/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>4702201
Man, it's sad he fought you on it. It seems like a missed opportunity.

This is me sperging, but...
I'd change your male character to a more weathered warrior/father type driven by justice instead of money. Swap the girls personality to the purest/helpless being ever. I'd get rid of the third character (even tho his design is nice) and have the girl be sad about the town. Making the MC and the reader pity her. MC would save her life a few times, maybe tell her a similar sad story from his past(so we care about him more). Maybe she would remind him of his dead daughter or something, so he gets attached to her fast. Only for her to do a 180, betray him and kill him in her ritual. Just to make it sting more.
She could even lure him in with the hopes for saving more villagers.

Giving it a sort of corruption of innocence ending. And having her revel in the fact she duped him.

I just want to be hit in the feels man!