/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

Speaking of humor, what the hell is up with yours? Your humor is peak lolsorandumXD! 2005 called. And the character writing, if you can call that, is atrocious. For some reason, the protagonist is putting all his heart into punching this one dude for beating a kid he's never seen in a foreign land. