/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

pickin' the thread with a cat.
a series that i wanna paint, hats n shit

ill post this here too

>>2616656
you already got a decent crit a while ago, stop spamming and start drawing

>>2616650
Are you trying to draw tumblr bodies? If not, anatomy.

>>2616662
rendering is ok, the drawing... left hand man. scary stuff.

>>2616681
i dont think posting in two simultaneous draw threads is spamming.

>>2616697
well, you're wrong.

Any critique guys? I'm from the previous thread.

>>2616810
And the finished piece.

Reposting from last thread

Would you guys recommend practicing with just a sketchbook or investing in one of those wacom tablets to plug into my PC?

>>2616911
defnitely stick with the sketchbook.

>>2616911

if you want to do digital art, might as well practice in it.

>>2616911

Both. Any artist worth is salt should carry a sketchbook and a pencil on him at all times to be used at all the little micro breaks in your life. I have a nice flexible sketchbook that fits perfectly into the back pocket of my jeans.

>>2617018
>flexible sketchbook that fits perfectly into the back pocket of my jeans.
where do you keep your pen?

>>2616645
I don't draw digitally very often and I made this in MSpaint.

r8.

>>2616909
Proportions seem ok but I would suggest adding more transitions between darker and middle tones

I think I'm done with this one

>>2616650
learn about boobs and hands, holy shit the lower hand in the mid picture... also cross the borders of the box and crop it later

>>2617046

There are lots of free good apps on windows: firealpaca, mypaint, etc.. download and try any of them

It seems that the mount is just in the middle of the lower third of the face, it should be noticeable higher, also the middle third seems a bit long.

>>2616645
i posted this a while ago, ive done a little work on it. I havent been drawing for a couple years and im just trying to get back into art!

sorry for the shitty phone pic, its all i have.

>>2617046
Unless this was an experiment, Try any free drawing app like firealpaca or mypaint instead

Mouth should be higher roughly 2/3 of the lower third.

The middle third seems a bit long btw

>>2617053
Great tonal values!
The face seems a little flat, (his) left cheekbone and corner of the jaw need more depth. Also (his) left check bone looks a little odly shaped, needs to be brought down a bit. My advice would be to mirror the image.

>>2617245
Great expressionist piece! Are you looking into elevating your skill as an artist or just to express and have fun?

>>2616811
A good perspective exercise! I think you should try some composition exercises before getting into details though. The framing feels a little weak.

>>2617252
im looking at getting back into art as a lifetime educational type thing, i miss drawing alot and feel rusty as fuck. thank you for the compliment!

my hands are not as stable as they used to be, do you know of any exercises that will help strengthen my shoulder and forearm, or should i just get back on the practice wagon?

>>2617252
Nice catch about the left cheeckbone, thanks anon!

>>2617250
good stuff!! the only thing thats off to me is it looks like an adults head attached to a childs body, but in a good way!

>>2616909
I think that one large tear looks a little stupid, otherwise it's bretty alright.

brainstorming some ayy lmoa's

>>2617284
are you using scott robertsons methods??

they look cool so far, lik an insect on the left and hot pink predator on the right

>>2617284

The problem with this kind of semi-random alien design is that it's easy to find familiar forms in noisy signals, so the final product is likely to look rather human. I think actually working the biology up carefully works better.

>>2617289
its just a bunch of photos untop eachother with different color modes and some painting, think i heard it from feng but he most likely got it from scott idk
>>2617291
i dont want to design anything too outlandish, humanoid to some degree

>>2617284

Red one looks like a mix betwen the predator, Darth Vader's mask and the prawn from District 9

>>2617284
got some good designs in there m8

I need to know if these colors look ok on these characters. I'm making a short animation.

trying to get back into illustrations. this ones called "Fossil Fuel". I'll probably do another iteration on this I think the joke can be refined a bit more.

Portrait for a family member

>>2617454
you don't smudge (or whatever the verb for the thing you do with the stump is) graphite

>>2617459
sure you do. this guy just didnt do it very well.

>>2617459
apparently people do

>>2617473
that's what charcoal is for, but that's my opinion, go crazy with the stump familia

>>2617454
half black baby kramer?

>tfw rapidly drawing while listening to anime OPs makes your art better instead of worse

Photostudy

>>2617618
Proportions kinda fucked. Eyes and ears are clearly symbols. Learn to draw a skull very well and use it as the basis before you draw your heads

>>2617643
I kind of knew what I was gonna be called out for, but I appreciate the advice about learning skull structure. I've been practicing the Loomis method for head construction the last few days but this is the first time I applied it to a subject and the head shape came out a little wonky

>>2617459

fww, I follow this guy/girl who smudges graphite and it looks pretty great:

http://sketchb00k-.tumblr.com/

>>2617262
Thanks. Do you have an idea of how I can make her more child like/younger? fwiw the client likes this style and interpretation of this character but I would like to make it as proper
as possible,

>>2616909
Bottom of the hand cradling the head doesn't look fleshy enough to me, it should protrude a little

>>2617454
that's hella cute in a shitfaced way, but I think the pupils are a bit too large, kid looks drugged

>>2617284
kinda cool, but it took me a while to see the creature between the mirrors (the left one especially)

Would appreciate crits on hair, nose, shading and anything in general. Also should I buy finer paper to make my shading less grainy? Used a 6B

i've been working on this a little while and i can't think of a body or background ideas?

>>2617719
would it be better to ask this in a beginners thread?

>>2617721
i think so, Murphy

>>2617722
thank you

How do i do hair?it baffles me...

Any pointers would be appreciated

>>2616681
I'm not even sure what tumblr bodies are, I've been studying anatomy for a while now though, going off of a few different books. What do you see in particular? I want to get a krenz thing goin' on.

>>2617726
you need to think about it as a large 3d shape instead of a bunch of strands. also who surgically removed hermiones cheekbone

>>2616645
Fucking finally finished this. I think this is the last and most complex drawing on frank lohan book, less than 15 pages to finish it, and what a way to finish. Thanks frankie, you teached me a lot. Took me 3 nights to complete it.

>>2617284
those are great

>>2617713
Looks nice, only things I see right now is that the nose is a tad to bulky at the tip (if you put the memes aside) and the neck is fairly flat and undefined in form.
Also, I think the grainyness rather adds to the picture, so you should keep it that way imo.

>>2617832
thanks for the advice!Voldemort took her cheekbone but i think her poofy hair covered her cheek.

>>2617821

It looks good, but it's hard to judge how close a likeness it is without seeing the model. It seems suspiciously lacking in erased sections, which makes me think you aren't correcting errors much. My old life-drawing instructor used to say that if you didn't have to patch the paper up by the end, you weren't looking for errors hard enough.

Mostly, I think you are doing something which is below your level of skill; drawing from a very easy angle, no background, simple clothing, no body and limbs. Looking at the quality of your line-work, I think you can take on tougher challenges.

Also, tell >>2617726 how to do hair, because you seem to have got it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fJUTOgyWnio

What do you think?

added more to this. i think the black outlines make sense with the oil concept

>>2617970
Thanks, I'll keep that in mind next time and try to draw something a bit more challenging.
I've drawn a few of these now and I'm feeling much more confident with portraits. Pic related for reference.

>>2617726
Look up some tutorials on youtube, they can teach you the basics better than I can write up on here.

Help, how do I greyscale?

inb4 jorah mormont

spoopy doges

>>2618115
Are you that shitter who drew the camels with the pyramid backs? Sorry if youre not but that guy always tried to be clever and ended up with bad cliche puns

WIP

>>2618300

OK, it's not a bad likeness, but the photo has a degree of form which isn't visible in your drawing. You need to be more aggressive about defining the structure. Look at how flat the front of the shoulder and the area of face at the front of the cheek are in your drawing compared to the photo. Really make areas like that stand out as much as the 'landmarks' like the nose, eyes and ears. You aren't 'symbol drawing', but you're doing something similar; looking at the features which you expect to be there, not the unexpected shapes.

