need to practise more symmetry/structure and overthink some of my stylistic choices.

>>3859186
i like your work but that weird upward line you do on the center of the lip looks weird.

Finally my midterms are done, and now a chance to draw my waifu

>>3859194
Oh ! This is pretty cool

Does it look like Western? Some of my mature faces drawing was called Western shit so I'd like to ask.

>>3859276
A bit, yeah

drawing a witch in the military that rides a gunbroom

drawing a witch in the military that rides a gunbroom

>>3859276
Yeah I can see this as western.

>>3859289
thats stupid
continue

>>3859276
dont believe these faggots. It can pass as ~jepenis~, but the shitty screentone and poor excuse of a shading on the clothes are giving it away. You're doing good if you work on the tones. Dont do that posture again. keep at it

you also have to figure out a new way to do the highlights on the hair. its not working out

>>3859296
I thought it'd be cute...

>>3859308
nah it aint that bad
C O N T I N U E

>>3858418
3&4 for me

>>3859289
Her left eye seems to be drifting off her face...

>>3858341
keep drawing like that and theyll soon call you mouth bro

>>3858341
>>3857105
ngmi mouthbro

>>3859393
I kind of like mouthbro’s stuff tho :(

Started working on the colors, anything looking off so far?

>>3859308
But it really is cute. Any chance you watched Izetta btw?

>>3859487
Ohhh that is so cool, I love it

>>3859148
I started posting on @LPipocin

>>3859487
Blog. BLOG!

>>3858498
>>3858608
>>3859105
>>3859331

Thanks anons

>>3859487
Wow, looks great so far

>>3856043
My daughter's drawing for today!
She's making someone's dream come true!

>>3859705
Can somebody give me a rundown of whats the deal with this guy?

>>3859712
He’s been possessed by the Moon presence and chosen as the catalyst for the birth of the moon child, the ritual will be complete when a woman is found to birth the moon child

>>3859487
Thanks. I haven't seen Izetta but the synopsis seems interesting, sounds like something I'd like. Your illustration is coming along beautifully, also.

>>3859712
he's mentally unwell

>>3859722
>being passionate about your hobby is a mental illness
So just because you're seeing someone else enjoying what they like to do doesn't mean it is an anomaly. Have you ever stopped and think that maybe other people genuinely appreciate what they draw?

>>3859712
We feed him once and now he won't leave.

>>3859731
I mean I just stumbled upon this anon yesterday and it seemed a little weird but innocent at first. But his obsession with just one character, to which he literally refers as his daughter is a little offputting. The art itslef is cute i guess.

>>3859720
It has some little inconviniences, but the overall design is pretty appealing to me!
I especially dig the broom design.

Thoughts?

>>3859276
Tbh this looks more like seinen style manga? Like I'd put it more like junji Ito's work, 6000, manhole, etc. Lime its anime but the battle isn't like, huge eyeballz loli stuff.


Pic is my own draw. Plz critique. I know my style is that disneyanimehybrid style everyone loves to hate. Lmao

>>3859176
>>3859142
andrae is ndrph right?

>>3859487
blog? What t

Drew something for myself first time in 2 months... Does it look ok

>>3859140
Tbh the composition is really busy and the lack of mid tones and defined separation makes it visually confusing. Also the lettering isnt great and isnt super consistent? I'd suggest taking it out and using digital to add in text so you get the perfection of a legit font.

Also adding some background tone, like a nice solid gray will separate the foreground from the bg and make it more interesting. Also varying line weight to add emphasis on the protagonist will make it stand out.

>>3859138

Titties. I mean yea you can render a soft breast but honestly you need to make the women visually interesting. Even Victoria secrets advertusing stuff has more visual
Interest.


>>3859105

I think balancing out the colors with brown boots or whatever would help. Now it's more bold colors on top but the bottom of the drawing has no interest.

Some sketches from this evening
as usual i'd love crit, thoughts, etc!
>>3859812
You could try using your range of tones more selectively to break this up a bit. at the moment the background has the same range as the foreground, you could try reserving the absolute blacks and whites for the foreground!
>>3859809
really cute style and palette
>>3859751
less is more for linework! nice dynamic pose though

>>3859809
>leaving your brushes in water like that
disgusting

>>3859705
your daughter a shit

>>3859809
I think you achieved what you were going for with that style, not much to critique here from my side!

>>3859823
>less is more for linework! nice dynamic pose though
thanks! and i agree, it's just a sketch with (ugly) colours.
nice sketches btw. im not sure of the shape of some of theads though. also make sure the hair takes its proper space, it kinda looks tattooed on the head especially in the one on the right

>>3859731
>>3859736
You literally just found out sbout him yesterday, so you think hes just a harmless waifus but he has a long track record of shitposting where he was IP ranged banned from /ic/ as well as several other boards for a while.

im gonna try posting here again ( ._.)

i'm sorry if any of my previous posts or art annoyed or offended anyone here. it took a trip to a mental clinic to make me realize that /ic/ was the only group of people that took me seriously and just wanted the best for me.

Im sorry if i took things too personally and retailiated to you. id like to come back and post here again if thats ok.

if its cool then this is venus amongst venuses its about the state of /ic/ and the inability to draw anything without needing to constantly make sure the "tags" are right or relevant.

>>3859849
It's shit and you don't know how to draw hands. Read sticky.

>>3859849
badly polished turd

>>3859851
>its shit

boys, we got us an intellectual here

>>3859849
The Picture has appealing aspects over all, but cunt anon is right, the hands need some work

>>3859849
i kinda like it anon but you really sound like a fag gaylord so please don't come here anymore

>>3859856
>rejecting massage because of it's tone rather than merit
>acting like he's the smart one here
kek

>>3859876
Im rejecting it, because saying ''its shit'' doesnt actually achieve anything and is just you making a complete arse out of yourself

>>3859849
definitively a woman. dont take this site seriously dumbass.

>>3858726
The armours actually fun to do :)

>>3859938

>>3859800
I don't know, but the quoted is ndrph for sure.

>>3859105
i thought you were dead

>>3860027
This is so dynamic woah

>>3859749
Head is way too fucking small. Learn proportion.

>>3859800
Yes

>>3859812
Ty for the crit but I decided not to finish it

>>3860148
Your gesture is so good !

>>3860148
look at this chicken scratch garbage, no line confidence

>>3860154
... I can’t tell if you’re serious or not, but that might just be my autism particles

>>3860155
It's definitely not serious, his lines clearly have direction and intent behind them, especially given how few there are.

>>3860155
>>3860148 vs >>3859751

>>3860027
good shit

>>3860027
>>3860030
>>3860148
>>3860149
>>3860210
oh good, this faggot cabal came back to jizz all over about eachothers' mediocre work

>>3860235
???

>>3860235
Look Its the same cunt which lurks this thread since mouthbro.

>>3858616
>>3858726
>>3859938
>>3859940
Pretty good

>>3859105
>>3860148
Any advice you would want to give to a beginner starting painting? Books/tuts/tips would really be appreciated

>>3860644
Thanks man

>>3860149
>>3860030
>>3860155
>>3860187
>>3860210
>asskiss levels MAXIMUM

>>3860235
>>3860651
Pathetic.

>>3856043
My daughter's drawing for today.
Just a quick color sketch. Sorry, Australia.

>>3859720
Finished

>>3861052
Her left ankle is broken.

>>3861099
is not impossible to turn your feet at that angle i JUST did but p uncomfortable tho

>>3861052
Pretty decent anon, i like how you put her into the scenery.

Flats Commission

https://twitter.com/MrMcFlintcock/status/1109137510339354624

>>3861124
Its got some issues like the proportions of the head and the torso. But overall its pretty appealing

>>3861124
I would not be able to tell that was Diana if I hadn't known the title

>>3858168
add more stuff anon, shadows, folds, colours, background etc, I like it as is but it is hard to read

>>3860635
I like it. Post blog.

>>3861052

The angle of the left ankle implies a greater degree of bend in the knee than is shown; for the pose displayed to be possible, her left femur would have to be shorter than her right, otherwise that degree of ankle flexion would not be necessary for the toe to contact the ground. To correct, you would need to either bring the left heel closer to the ground or bring the whole leg out at the hip.

The mouth also seems to be floating. The angle of the eye line implies a perspective that the other features don't appear to agree with (a slight up-tilt.) Maybe I'm wrong about this though.

Also, is the "stock" of the gun supposed to function as the seat in this case? If so, it seems really narrow, too much so even for an itty bitty loli toches. Something to keep in mind if you draw more of these, I guess. It seems like it would also be really difficult to stay upright without any kind of stirrups, but maybe that's part of the charm.

