/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

Its probably shit, but you arent ever going to be good at writing anyway so may as well shit out what your narrative is.

>>3683758
Give us a sample OP.

>>3683758
Assuming you're doing dialogue for your fucking porn. Porn is already cringe considering you're literally the burger flipper for horny men.

>>3683758
Probably ngmi.

>>3683758
Same.
I feel like writing badly is so much more embarrassing than drawing badly for some reason

So much this. Fellas, how do we learn to write good dialogue? Anyone wanna practice with me? It's mainly for porn.

>>3684262
shoot anon
define the scene and start it off

>>3684265
No anon, mine's too cringe, you start.

>>3684270
Since this is for porn there is a lot of varied things possible you know.
It is early evening, female comes in pissed after having a long talk on the phone
>"fucking shit... I have had it with this day. You would think after taking faulty hardware back to the store they would be able to replace it on the spot instead of asking you to call them every day about the replacement they ordered."

>>3684274
Female stares at Anon, expecting him to agree.
>Haha... Yeah hardware stores would be pretty convenient if they worked like that.

>>3684285
female starts to undress herself revealing her body
>"To good to be true eh honey? Well I'll go and shower up..."
leaves to the bathroom

>>3684290
>Honey
That's making it easy... And now boring. What about:
>Ugh, what's with the half-assed reply Anon! This is why you'll always be a little kid in my book Anon.

>>3684285
Why does anon respond like a beta cuck?

>>3684320
>>3684300

>>3683758
If you feel insecure, start reading more. Pickup whatever well-written book and read one chapter a day. Practice too, try coming up with different dialogs for various scenarios, write as much as you can, find some fuckoff writing discord and ask people for critique. It really will come easily if you put some effort into it, even if you're ESL.
You could also take a more analytical approach to see what's wrong with your dialog if you feel something is off. If you're writing a story, try to understand the balance between organic and expository dialog, if you're writing too much, too little,...
>>3684015
>Porn is already cringe considering you're literally the burger flipper for horny men.
kek

>>3684325
Legit, she won’t fuck him now though. Actually I’m invested in this story, finish!

>>3684328
Maybe anon can go wank off to some cam girl or he ends up venmo’ing some college chick for a bj while trawling tinder. His roommate who was on the phone can call him a loser.

>>3684300
Someone please continue from here

>>3684329
Actually, tinder chick renegs on bj when she arrives, gives sad handjob. Roommate doesn’t realised he paid for it and just saw him with chick, changes attitude towards loser anon, starts to see him differently inexplicably. the next day and they fuck. Fin.
~all about the optics~

>>3684331
ey yo what the fuck this isn't scriptwriting, you're sexting!

Speaking of dialogue and shit

I am making a comic but I can't think of a title for it
Any recommendations?
It's about a 30 or so year old guy who looks like he's 40-50 because he has this power which allows him to control and conjure stuff with his blood, it drains his life essence but allows him to be super strong when needed, the power also acts as a regenerative ability, if he takes hard hits, he can regenerate even the biggest wounds but all at a cost
It's in a fantasy setting, very similar to Berserk, the guy had rough childhood of never having parents since birth, being a captive for slave traders and nearly dying until saved by an omniscient being that gave him his power, or rather cursed him with it.

One title I've been thinking was "Bloodletting" but it's an awfully stiff and cliché title and it might already be in use by another comic

>>3684331
>Ugh, what's with the half-assed reply Anon! This is why you'll always be a little kid in my book Anon.
Anon looks away say nothing
>Okay Anon be a good boi and crawl over here on fours
Anon doesn't answer
>Anon, I said crawl here now!
Anon looks at her
>Crawl Anon!
Anon sigh finally gets out of bed and gets on all four and crawls to her while she sits own and opens her legs. She puts her hand on Anon's head and smiles
>Good boy! Now show your mistress you know how to treat her.
She slowly guides Anon's face between her legs straight to her crotch
>You love that scent doncha Anon?

>>3683758
How are we supposed to critique nothing?
Pyw pls sagee

>>3685367
this might be the worst one of them all

>>3685362

"I just smashed things I like together without any thought"