Try drawing pictures of people from weird angles, or just body parts. Draw a bunch of shoulder, or elbows, or necks. Black out the facial features and concentrate on drawing cheeks and jaws. Anything to get out of the habit of looking at a person and having your brain pull up all the specialised 'looking at people' shit which stops us seeing each other as a mass of shapes.

>>2618364
>jorah mormont
da fuck you talkin bout, why would anyone think this looks like him?

>>2618364

The way I tend to do it is start of with a neutral grey, then work up and down from there. Usually I block in roughly with 75% white and 25% white, then blend and define from there.

If I started with a drawing like that, I'd probably set a desaturated version of the drawing as a multiply layer over a mid-range grey to do the basic shadows, then re-do the lines which wouldn't be in shadow (i.e. the outline of the face) in white, plus a few highlights before refining it into a more coherent mass. Using white lines as much as dark ones is a major part of moving from drawing to painting.

>>2618480

Because greyscale is the name of the disease he has.

yo skrill drop it hard

>>2618480
Catch up with your GoT loser.

>>2618520
Neat tiger

>>2618394
yup i drew that. that ones good too, idk whats not to like. it's more concept art. it's too referential to be a pun.

usually puns are just really literal combinations of two objects. there's no real connection between the two objects other than they happen to be in a phrase together.

"Camel" isn't a pun. a camel with pyramids for humps is referential to the area they live in, not the word itself, so it's more a concept and not a play on words.

didnt mean to rant, puns just usually suck and when i do them its on purpose. and i try not to make puns unless it's something really really stupid, or it's a play on multiple phrases and words and not just something really simple. pic related is one thats ackchooaly a stupid pun i painted (bloody stool)

I'd say in the hierarchy of difficulty when making concepts it's

>pun
>concept
>pun with multiple meanings
>multiple concepts that fit a theme in a single illustration

>>2617447
god damnit anon, whyd I kek at this

>>2618113
You render with a lot of energy. You just go for it, I like that. But there are some things you overlooked. The lighting is unclear, ambiguous. The pose is a little convoluted, nice shapes here and there, but the whole form is a bit wonky. Focus on those two things and you'll see improvement, methinks.

pointers?

>>2618664

Well, you haven't made much effort to follow the reference so there isn't much to say really. Or where you trying to achieve a likeness? The changes you made where not for the better and shows a lack of understanding in anatomy, form and gesture in my opinion.

>>2618671
can you be more specific? I was trying to get likeness btw

>>2618671
>>2618664
I made some changes to the lips and right cheek, you think it's more anatomically correct now?

>>2618677
i forgot the fucking pic

>>2618664

First of all, the overall head shape is wrong. The model has a boxy, masculine jaw and skull which you turned into a roundish more boyish appearance. The facial mass takes up too much space (not enough skull) and tilts forward. Individual features are off aswell. You need to spend more time on the block in and get the angles and proportions right before adding features.

>>2618685
ay thanks for the critique!

Fuck it....work in progress, but suggestions.

>>2618679
I could tell it was Dane Dehaan before I looked at your post with the ref

>>2617669
>http://sketchb00k-.tumblr.com/
how can they be so good, but suck at smudging?

>>2618404
the darkest souls of pokemon go. seems memesterish to me!, but if you got a good monster rushing up to butt rape this bastard, it would be better!

I want to be great at drawing people so badly. So. Fucking. Badly. Baby steps.

Did some 15s with a model. What are my weak points? Strong points? Strongest/weakest drawing? How can i make these figures more expressive besides plain accuracy?

>>2618846

>>2618848

>>2618850

>>2618851

>>2618853
you're trying to show too much. look at how you've drawn his torso and think about how much of it we should be able to see from this angle. we're looking at him from close to a 3/4 angle, yet we can see where the external obliques attach to the serratus muscles. his right leg looks like its in profile view, yet we see almost the entire pocket.

one of the many advantages of drilling basic form practice is that you gain a better sense of how forms occlude each other.