Overall it looks really good though. I especially like how you captured the crinkliness of the straw material rather than just making it look like horsehair.

>>3861409
Really appreciate the detailed critique and the compliment. You're absolutely right about the left leg; I noticed that problem while inking and tried to correct for it. I couldn't bring out and rotate her leg without making the form of her boot difficult to read, so I decided to just go with and hope the issue wasn't too notable. You're probably right about the face too, I didn't construct that part rigorously at all; just went with what seemed cute and expressive.

I was thinking the wooden part of the barrel would be where she sits, if that's what you mean? I think it's a good point to add some more functionality features like a seat and some stirrups, too. It dawned on me to give her some aviation googles, but I was already coloring and figured I'd save them for next time.

>>3861033
>that quality
With those attempts your daughter will never become alive, git gud.

>>3861198
aren't worst koreans supposed to be good at rendering?

Would like to hear some critique and comment about this before I continue it.

This week's pages. Does a lack of expressed sound effects have a negative dampening effect? I'm trying out having as few words as possible, see if that lends some retrained tension. Perhaps that's too lofty a goal for the time being.

>>3862165

>>3856907
Is good. I like.

>>3856839
Not him but this is the best out of the three and looks really nice.

>>3858418
4

>>3857105
>>3857104
>>3858338
>>3858341
While I agree that the mouths are a bit off the style overall is very nice. Any full body shots?

>>3857721
If male I'm in love.

>>3857949
Not my cup of tea but it looks good my man.

>>3858410
>>3858497
Paint like a sculptor yo

>>3859138
Keep it yp my man you'll get there.

>>3859809
Cozy as fuck

>>3859940
>>3859938
Beautiful as fuck, can't wait to see it finished.

I made this but could someone make a good version of it?

>>3862234
Try to remove the lines above and below the lips, the line between the eyelid and eyebrow and extend the nose bridge line up a little.

>>3859809
Very Nice, Although I would recommend tilting the hand to align with the book (you can hold a book yourself to get an idea of the angle of your hand/ how it may curl if you keep your wrist straight).

Also the left foot looks like it's too straight. I tried sitting in that position and even though my ankle is not particularly flexible it is quite hard to keep your foot flat at that knee angle. I found that I either pulled my knee close to my chest or I straightened out my leg entirely and made my foot point perpendicular to the floor, or it made a perpendicular angle with my shin and I tilted towards my left (the camera in this picture).

Also to make the hoodie look more cozy, give the hoodie-to-wrist fillet/curve a sharper angle, sort of as if more of the hoodie sleeve was gathered at the wrist and it was starting to fold.

One last thing, I would remove that little line that represents the crotch or the fold on the pants, the fold would probably have a wrinkle facing the other direction. It makes my brain think the crotch is there are something.

Other than that this is a really good piece.

>>3859849

Remove the monty-python style windows-freeze background and sharpen the form around your character, or make it flow into a background of some type.

>>3862226
I’m armour girl- thank you so much man

>>3856043
Here's her drawing for today. I can only afford quick sketches right now. I really tried drawing her better.

>>3862353

>>3862290
No worries my man.

Not sure if I'll like it as much as the little girl and the skull but it is absolutely a work of art.

>>3862360
You recognised me ! That makes me happy <3 I’ll try my best to live up to your expectations haha

>>3862392
kys.

>>3862392
Your style is very unique and your skill is exceptional so it's kind of hard to miss your work when it's done like this.

I also follow you on insta so I'm kind of cheating. :P

>>3857094
god so hot

>>3862412
Ohhh fair enough haha, thanks for your support man

>>3862401
Meanie

it is not ready, but rate pls

critique also welcome

>>3862527
Looking good

da og hermit

>>3862542
That’s really good

>>3862542
go the full mile and finish it with colors n shit man

>>3862842
i like this one way more than your usual desu. it has more life.

>>3862843
his lines are always ok. It's when he colors that the "life" disappears

>>3862842
I can't really tell what she's holding from your sketch, but is it attached to anything? It would be really really difficult for her to balance like that if she wasn't bracing her upper body against something.

