/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

o shit, my pic made the op. *w* you should have used the 2nd version I fixed the boobs in

>>3145645
>implying the whole thing isn't fukt

>>3145645
It's too late Yev-san, you'll be shamed forever now for your mistake.

>>3145647
stop bullying

holy shit my eyes

>>3145732
please just get fucking tuberculosis already

>>3145645
How are you so good?

>>3145745
>>3145751
Real crits only faggots.

>>3145732
Have you found ANYONE who remotely likes your ar-I mean, drawings?

>>3145770
I like them, anon.

>>3145732
I'm not even gonna read it. This looks gay. My tip would be to draw less gay and quit being a weeaboo.

>>3145771
Yes of course, you're the one drawing them. Anyone OTHER than you?

>>3145772
It's okay to be a fag man. It's legal in most places now.

>>3145771
>Post work to show to other people, which can only be assumed naturally that you want critique and opinions
>"No I like my work only and that's all that matters"
Shilling against site rules. Stop posting anytime.

>>3145773
>>3145776
>this much in denial
Not even the artist, so post your works.

Crit me hard and fast !

>>3145771
I like to rape kids and burn down orphanages while lleyed the fuck up on the cocaine-infused blood of the last hobo I ate, but that doesn't mean I should.
Though judging from your art you probably do that too.

>>3145732
>and then they stab him in the side with a spear
Jesus christ

>>3145782
garbage
also
>pixel brush
puke
atleast do it right

>>3145792
Can you explain why it's garbage and what's wrong with a pixel brush? Also how to do it right? Your post is quite non-descriptive, so give me an example of how to do it right and such. Thanks for replying so fast though.

>>3145782
lots of flaws
hoofs dont look like hoofs
hair is a mop
unnecessary belts
is that suppose to be a spear with a wonky tip or some shitty axe with a bent blade
and the figure isnt balanced

>>3145803
you are mostly right but holy shit thats a halberd you dumb fucking nigger oh my god

>>3145808
i know what a halberd looks like. and that doesnt look like one.

>>3145732
keep on going comic guy, pay no attention to the nay sayers. you can do it, I belive in you

>>3145818
on what basis? it's not nearly as bad as the hair which looks like a leather helmet almost (it might be?) her ribcage which is painfully arched aswell as her pelvis and down area which seems to be rotated towards us at an angle that would be very painful to actually pull off if not impossible

>>3145837
Nice foreshortening and stylistic exaggeration usage on the hand.

>>3145837
jesus man lmao

>>3145840
because the axe blade doesnt look like a blade by any means?

>>3145837
>>3145844
Wow! I love how stylistically exaggerated her left leg is! You stylistically exaggerated it into one solid mass and turned the kneecap into a deadly portruding planar weapon! Watch out, naysayers!
Though it looks like you exhausted your stylistic exaggeration on her right hand, and had to hide her left inside her skull. At least we get to see that stylistically exaggerated gnarly chicken wing arm stump!
Keep showing those /ic/ bullies what for, my man. I belive in you!

>>3145840
i agree w most of the stuff but idk were u got the ideea that the pelvis is rotated in our direction? The knee, light and shape of the legs all push the idee that they are facing to the side. Corect me if im wrong ^-^ .

>>3145853
post your work.

>>3145854
The way the belt conforms around her waist gives it the perception that it's rotated in our direction.

>>3145852
I could've sworn I've seen this sort of blade before, but I concede since I can't find it on google images or anything.

>>3145854
yes the light and knees are as seen from the front, but the thighs are as you would see them from 3/4

in a profile view like the face is in, the thigh closer to us would obscure the majority of the other thigh, even if the other is raised forward

>>3145770
yes, yes i have and >>3145771
isn't me
>>3145772
you would be right, as that's the subject of this comic
>>3145784
remember that guy who thought that if you liked the sorceress from dagons crown it made you a pedophile, then got caught with cp, i'm thinking this is a similar situation
>>3145790
gotta explain the history of italy man, tell the space elf about jeeeeesus
>>3145837 thanks man, you too

>>3145867
>yes, yes i have
provide examples of the ones that weren't being ironic

>>3145873
are you refering to people on this, an anonymous knitting forum for Indochinan shadow pupets for me to site as unasailable proof of people liking my work? anonymous people you can just say no about? i'm not dumb

>>3145782
Here I did a shitty paintover to show you what I kind of mean. The part where the belt rounds is too much for a side angle and would be more of a 3/4 angle.

>>3145878
>knitting forum for indochinan shadow puppets
>knitting forum
>shadow puppets
>indochinan
>site as unasailable
>i'm not dumb
DUDE JUST GO ON THE CRITIQUE BOARD AND SAY NO TO CRITIQUE LMAO
why the fuck are you even here you anencephalic freak; go shill on /i/ or plague some other drawthreads, anywhere but here

>>3145866
I guess in the end it might just that poor positioned lose belt. Thx for the crit anyway, Il keep it in mind for next time. ^-^

>>3145891
>moooooom, this guy online didn't take my 'critique' of telling him to drink bleach, what is the world of art comicn to?
you're that same moron who saw me post an old picture to show what i used to draw like and didn't bother to strain your brain reading and just used it to start a hate thread aren't you?

anyone has tips for where to position the eyes in the face? Most of the times, my characters start looking retarded

>>3145633
General
>draw larger
>drawing looks stiff, start with a gesture and build off of it

proportions
>legs are extremely long compared to body. Make them shorter or make the body longer, torso+waist+pelvis
>forearms awkwardly wide compared to hand and wrist. Therefore, make wrists wider and hands larger
>feet are tiny, make them larger

Head + Hands
>needs Loomis' Head and Hands

Goodluck

>>3145897
Why didn't you keep halberd 1 or 2?

>>3145910
idk ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

>>3145903
>they're the problem, not me
again, why are you even here

>>3145897
You're drawing in profile because you don't understand forms or perspective and you'll need to learn those if you want to draw fucking anything. You'll need to study a lot to learn those things instead of doing 2D doodles that teach you nothing. Choice is yours.

>>3145645
These proportions are whack. Just because they used a 2deep style and contrasting colors doesn't excuse the technical mistakes that they made.

>>3145919
Post your work

more lewd loli, with some stylistic exaggeration

>>3145924
How do you draw so fast?

>>3145921
I already have. If you missed it, your fault. Doesn't excuse that her loli has broken elbows, half of a torso, thighs thicker than her body width, an off center face, a fivehead, and no basic structure. It's obvious they draw without using building blocks to start, and just bullshit their way through anatomy like most entry level anime artists do.

>>3145924

>>3145931
>REEEEE POST WORK FAGGOT

man these threads are getting cancerous by the day

>>3145931
Shit, are you the comic guy or the tripfag?

>>3145931
>being this much of an anatomy nitpick
/ic/ gets me every time
NGMI

>>3145955
it's not comic guy, i don't get edgy in my actual critiques, i try and offer stuff for people to work with

>>3145931
Being overly concerned about structure, proportions and shit, is the reason western artists make shit anime art. Easterners embrace the symbolic drawing and just try to make an appealing image, rather than autistically checking proportions.

>>3145978
Post examples

>>3145978
Best post ITT.

You teach anything else senpai?

>>3145978
back to >>>>/DA/ >>>>>/tumblr/

>>3146009
Yes. Stay away from that Loomis guy. He's big trouble

>>3145924
your feet are legit disgusting

>>3146016
Who should I learn from instead then?

>>3146018
Post your feet then, better than most amateurs who draw feet.

>>3145978
>Easterners embrace the symbolic drawing and just try to make an appealing image, rather than autistically checking proportions.

>>3146019
stop thinking just draw

>>3146024
But what do I draw if I don't think?

>>3146019
Just fuckin draw. Don't stop

>>3145897

>>3146027
instructions unclear, foot caught in washing machine

>>3146030
Stop redlining.

>>3146030
Holy shit, blog? Nice redline.

>>3146030
blog?

>>3146023

>>3146032
naaaah

>>3146033
>>3146034
https://supermarmalademum.tumblr.com/

>>3146030
>>3146041

>>3146037

I'll humor you, straight from the chink version of /ic/.

>muh cherry picking!

It's literally the very first thing.

http://zip.2chan.net/11/futaba.htm

>>3146047
>muh cherry picking!
>It's literally the very first thing.
which is exactly why it's cherry picking
you could have included multiple examples but decided to just pick the first one because it filled your shit criteria

>>3146042
I red line to fix some things, not make them perfect. If it helps the op and let's them learn a little, I'm happy.
I'm just in the middle of business so I need to do it quickly.

>>3146049
No sir, this is cherry picking.

>>3146030

>>3146042
>>3146058
>laugh at redline meme

>>3146049
and this is cherry picking with multiple examples.

>>3146049
>You grabbed the first thing you found without bias?
>Fuck you, that's cherry picking!
>You should have carefully selected results which favored my superior criteria, you pleb

>>3146052
>I red line
purple line
>to fix some things, not make them perfect
goalpost moving
>it's bad because le excuses but I NEED to do it
you don't, fuck off

>>3146060
>it was le ruse

This thread's so fuckin bizarre

>>3146030
you made it worse, why is it always the shitters that try to redline?

>>3145978
>shit anime art
It's shit because westerners don't draw anime; they just make shitty attempts at it and fall short most of the time. I think that one Bane quote from the Nolan movies is a good way to put it.

>>3146074
hush, Anon. Just ask for his blog and tell him how good it is, and shower him with praise let them believe it.

>>3146070
You're right. Is this better?

>>3146080
Please stop while you're ahead.

Pro tip: Stop replying.

destroy me

What is the loomis version of anime.

half of these drawings belong in beg. alt style was a mistake

>>3146101
But /beg/ only cares about hyper realistic anatomy and shit. I just wanna do anime

>>3146080
Y'all need to learn how to draw some goddamn animal legs holy shit
I doubt these are perfect either but cmon, at least go for the pose that the OP was attempting. I didn't touch anything else since it looked somewhat nice (not sure about the right arm, could be more relaxed imo). Also I liked your face. But yeah, your legs were shit buddy.

>>3146108
why are you changing the pose

Some wip, go for it.

>>3146110
Cus the very original looks like they'd tip over imo, and the one I was drawing over didn't even try to match OP's pose whatsoever. A middle ground solution and basic structure of the legs is what I was aiming for. OP should be able to have a clear view of what to aim for now anyway.

>>3146110
It was an unbalanced pose. Also isnt this about digitigrade legs anyway?

>>3146108
You didn't fix shit, you just changed the style of the legs. Original was better, you just tipped the scale more to the animal side.

>>3146123
LOL keep telling yourself that. And yes, I made them more like the original animal, because that's the fucking point. They're ANIMAL legs.
Unless the OP was aiming for a mix of human/animal and wanted their legs fatter(which clearly they didn't) this is the way to go about it kek

>>3146129
i kinda went for more of a mix but i still a valid crit to show the more animal one, it helps seeing what u could work into the mix more ^-^

>>3146099
u suk yev

>>3146129
>that's the point
No, it's not. The artist drew them like that for stylistic purposes, you're just a moronic krugtard eager for the chance to demonstrate your limited knowledge so you jumped on something without realizing what the fuck you're talking about.

>kek LOL XDD
Literally a braindead teenager.

>>3146099
why mspaint, yev? Honestly love your work, but don't ya think it'd look better using brushes from other drawing apps like photoshop or paint tool sai?

>>3146138
Redlines aren't about style, they're about anatomy. Done.

>>3146135
Oh okay, that explains it then. Now at least OP has more to look at for both of our corrections :)

>>3146030
am I missing something? You just filled in his lines.

>>3146144
That's the joke. Everyone go home now.

>>3146143
What anatomy moron? If it were the anatomy for 90% human/10% animal, yours would be wrong. Lmfao the mental gymnastics you krugtards go to justify your idiocy.

>>3146108
Those aren't accurate ungulate legs either

>>3146142
It takes slightly less long to open, mostly is the reason

>>3146157
God damn it, /ic/, anatomy must be that great to you.

>>3146144
Oh, is that why people are making a fuss? I just wanted to highlight the areas he messed up the most on. Though it was still very poorly done.
Lol, if I had to red line the changes the drawing wouldn't be recognizable , hence >>3146080

>>3146163
>>3146157
I'm not saying you need to draw 100% medically correct anatomy, I'm saying the redrawer doesn't know how animal legs work either.

>>3146070
Forgot about this
>purple line
Semantics
>goalpost moving
Never had a post to move. You just have different reasons.
>it's bad because le excuses but I NEED to do it
I don't need to, and please refer to >>3146080
I did make excuses, but I was telling the truth as to why it was quick.

>>3146108
>instead of putting anthropomorphic legs on it, let's put TOTALLY animal legs on it.
I admit it's still better drawn, but try to imagine how stupid it'd look for the guy to walk.

>>3146170
is 25, 30, and 31 the finger?

>>3146110 this

i think that drawfag wanted to do this

I've been thinking in learning jap asap just to see if I can find some material on drawing in there. Anyone here have experience in searching jap sources? I don't want it to be a waste of time.

>>3146157
I said they weren't perfect tho. And I can know how animal legs work without being able to draw them 100% accurately. Also I figured that the fact their bipedal would make the anatomy a bit different.

>>3146177
OP never specified anthropomorphic or animal legs. I thought they were aiming for a Satyr.

>>3145732
Time to stop doing this.

>>3146213

Why learn jap when real time translation is right around the corner.

>>3146030
>>3146041

you drew this flat piece of garbage >>3145514
and you think you can give perspective critique to others?

seriously?

>>3146223
>flat
I...I think you need to get your eyes checked, anon.

>>3146217

I feel like your work will look way better if you worked more on your proportions. Right now the heads are way to small but it isn't stylize like the hulk where it would make sense.

Also you might want to study more anime heads - specifically the noses. That guys nose on the bottom left is drawn pretty funny.

Aside from that, I envy you - I never have the courage to make a comic

>>3146224
nope. if you think that lower body has proper depth, then you must have some serious issues of suckage, my dear scrubmeister.

>>3146219
I don't think I have the time to go to the corner.

>>3146229
Red line it or pyw or be a fag.

>>3146228
read that fucking title and understand I'm not 'retard-head anon', but just a shitposter that is making fun of him.

>>3146231
I'll be a fag and laugh at your serious lack of critical vision. GTFO

>>3146232
Eh whatever. If he sees my crit then it is still all good. I am still retarded though lmao

>>3146219
The tech for real time translation exists. It's just that Japanese as a language is awful at being machine translated to English.
The syntax and word context is retarded. Their sentence structures are so stiff that any small deviance from normal structure adds so much context that unless there's a multi-year long concerted effort to implement every unique sentence permutation you're stuck with dogshit translations that usually miss entirely unless they fit perfectly within the standard sentence structures.

>>3146234
Post your work.

>>3146217
lol just copy paste your arms why won't you?
Jesus Christ they are all the same

>>3146255

> no ass = gas

could i get a little help with this, please?

>>3146292
shit the first one's huge, here's a resized version

>this thread

Holy hell.

>>3145853
heres a lil tip for (you), if you are gonna be a sarcastic asshole at least post your work

>>3146075
>says as he posts a shitty anime

>>3146368
Post your shit taste

>>3146235
well, i saw it, and thanks for the tip, i'm trying to get a pleasing balance for 'anime head' while not making it look ridiculous to me

>>3146213
>see if I can find some material on drawing in there
What place do you speak of?

>>3146142
I really like the paint aesthetic. In general art with clean line work in paint really does it for me.

>>3145936
Underrated

>>3146369

>>3146382
Idk, maybe blogs, 2ch, nicoshit, anything. I just feel like we have too little of eastern art material.

would like critique.. she is supposed to be a girl with no body, if you cant tell

>>3146436
Blog?

>>3146436
looks like sonata from equestria girls

>>3146436
You're gonna make it but only if you work on your fundies that you're neglecting. You can't always my style everything forever. Your poses often lack dynamism and are quite simple, you can push yourself and do better, I know it. You also don't finish pieces with backgrounds either, it doesn't make much of a difference yet since you still need to work on your characters, but your concepts are great. They just could be more interesting if you learned about composition and perhaps some gesture/action. Overall, keep at it, push out of your comfort zone.

>>3146442

blog??

>>3146436
How do I get as good as you?

well shit I posted in the wrong fucking thread. The old one.

I want to go home.

Someone please save me from this hell. They can't keep me a prisoner much longer can they? Why won't anyone tell me when this will be over?

Should it have been over already? Are they behind schedule?

Are they really arguing about what to do with me?

Why the fuck won't they just ask me what do with me? I'm sure I know more about myself than they do.

>>3146444
i have never posted my work here, unless you know me from somewhere else. if you have any sites/resources/suggestions i would appreciate you sharing them. and if you do know me from elsewhere,
>it doesn't make much of a difference yet since you still need to work on your characters
i do not understand this part and if you can explain/have suggestions i would appreciate them in this regard as well. also, nice numbers
>>3146443
lol.

>>3146436
Major lack of effort. It's like decided to just draw something for five minutes and posted it.

Shadows need to be darker, highlights need to be brighter. Did you just fill tool or something? The fucking light isn't even really established. The shadow at the bottom says it's coming from the top, but the hair doesn't reflect that shit at all.

Study up on how hair works, it'll definitely help you.

Your drawing also doesn't directly tell the viewer just what it is we're looking at. If it needs text, fix it so that you can communicate that properly with visuals. If I didn't know what you said, I would have thought the pigtails are the legs of whatever the hell this is.

A plain frontal head shot is also very boring, you could have worked up a different kind of shot that had it float over a fence or some shit. Put more effort into it.

Tell a story with your art, don't make it so fucking boring, it's like why even fucking do it? It's not even like a concept sketch either, it's just an amateurish drawing that a kid would do.

>>3146468
the pigtails are its legs, so i guess i did not need the text. its supposed to be sort of boring, its a drawing to show someone the colours and design of this character, so i kept it simple. but, yeah, i will look into shadows, as i dont really understand them that much. showing what you meant would be helpful. and also, i did it because i have fun sharing my designs and.. "solidifying(?)".. what i see in my head, and this is what it looks like in my head, but having more shadows/form would have let me convey my design much better, so, again, i can agree with you on that point.

>>3145732
First, fk off
Second, stop using your own hand writing, it is hard as fuck to read, either practice your hand writing or fk off again

>>3146479
you can swear on the internet, it's ok, your mom's too busy being dissapointed to read it

wip
>>3146454
I don't know what you're talking about but that's really nice, keep it up anon.

>>3145097
へ is pronounced "e" when used as a particle, so typing "he" in romaji is wrong. Japanese people reading this will read "desert fart", not "towards the desert".

t. Japanese tutor

>>3145633
>>3145732
>>3145897
>>3146030
shit all shit

>>3146436
Where is the body?

>>3146494
did u literally mirror the arms and legs, you lazy fuck

>>3146436
God, you guys really do anything to avoid drawing hands

>>3146598

Omfg finally, a girl
>inb4 (s)he grows a dick
Head is still too small

>>3146615
no, i'm not into futa, my characters are almost all solidly male or female, aside from a few doppelgangers, and it is? damnit, see, i had it even smaller and made it bigger to try and even it out, shit

Besides the eyes being shit, the hands making not so much sense when you zoom in and the yellow-ish tone of the skin (shitty ilumination) how do i improve in future pieces? I would like to get into digital but i am stuck with some cheap colors i found around
>Inb4 stop polishing turds
Which is true but i still want to learn about colors

>>3146254
another faggot that can't read. please, just kys.

>>3146254
all of these were done on a physical piece of paper, i don't have access to copy paste irl

>>3146598

>>3146673
thank you, i appreciate this and will prolly be redoing some aspects of the pic, however, i'm going to keep the hips ridiculous cause that's one of the key points with nezora

>>3146598
What resource did you use to learn how to draw figures?

>>3146522
>lying to people on the internet

>>3146681
nice dude

>>3146680
i'm almost entirely self taught, i've looked through the odd art book now and then, but mostly i just look at other art i like and try to take from there what i like like in pic related, tho i forget how old it is

>>3146686
>i'm almost entirely self taught
lol, you sound REALLY proud of that

>>3146690
nah, just realistic, i personally regret not taking it more seriously nowadays

Who's the Loomis of animu?
What's a surefire way of constructing appealing anime faces?
How do I get to Yoh's level? (Pic related)
Please someone help. Help

>>3146708
Honestly, learn real head construction first.
Then scrunch everything a bit lower so that the eyeline is slightly below the midpoint instead of slightly above like in regular skulls.

You need to know what makes a face look like a face. Then you can stylize all you want as long as you follow the ground rules.

>>3146716
Oh okay thank god, I've actually been studying how constructing heads from Loomis but I was starting to get worried it wouldn't help be draw chinese cartoon heads.

color ver.

fwoosh

>>3146708
Check nsio

Done with the lines.

>>3146738
Nice, I'm curious as to how you achieved those rainbowish colors around the staff

>>3146819
drew some lines in yellow, red, green and white, then I gaussian blur'd it and set the layer to the glow dodge mode in csp

>>3146681

>>3146830
desertfart sounds awesome though, they should keep it.

sketch, helmet looks weird?? i dunno

>>3146598
Go back to drawing males.

>>3146826
and the gif if anyone was interested

>>3146522
Guess I'll go with 砂漠屁 as punishment...

>>3146830
It's fine to put it down as he in romaji because it's written that way.
Absolutely no one will think it's desertfart because of how things can be said plus those aren't two things that are often put together .

>>3146708
1. learn loomis
2. learn anime stylization
it doesn't go the other way around, dumbass.
you first learn realism so that you can then break and simplify it.
stop mindlessly copying other artists and start using real life refs and do studies.

>>3146811
bad foreshortening on almost all limbs that are directed towards the viewer.

>>3146108
It looked way better before, stop running somebody else's art.

>>3146135
>still a valid crit
Really isn't, of you keep listening to hacks your art capabilities will degrade.

>>3146826
Wow I'm going to try this thank you.

Was that all done on csp? I used to go between csp and ps but csp has become more workflow friendly to me than ps

>>3146766
Face looks a little weird but everything else is pretty nice. I like the hatching

>>3145837
>tfw when the only person supporting you is a pedophile.

>>3146738
>>3146855
interesting choice for dark background with magical girl in foreground but the white ball in the center is distracting. why is it even there?

>>3146766
own style on attack on titan right?

>>3146811
makes me think of bayonetta, i like.

>>3146841
the ears are off model on the helmet and whats that hatching where her back leg should be? Also, her butt is blocky.

>>3146874
its fine but boring and flat.

mine, bad drappery and hands.

>>3146811
A thing that stands out to me is that the more distant loop of her glasses is so wide. Might want to push it toward the face?

>>3146878
But only one and a half limbs are directed at the viewer.

>>3146953
To specify, I guess these things bother me. Hope it makes sense

>>3146961>>3146953
i only see the fore arm and hand going towards the viewer but rest of the arm is going more downwards. Also, the head is so small comparativly. so the glasses and everything else looks proportionally large. it could be a style choice though and I generally like it.

>>3146738
kukuri always a cute

>>3146963
oh, i see. its a problem with geometry and perspective. maybe those problems influence the rest of the image?

>>3146974
I honestly think the whole looks neat. Her closer forearm might be a bit small and stuff but I'm mostly bothered by the glasses in relation to the face and the sizes of the eyes of the glasses since there's a bunch of focus there.

h-here I go...

tried to preserve wakfu's artstyle here...

want to know if this is good before I finish it

>>3147128
I don't understand, is that supposed to be a penis or a vagina? If vagina, it's too low and puffy imo

>>3147141
She's got animal ears, looks like a tail to me

I spent all summer doing value studies and i decided to render something out without referencce in my style . Can i get some feedback ? What should I focus more ? Volume? Values ? Blending ? Soft and hard edges ?

>>3147141
Yeah, vagina and tail. Sorry, these are still roughs.

>>3147146
lol he's retarded.

>>3147156
Yea , i mean i agree with you on this one ,I haven't actually focused on the facial features , i want to see if i can do something out of my head and somehow get the values right

>>3147146
This just looks like a shitty study, not stylized at all

>>3147146
not the most aesthetically pleasing face, but it's aight

>>3147159
But it's not a study ?I haven't used reference. From what i know , when you make a art study , you use reference. I just tried to get the values and the blending right . I agree it looks shitty. Im not good with portraits .
>>3147162
Thank you.

>>3147165
With portraits or anything that has realistic features on the face.

>>3146811
this is for a comic project right?
you will soon regret designing your characters with so much minor and unessential details
kishimoto used to talk about why didn't naruto wear his goggles in the later chapters and how it was a chore to draw that simple addition every time
now imagine those laces you drew so painstakingly

>>3147193
An easy answer would be to simply not draw every details in every panels.

>>3147193
Smurf wants to be like Murata but he hasn't mastered design as well yet.

>>3146963
>>3146979
Kinda noticed it at some point for the glasses, then totally forgot to fix it, yeah.

As for the forearm size, you're misunderstanding, the left hand has got some perspective, but it's also big looking because it just is, it's like a big prothesis weapon.

>>3147193
I understand that. Ended up going for tiny lines for this drawing, and as you would expect, while the result was kinda worth it, it took forever. I don't intend to have lines that thin for pages (and details comes with the size of lines), it's just that I'm still experimenting when it comes to the speed:quality ratio, besides trying to get overall faster.

Since it's a hobby project (as of now), not taking forever on each pages is obviously important, yeah. Made in Abyss had a very good look while not being overly detailed in most pages, could go with something more like that, rather than extra detailed and polished like Tsugumomo or Berserk.

>>3145732
if you like your handwriting so much why not make your own copy of it in Photoshop? its not hard plus its consistent.

>>3146568
FirEZ pls go

>>3146963
>>3146811
found a similar pair of glasses I think

>>3145837
add pit hair for extra sophistication

>>3146436
Someone give her a body.

>>3146811
simplify your hair more, one looks like spaghetti and the other like hedgehog.

>>3146686
im pretty sure this drawing just caused me some permanent eye damage.

>>3147601
the hair is fine, it's called style

>>3147158
Read the first 70 pages of drawing the head and hands, pay special attention to the planes pf the head part.

>>3146567
It might seem lazy but I wanna be a concept artist so sometimes I just mirror it if I wanna get it over fast, and sometimes I mirror something and modify a few things so that it doesn't look that mirrored.

Do you?
it's a wip

>>3147712
How do I get as good as you?

>>3147714
Thanks for posting this fifty times in every thread across this board

>>3147726
Not him but how do I get as good as you?

>>3146947
it's kukuri from mahoujin guruguru and that's the magical circle she draws to summon behm-behm the monster in the back

>>3146930
yep! all CSP

An attempt at that 80s-90s manga look. It could use some half tone work to really set that look. I did a color version and tried to mimic the watercolor and gauche look, but that didn't turn out so good.

>>3147146
A bit more contrast to push the deeper section in and pull out the higher ones. It kind of still reads when I blur my eyes and look at it. But more value range would help.
Unless you are trying to speed paint, I would suggest building up the forms with some under sketching first. Really exaggerate them Burne Hogarth style. It's basically a good rough rendering.

>>3147756
There is a porn thread.

>>3147774
We also have a cringe thread. It'd fit better there.

>>3147774
one that's hit thread bump limit

>>3146619
looks traced/copied, like you dont understand how bodies work

Você é novo de mais pra morrer.

>>3146568
you have a bit of a sameface problem. and her lips are very generic

>>3147146
>tfw to intelligent for /ic/

>>3147230
He's not even close to mastering anything that isn't basic rendering.

>>3147835
Proof?

>>3147835
Post your work.

>>3145782
Is that an armor chest piece? Why is it paper thin? How does she take the gauntlets off? Why is she only protecting her chest and forearms? Wouldn't she want her thighs and waist protected too?
Another Anon addressed the pose balance, I think you could address that by making her grip the halberd rather than letting it rest in her hand so that it is part of the pose's balance.

>>3148309
Coz plate armor was generaly thin 1-3 mm.

The gautlets is a fair point i was planing to make the back part open but i fogot to do it...

Coz she is some random guard, metal plate is expensive but she has a gambeson. Also i guess giving her some leg armor would be logical but furry legs tho.

And yea i agree dident show that she was putting some weight on the weapon properly.

Thx for ur crit.

>>3148227
instead of posting shitty porn, you should go do something beneficial

>>3148327
you can say custom made armor is expensive and
normal human leg armor doesn't fit. And with all that fur wearing cloth make's it too hot

you can go crazy with designs, but like we all seem to agree on, there is no excuse for lack proper posture and gesture

>>3148327
Metal plate is extremely cheap dude. Every fuck all infantry had one of those. She doesn't have Gambeson, just a shirt.

>>3147375
is this what's her face from soul eater?

>>3148362
>Metal plate is extremely cheap dude. Every fuck all infantry had one of those
Not that guy, but that obviously depends on the time period you're talking about.

>>3148327
I still don't think the armor should be so tight. Armor plates are usually roomy to compensate for blunt weapon damage. Expanding your lungs wouldn't do a good job undenting it either

>>3146217
I think your comic pages would look more visually appealing and easier on the eye if you worked with some form of line weight. Giving objects in the foreground thicker/darker lines helps make a panel look more interesting imo

>>3148370
I uh.. I dont know. I kinda just shat it out.

>>3148329
you really think your shitty art is more beneficial than shitty porn?
just kys.

>>3148413
another retard, that can't read and thus doesn't get the joke.
GTFO

>>3148425
I didn't say that.

they wouldn't even be that horrific if you removed the heads, but then its just porn and this isn't the thread for that.

I'm honestly surprised after all these pictures with the same dreadful faces you haven't realized you need to take them back to the drawing board and do something different, style isn't an excuse for poor drawing.

>>3148427

I don't understand why you should be hostile to people that are actually trying to contribute baka

How do I stop being lazy and actually refine things /ic/

How do I stop being lazy and actually refine things /ic/

>>3148433
I'm not 'retard-heads anon'.
I'm just saying this is an alt style thread, which isn't limited to SFW stuff. quit your purist bs and either post art or critique art. subject matter should never be an issue when it comes to art critique.
this said, 'retard-heads anon' is shit beyond measure.

>>3148498
you have to learn to draw first. and since you're lazy, you'll never achieve that.

>>3148508
don't say that
>>3148498
I love you. Don't be afraid to spend a couple days on one piece.

>>3148519
>Don't be afraid to spend a couple days on one piece.
when you're a beginner that should spend a lot of time on fundamentals so that you can internalize them, that's the worst advice someone can give you.
stop misdirecting people.

>>3148543
I was only answering his question. Not giving them roundabout advice snobs like you like to do.

>>3148544
By the way that isn't 'worst advice'. But OP can't utilize this because (this is where you're right) they lack the knowledge. Spending a few days on one image is a good thing.

>>3148545
are you giving THEM advice or just blabbering to the wind?
Either tell THEM what is best for THEM, or STFU.

>>3146217
>skipping fundies
you're funny

>>3146255
how do you get such CLEAN lines bro
got any undersketches to share

>>3148558

You seem a bit brain dead.

>>3147712
tell us about your studies.
how long have you been drawing/painting?
blog?

>>3147824
Noted. Thanks.

>>3148562
Thanks, not sure if they're all really clean though. I just try to be bold with my lines and retain some gesture. There are lots of failed lines that I had to erase, especially on the big girl in the center.

>>3148582
Oh, and no undersketches for that drawing, tried to force myself to use few layers.

point out the shit I did wrong because I'm getting blind to it

>>3148628
What is up with that pinky?

>>3148628
That hand needs more work. The sizes of the fingers is off (Even if you are trying to go for a foreshortening effect) and the linework where the fingers attach to the main hand makes it look like an anatomical mess.

If that belt buckle is suppose to be at her center then that is off too. Her hips don't seem to be twisting like her lower jacket is.

>>3148498
first of all, up the contrast. all that darkness doesn't fit the mood very well.

Posted in the wrong thread, shit.

This trainwreck tells me I need more fundies, foreshortening practice was fun though.

She has 4 arms, the sorted faded one on the right is still there. Torso feels a bit wrong but I'm not sure
new thread when?

>>3148655
Her farther breast should follow her lifted shoulder upward, I guess? Also feels like the lower part of her jaw protrudes to an eyecatching degree

>>3148655
The torso might be a tad long. Are those bumps above the arm hugging the body another set of boobs? Their purpose is a little unclear.

>>3148508
Harsh, afuu~
One of the best ways to learn is to do finished pieces and study what you need for that specific image. Otherwise you study and study, but never learn how to actually apply it to your work.

>>3148519
okie dokie ty

>>3148639
I've been struggling to get more contrast in the figure itself without making her really dark. Thanks for the start.

Why do I fucking suck

;w;

>>3148803
That poor girl is going to have tiny shards of glass stuck in her arms and legs.

>>3148758
let me as you two very important questions.

How long have you been drawing?

And do you even want to get good?

>>3146598
I want to kill mself a little bit every time I see your art.

I admire your dedication, but holy shit please work on your problems at least a little

>>3148872
Consistently for a year and yes..

>>3148944
a year isn't long enough to see sufficient improvement.

>>3149003
Blog

>>3149051
blug?

update before thread dies
>>3148684
moved her tit a bit and adjusted the jaw a bit but the head looks weird now, I'll have to mess around with it
>>3148713
Yeah it's a second pair, they still look a bit odd now I want it too look like their over flowing from her arm

new thread >>3149194

>>3149185
The shape of the bottom tits are entirely wrong for that. They'd be angled more upwards than the top breasts which aren't be supported, and they'd have a larger apparent volume because they're being squished up by her arm, unless you want the second pair to be smaller.