/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>1442525
Bleh, tried painting over a bit but it didn't work out that well haha...still posting it because I think a few points still stand.

-Hair, can be less monotonous in shape
-Leg that is raised...think of the femur, the attachment to the hip is too low, raise the leg
-Leg again...simplify a bit more and make forms more subtle, take a look at legs by Gil Elvgren
-Clouds can be simplified a bit more (less visual noise), put into perspective a bit better
-cockpit glass should be transparent, not sure why you have all those colours. Take a look at some photos to understand what it looks like in life.
-bg plane removed, as it was super awkward
-contrast/shininess of uniform played up a bit...I don't know the material, but I think some things in the picture need to be painted a different material, at the moment everything is the same matte finish basically.
-bg buildings flattened as they had too much noise/colour
-dark glaze put over bottom part of plane to remove some visual attention