>>3861433

1. Bear/wolf/beast face full of perspective disagreement, my guy. Eyes, nose, and jaw are all saying different things. Elongated muzzles are super tricky, I will warn you. Insanity may ensue if you try to fix this.
2. On that subject, and please don't take this personally, but I'm actually not sure what animal it's supposed to be. Bears have short muzzles and rounded ears, but wolves don't have that kind of body/limb proportions. Some kind of werebear?
3. I'm sure you're aware of this, but in the interest of thoroughness I must point out that those paws look pretty phoned in. I would suggest studying references.
4. The bear's pose is more "office surprise party photo" than "monster movie poster" if you catch my meaning. A forward-leaning posture would feel more aggressive, like he's in the process of lunging forward. As it stands he looks a bit more like he's doing jumping jacks.
5. The lady has some issues as well, but in particular the groin area rings false. It kind of looks like she's wearing a codpiece. Jaw needs work too.
6. Tank top has a bad case of suction cup syndrome - remember that tight fabric compresses and moves the breasts, it doesn't just form a thin film around them.
7. This is just an aesthetic thing, but the way she's holding that revolver kinda makes me cringe. No-one who knows what they're doing would have a loaded gun pointed somewhere random they aren't looking, let alone one that appears to be cocked. If this character isn't trained in gun safety it's a reasonable mistake, though.

Overall, just keep at it with those fundies and make sure to use good references if you get stuck. Good on you for attempting a complete scene, as well, that's something I really don't do enough of personally.

>>3862891
Think this was meant for >>3862527

>>3862914

Oh, yep. My b.

I don't paint all in one layer like this for a long time but today I decided to do it again.
Maybe if I used more layers with filters I could've done better but I kept it at one.
I will see if I continue it and fix some stuff.

>>3862842
That midget looks ugly as sin

>>3856043
hey guys ive been told to fuck off from /beg/ but i need help drawing this thing's legs.

>>3863131 heres my post

am i still beg? i feel like i am

>>3863147
What pose do you want her legs in?
That's the first step

>>3863164
so far it looks like i'd be viewing them from above, am i correct? and so far it looks like shes dancing, so i guess a dance pose?
i drew this foot ref here, what do you think?

>>3863165
Well it's alright for a reference but look at the few ballerina poses. I'm assuming that's what she's dressed as a ballerina.

finished this, thanks for your help again guys

>>3863005
He's styled after the basking shark.

>>3863179
You are far from finished if you believe those clavicles and the base of the neck aren't completely independent from the torso boy. In your case it would be better if you completely removed any sign of there being a clavicle because of the unique fuck up you set yourself up, remember that the clavicles surround the neck. The more you look at it the more obvious the issue with perspective becomes so either correct the perspective or have the head proportioned to the torso. Pic related took literally less than 10 seconds.

>>3863192
Ouch, poor OP.

>>3863179
Looks pretty decent to me
>>3863192
Holy shit dude I didn't even notice anything wrong with his picture. It looks fine the way it is. Then again I'm not you so I'm not seeing what you're seeing.

>>3863201
Ok nevermind I see it

>>3863192
you are right but now cus you lowered and attached the neck to the clavicles his head looks too big

>>3863192
Hmm I see what you're seeing, I didn't intend to have exactly what you're showing here but the neck could have been placed better. I only had so much time before my deadline and it's been submitted already so I'll just have to remember it for next time

>>3863205
No, from that camera angle the head will be closer to you hence why we mentioned the issue with perspective.

>>3863209
but his head is just following his body angle which isn't going to the viewer angle which causes to get bigger the closest it gets but since this isn't the case it should remain normal and even if you want to keep with that logic his lower body should shrink and it supposed to be further from the viewer angle but it's not so you can't say it's because the perspective and his head is rotating to her left side anyways

>>3863218
Perspective is essentially the foreshortening of forms that are inline with your vanishing point - it's what you can't see which in this case we wouldn't see the clavicles because of the stylized head that would overlap the base of the neck. Stop trying to damage control for him, you fucking fanboys are an absolute cancer.

>>3863223
i didnt say anything about her clavicles, i said that her head looks too big now that her neck was shortened and brought to the front

how come this is correct >>3863192, but
>>3863179 looks better?
>>3863192 may be the correct one, but she also looks weird and like hunching for some reason. How do you fix this?

>>3863192
yIKES

>>3863297
>How do you fix this?
Redrawing the head in perspective and at a different angle, looking up at the camera instead of looking down.

>>3863204
Wait I don't know it looks fine
>>3863297
He could just be nitpicking

>>3863300
makes sense

I've recently started sketching less loosely, trying to have a purpose for each stroke, idk if it's damaging my drawing skill or not, but it's so comfy
>>3860148
@ndrph Your stuff is neat

bettermit

anyone have any color tutorials for anime, i use sai2

>>3858891
The negative spaces in your panels are really ugly.