>>2618890
Thanks, I'll fix that up and keep an eye out for that kind of thing.

>>2618471
Thanks again, I'd noticed it on the shoulder at a second look but had somehow completely blanked on the cheek.

How do I draw a mandala, for an assignment and the theme is personal mandala

some Iron stuff. probably will end up doing most super heroes cause this is pretty fun.

>>2618520
really like those, though it's a little bit too muddy, try to blend them some more.

>>2618404
>>2618783
Like this?

>>2619066

https://soundcloud.com/teamsesh/bones-mybiggestenemyhasalwaysbeenmyself-prod-by-greaf?in=teamsesh/sets/bones-paidprogramming2

>Like this?

yeah

Help me, I've spent too much time rendering this I don't even

>>2619066
A bit of color

>>2618846
>>2618848
>>2618851
>>2618852

The results might not be perfect, but I think your process is good. You are clearly working quickly, confidently and looking at the shapes, not the symbols. Although the last image is probably the one most normies would call the best, it's the one which you probably learned least from in my opinion.

Basically, don't get hung up on getting the anatomy 'right' over drawing what you see. Better to do a clumsy rendition of what is actually there than a perfect one of what you think should be there. Practise frequently with the same approach you are using now and you should see steady improvement.

>>2619075
If you don't know how to improve it more then just move on to something new.

All I would say is that it would help to define the shape of the eye lids more, especially the areas that define the thickness of the lid

>>2619075

Neck really bothers me...too cylindrical.

Can you get a real-life model or references? I think it will help a lot.

>>2619075
looks like Sasha Grey as a ginger.

>>2619132

Yeah I was afraid of doing the sternomastoid too muscular, thanks for the paintover!

>>2619134

kek

3 hours in wop

The Anchor Pub nr. Ripley

John Donne's cottage

Me having coffee in Ripley

>>2619110
...
Thank you. Such a thoughtful and positive critique. /ic/ still surprises me from time to time.

>>2619110
>although your first question may be the most pertinent, as you may or may not realize it is also the most irrelevant.

>>2619159
>>2619160
>>2619161
You lack effort and contrast, try beginners for easier approach.

Pic related, had one break for 10 minutes between work, this mess came out. Even less time on colors and not sure if worse. I need to make more time for painting, I feel like one day break is destroying my efforts.

>>2619416
>You lack effort and contrast, try beginners for easier approach.
they are light and lyrical

Sketched this last night and decided to work more on it,could anyone help me make it more interesting?

>>2616645
how is my anatomy going senpaitachi?

>>2619491

>>2619109
Are those cliffracers?

Can somebody give me a red-line?
I'm pretty sure I messed up the proportions in perspective.

Is there an easy way to draw body parts that don't agree with the box of the body in perspective?

>>2619893
The lightning is inconsistent and your anatomy is completely flawed

i need some help here

I'm trying to see if the guy's pose looks correct

>>2619893

>>2619893
He's got no ribs and no collarbone. You got muscles but you forgot his bones

>>2619893
oh my fucking kek

>>2619893
>'m pretty sure I messed up the proportions in perspective

>>2619893

>>2619966
>>2619952
>>2619933
>>2619947
>Spend an hour constructing something with perspective lines
>Finish it
>It looks terrible

I don't know why this happens to me.
Every time I just work with forms without eye level it looks better.

I did this in like 5 minutes in comparison to the 2 hours I spent on that. I had a bad feeling I was polishing a turd.

>>2619990
Bingo, just draw with reference and break it down into simple forms. Also, 1 minute gestures

...hey...

old af lady going nude on me

ah, been a while

How shit is this on a scale of one to Alex grey I'm a beginner obviously

>>2620213
It's 0 out of >>>/beginner thread/

>>2620213
>on a scale of one to Alex grey
kek pic related

Finished this up

>>2617020
Not him but another pocket, duh.

>>2620448
loving this one!

>>2620503
:3

Tried to put good effort in figured drawing. The reference is in the reference threads for those who needs.
I messed up at the position of the hands, probably because the angle of one arm isn't right.
I'm happy with it, but not so much, mainly be cause of the hands, foot and head. These are the ones I did with less interest.
But I had a lot of fun with the back and the butt

>>2619416
continuous left to right hatching never works

you're let down by scribbles

I tried my hand at a concept I've been thinking for some time. Evidently it wasn't enough as I ended up putting those dumbass balls on his shoulders - not even sure why I did that :|

I'll probably revisit this one in like a year and laugh at my complete lack of skill (at least i hope so)

>>2620542
butts are fun

done as a 30 minute-ish speedpaint. gonna try for one every day

>>2620640
don't fall for the speedpaint meme pls

>>2620665
dunno what ya mean. just seeing what i can do in a given span of time.

>>2620538

>>2616656
My portraits are improving...

>>2620725
But my figures need a lot of work fasho. Why does this look so bad? Whats wrong with his arm?

>>2620727
right arm values are the same from top to bottom, that doesn't help to make it pop out
you can make the foreshortening read better by edge control, contrast soft against clean edges
you should also start drawing forms trying to contourn the form with lines, scratch more

also think of of core shadow, your darker values fill with the same intensity all the shadow parts, it even mesh the figure silouette with the background, you must avoid that

>>2620672

I'm applying life drawing to pictures on my computer. I'm having a hard time doing it, but is this correct at all?

I wasn't attempting to recreate the picture, but I was attempting to recreate the forms.

>>2620857
This study has actually been really eye opening for me though.

I'm the guy that made
>>2619893

I didn't really learn anything about the skeletal structure, but I did learn a little about how limbs actually work as forms. I think I'll be better once I draw 200 more people like this.

>>2620963
Fuck you those are amazing

does anyone know what screen shot program this is?

>>2620670
Show us what you can do in 72 hours. Speed painting isn't something to be proud of.

I'm really struggling on getting a cartoony style. It started off as an absent minded sketch on a stained page, any ideas on how I could improve in any way? I never draw from imagination.

>>2620963
I knew it was you before I checked your Tumblr, Vetyr. Your creation of flesh is magnificent.

>>2620963
just found your blogs today, funny to see you active here :')

Working on a 30 x 40 still like. I am inspired by Pieter Claesz from the early 1600s. He was a Dutch painter. I am needing something for my Dining room. So I hope to get the underpainting finished tomorrow.

>>2620985
Gyazo

>>2621034
Perspective is totally inconsistent

seriously fuck noses, I hate those fucking protuberances! once I can render better I'm going full anime on them.
any tips for making them more easy to draw?

>>2616662
why don't you fix her right hand?

>>2620345
that's pretty good anon.

>>2620727
A good exercise to do would be to set up a mirror and wearing the same coat as you have drawn pose in the same position and study the light and shadow along with the foreshortening. It is hard to picture something in your mind and then draw from memory. You can always use yourself as a model.

>>2621037
Yes I see it in a few areas. The caviar in the center needs to be viewed from the same 3/4 view as the wine glass in the corner. The time piece on the left is the view I need to adopt.

Thanks!

>>2620992
if i had 72 hours of free time a week i would

thumbnail. I'll try to update tomorrow
I think the composition works? hum

>>2618404
haha I dig it,keep going and fixing perspective and so on. hat/helmet thing is terrible.

>>2618520
dope,didn't you post on permanoobs? I remember a piece of a monk.if that's you

>>2619139
is this it? is so,wtf is going on with the composition? massive negative space dude. A no-no.
you should have rendered the girl from as it's the focus point.

>>2619893
>>2620115
bless us lord kek

>>2620963
this are pretty cool man! ref or imagination?

>>muh diiiicckkk, thank u kindly :.)

here's a detail shot. feedback appreciated

>>2621097
oh woops, wrong one aha

Inspired by the lovely Vetyr.

