/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>4971540
>gave up on rendering
>wonder why drawing came out weird
it's flat, the proportions are inadequate, your line weight is inconsistent, there is no gradual fade with what shadowing you do have present. it's just a hard darker tone. also your bikini thing is flat because the straps don't stick to the fucking contour of the body jesus christ. also her hips/thighs are disgusting, from that angle her ass would not be showing like that either. she looks like she's supposed to be bending forward, but you have done nothing to actually convey that except for making her thighs so wide. no shadowing/rendering = no illusion. all you've done is given his dark outlines on the edges of her skin and in the hair, but you're not even consistent with that. you don't have a defined light source. where's the fucking light, anon? nose = flat, no detail to give it life. a weird choice to give it as little line weight as possible, considering everything else. hair = flat, no liveliness to it. no lines. just a blob. eyes? the least concerning thing here, honestly. oh well, glad you gave her clavicles. god, imagine how weird she would have looked without those? haha... ha.
>>4971571
yeah, this is a stupid fucking reference and doesn't look good even without you trying to imitate it. learn anatomy then play with proportions. jesus fuck.