>>3856453
I think you just do too much on the eyes is all

>>3862842
Your framing and composition seriously need work ):

>>3862891

thanks for the critique!

>>3863411
i think colors is ur least worry right now you should focus on proportions and drawing in general..

>>3863411
>those elbows,pelvis,torso
why newfags always want to polish turds

How would you improve this? My brain just failed me. It's supposed to be a high speed battle in the sky with parts of the city just floating around but I just know I did it wrong. And what about the colors, are those fine?

>>3863766
Its more about the compostion, i wasnt able to identify what was happening from the thumbnail. This is partly to blame on the sillhouette of mob merging with that of the building (also their values are too close to each other). Also the flow of the image is too monotone. All Objects are stretched in the same direction, i supposed this is to create the illusion of flow, but their shapes are to similar because they all align on the same axis.

Maybe study some stills from Mob Psycho or other dynamic anime.

>>3863524
>>3863701
ok got it, thanks.

>>3858891
are you gonna fix whatever is happening below her neck in the last panel or not? I assume you planed to have a speech bubble there from the start so you didnt bother, but thats bad practice. draw everything and then cover whatever you dont like, you might even sketch outside the panel

some other small things which you could fix on this now:
>her tongue and lips make a bad tanged at the second panel
>the 2 symmetrical sweat drops on him at the last panel look bad, more one on his neck or something
and something to practice for next work I would say are drawing teeth thru the skin like an xray to force you think about the structure under the skin, your teeth on that guy show a really shallow understanding on mouth structure

>>3859105
AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH HE'S STILL HERE AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHH (love you man)

>>3859932
>boxman
>definitely a woman

>>3860148
ignore the crabs, we (I) love you

>>3862167
you are (story, drawing and rendering) looks like 8 years old me decided to pick up drawing and never improve

>>3863190
whatever you did in his mouth does not read like in pic related

>>3863839
>>3863840
>>3863842
>posting three times in a row

>>3863840
your art*

>>3863843
if you didnt posted it would have been 7 times

>>3863840
Not what I was hoping for, but I'll work on it.

>>3858418
4
I'm also trying to do a model sheet for an animation but I have trouble keeping the proportions the same at all angles. I made a thread about it, but got no replies. BTW she just has the ears and tail, this isn't furry.

>>3863510
>>3863507
A bit vague. Specifics?

For an example: the anon's critique below was very helpful.
>>3863830

Working on this right now, I wish I could be proud of it

>>3863920
Very cute!

>>3863920
should add some minor details like collarbones and bellybutton, i think it would help a bit

im trying to push my style further... its usually bland and unoriginal, hopefully these bird drawings are interesting to look at

>>3863998

>>3863999
i made a few edits, which one do you guys prefer? i dont really know, myself

>>3863999
>>3864018
I like the bird on the first one, but the background on the second one, try that combination

>>3864038
youre right, this is better. made a few minor changes as well

>>3863378

>>3863920

1. Top of the ear should be roughly in-line with the brow line, not the eye line.
2. The right eye's people must need it, because it's flying off into space.
3. Ball of the nose should be approximately equidistant vertically from the eyeline and the mouth in a straight-on perspective. An uptilt will bring it closer to the eyes, a down tilt will bring it closer to the mouth. Try to think carefully about the geometry of the face and you'll see what I mean.
4. The mouth...look in the mirror and try to replicate that expression. It looks a lot different, doesn't it? It's like the top and bottom lips don't meet at the corners of the mouth. I'm finding it hard to verbalize so have a look at the sketch and see if you can spot what I mean.
5. No reason for a cleavage line when the breasts are visibly separated like that. Instead, try a shaded area to accentuate the inside plane of both breasts.

I would focus on studying proper construction and doing some life-drawings. Some parts of your piece appear well-formed, while others seem like you're copying symbols instead of thinking in 3D. Always try to think carefully about the forms of your subject, and resist the urge to simply go with what looks familiar.

Overall, though, that's a cute grill anon. Do your best!

>>3863920
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

>>3864258
This is so appealing gosh <3

>>3864262
thanks!!

go go go >>3856043

>>3864503
oops kek >>3864502

>>3864258
ryoko/ryuko?

>>3864258
u drew the same pose before try rotating a bit. looks nice tho

>>3856907
>>people are giving payment for this