First time using an ink wash

Messin around with multiple tones. She's supposed to be a shortstack, but with this pose I could not figure out how to mix the torso into the equation. Thoughts?

>>2620963
looks really neato
>>2621140
her right arm looks as if its too far down but what do I know :/

>>2621194
>haha weed bruuuuhhh

>>2618853
>>2618890
I think that Shrek's head could be a bit bigger and centered
The pocket could be moved, yea, otherwise it looks good so far
The pose is a bit too static, I imagine a slight bend in the knees at least but keep this tip for your next piece

>>2621373
"the sjw"

>>2621378
>>>/8gag/

>>2621387
don't get so bent.

I live in brooklyn. I see this girl about 70 times a day. The typical hipster is the typical sjw. Sorry I made fun of your crush.

>>2621373
>>2621391
>>2621387
I don't understand where this is coming from.
I meant to post the image and ask about how to fix the mouth.

>>2621394
fuck you.

I'm fucking done with this

>>2620102
is u name jorge?

>>2621100
i like how the flowers look like they pop off the page. nice style!

>>2621414
theres no sense of urgency and the cliff racers are not menacing, have one of them about to bite off his head from behind.

>>2621087
(referring to >>2620963) The one on the far left is mostly from ref, as is the torso from the girl in the center; right is from imagination.

>>2621444
And ref number 2

>>2621406
What a baby.

still ,1h
>>2621447
mi likey ,imma draw it too

>>2621498
i like it, i like it alot!

but, some like it hot.. and this is has a cool color palette!

>>2618538
I actually really like this bloody stool. Some of the linework is spot-on. The bottom feet bother me, though. Rather undefined and have weird form to them

>>2621239
Thank you too anon. I tried to fix it up based on both critiques. I'm sure it still has issues but that's okay, this one doesn't need to be perfect. It was to practice this body type before I get into drawing some comic pages with him. I'll do more work on poses there.
Thank you both again!

Unsure if this should go in a beginner thread or what, but I really want critique on my proportions. Something I struggle really hard with in my art is focusing on one place instead of the whole drawing, so when you zoom out it looks off or weird. How do I fix? It really bothers me that when I attempt to draw faces, most of the time they don't really look like the original picture. Also any suggestions as I finish the drawing would be nice as well.

Trying to get better at drawing shoulders.

>>2621418
i posted a drawing hoping for a critic, my name is irrelevant dawg.

>>2621100
What kind of pen do you use?

a rough sketch from ref.

>>2621946
shit forgot to resize

>>2621947
I don't know why people complain and bitch about image size.

If they can't instantaneously click on a picture and have it load up, they shouldn't be on this image board.

>>2621952
Wow I sure love to have someones subpar drawing fill up my screen, it's great.

>>2621981
If you don't want to look at it, why click on it?

>>2620204
Uhh guys? Any crits?

>>2621744
Copic marker 0.03 multiliner :)

>>2621629
just a tad too tall of a face.

>>2621517
>>2621518
>>2621519
>>2621521
>>2621527
>>2621529
>>2621532

Wow, awesome work dude. What high school do you go to? I think i've seen these somewhere before.

Ok, please fix this...I know one of the eyes is way too big, and something with the lips is all fucked up. But basically any input on it would be much appreciated...

>>2622100
You have good linework but her skull is a little bit out of this world

>>2622133
Nigga is just hair

>>2622133
buy wacoms more

depressed bodies

>>2622133

>he doesn't know Loish

>>2622145
and something i'm too lazy to finish

>>2622133
>what is a beehive
>who is lolish
holy shit you are retarded.

supey heroes

Jesus christ these threads reallly have gone to shit haven't they.

or is it just summer?

>>2622213
flash your work

>>2618113
You are good for 15

>>2622065
looks pretty good in thumb nail, but falls apart up close

>>2622100
I haven't been in high school for a long time

idea for a ninja i'm creating. her attacks are based
on bathing.

>>2616645
JUST

>>2621110
Arm looks unnaturally thick compared to the body

>>2622518
That's often the goal. Plus, he was a skelly.

>>2619423
They're not lyrical, they're fucking pictures. Pictures aren't words

>>2621952
>right-click
>literally 1 pixel of movement to the right, click open in new tab

holy shit wow its like im smrt or something

>>2622647
>>literally 1 pixel of movement to the right, click open in new tab
>He doesn't middle-click to open and close tabs

>>2622642
Her back looks really wonky, not sure if the lump is supposed to be a backpack or a (in which case it would be too high up)

>>2622154
thats really cool but his legs are so tiny in comparison to the rest of him

>>2616645
i thought that cat was actually a painting before clicking

Am I doing these figure drawings right?
Is this something that will eventually just click, or is it like form where you know whether you're doing it right or not?

I'm taking my time because I'm just starting out doing this.

>>2622767

Think about the skeletal structure more while you do these. I can tell youre putting your "joints" where you think they are based on the reference but if you think about how the skeleton works those guesses are off. (see shoulder joints on bottom two)

>>2622811
I have no idea how the skeletal structure works. I've been told to practice gestures before anatomy.

>>2622762
I feel like I have seen this a thousand times. Please tell me you've posted this before and I'm not mentally ill.

>>2622815


In that case I'd suggest hitting up a local life drawing session if you can. If not try drawing people in public or watching one of those timed "life drawing" videos on youtube. Youre not doing bad but you need to loosen up and doing quick timed poses will help with that.

How can i make linework without it looking like a fucking mess?

Warm up from the ref thread yesterday.

>>2622859
MC Ride?

>>2622875
yeah

>>2622873
Nice brushwork baaad drawing

>>2621087
nah, never been on there

>>2622917
That's a bummer. What kills it for 'ya?

TOPEKA

tipz

HA! newfags can't trifooorce

>>2622943
These are a special kind of shit, and they're enjoyable because of it.

>>2620640
Secret dick rock island.

>>2622859
TAKYOOOOOON!

This was my first completed character design, and i'm pretty desperate for critique, hence me coming here.
My usual forums are dead, and my teacher is busy.
Im already working on a new design for a different character, but i'd still like to hear where I might have gone wrong with this one.
Lemme paste the design document

"The goals for the design were to create a dark-skinned girl who looked beautiful and powerful, used the power of her own "inner flame" adapted to a fighting style focusing on fists and grapples, and was confident and sporty.
The colors intended for this design, following the uniform she and her "unit" wear, were Navy Blue, Black, Purple as a secondary, and a brighter blue/teal as a highlight/tertiary color.
The client gave me references for the general style of the artwork he wanted as well as the design of the clothing."

How'd I do gu/ic/e?

>>2621444
is this shooped? no way her waist is that small and arms that fat

Here's a carbon drawing on toned paper that I'm working on

>>2623010
I don't know if or how much is the actual quality of the draw tied to the quality of the design, like making a good design, but poorly drawn, or vice versa (I guess not much, since you can make a design with just silhouettes). But from what I heard of design cinema's videos, a designer doesn't draw, a designer solves problems for the client they are working for, in the form of designs. So, in this case, the problem would be literally the description, and the solution, the char design. (don't quote me on that tho, Ima a noob). So, as far as the design goes, one thing I can say, is that you failed on the "adapted to a fighting style focusing on fists and grapples" because from the pic (which btw, I think when you're making a design of something, you never do just one), she doesn't appear to know any form of martial arts, by just looking at her; so the pose may be a good place to start.

>>2621952
Blame it on the internet speed, being on your free time/outside with your phone burning data or the absurdity of enlarging a beginner's 3000x3000 drawing, like tf you work on that resolution or canvas size for if it's not detailed as fuck?
some of us prefer efficiency, ever heard of the "image hover" setting?

Been trying to improve my line work from imagination... c&c much appreciated

>>2623036
So you're saying, I wasn't able to convey all the aspects of the deign with that picture, and i'd have a more complete design for her if I had more dynamic poses featuring martial arts stances?

I need material for dynamic poses and gesture, can anyone recommend a book?

>>2623045
Chekc out Dynamic Figure Drawing by Burne Hogarth, if you haven''t already.

>>2623043
Yeah, that's al I could think of saying that could be semi helpful, as I myself am not versed in the designing ways.

>>2623047
Thank you, my man.

>>2623049
No, that's helpful. The few response I have gotten have been telling me generally the same stuff
"the pose is where you went wrong", so I guess I'll do more figure drawing practices on my way to the next design.

So, do me one more thing, how do you feel about pic related pose?
It's meant to seem "calculated, vesatile, precise swordsman"
>>2623052
No worries mate, it was one of the first books I bought, helped me out quite a lot.

>>2623054
Better version.

>>2623058
For that one, I guess a good starting point would be researching swordsmanship techniques, first, decided which influence you like the most (England, Nordi, Japanese), then search about the techniques they use, find some draws or pictures, and try to apply the ones you feel meet the criteria. As it is now, it gives me the feel that he's just standing there with 2 swords, nothing more.

>>2623060
Heh, best I can find for Dual Swordsmanship is literally just a guy holding two swords...
Which I guess stems from how impractical it would be, but Dual wielding is a staple for the design.
Guess I gotta get creative. Maybe look up some vidya games from reference.
Anyways, thanks for the input.

>>2619893
blog?

storytelling illustration practice

any critique would be helpful

>>2623042
Cute, oh and I think the end of tail should laying on the opposed side, for it to continue the spiral notion.

>>2623068
Try looking up "nito ryu" for japanese two-sword styles.
I believe there are a few fencing masters in the west who taught the use of two swords (called a "case of swords" or a "case of rapiers") as well
Oh, and the Chinese like two-sword styles too - hook swords are supposed to be sued together, and I think there might be some styles that use twin daos.

Hope some of this might lead to inspiration.

WIP
I still don't know what I will do with the background

what are you doing with your life

>>2622832
yeah, don't worry.

>>2623042
that tower grew a dick because of the dragon lady

>>2622671
>middle click on the image and the click on the tab
>not just click on the .jpg name
ngmi

>>2622743
vlad?

>>2622100

>>2621239
>Shrek's head
kek

>>2623022
I am excited to see how this turns out.

>>2623240
thanks anon
>>2623744
what is it with you people and seeing dicks everywhere

>>2622133

>>2623022
Some more progress on my drawing. Should I make the street light brighter?

blop

New thread poodle-heads

>>2624279
fuck
>>2624272

>>2621611
Very good!
The colors are kinda muddy, try to use less black and more color variation, like in the neck/cheeks
It's most noticeable from the eyes up
Maybe sharpen the eyes a bit too with edges and contrast

Very good work so far!

>>2621947
The blue on the face doesn't really work
Draw the hand. In general seems pretty lazy, you might get something better if you tried a bit.

>>2622128
Construction! Doesn't look like her at all, the filename saved you.
Overlay the original on a new layer and see you mistakes.

>>2622133
The neck connection bothers me, draw the temporal bone/jaw and you'll see it.

But I do appreciate your sense of humor.

>>2622340
Good, continue
>>2622693
Seconded
>>2622743
It's going in a nice direction, but it needs values, it will make it so much better
Consider a light background
>>2622928
Neat
>>2623022
>>2624107
Very good work
>>2623042
Cute
>>2623115
The colors are good
In general seems kinda flat, one of the reasons being that you don't show any of the ground
The colors, moods and perspective of the foreground and the background should match at least a bit, right now the two in the front seem like cardboard cutouts, especially with the white stroke around them
But it's definitely going in a good direction
>>2624128
Very good blop, try to keep the same value dynamic
Maybe a good idea would be to keep the hard light on top and maybe leave it as a silhouette at the bottom
Has potential to become a good piece

>>2620963
brush?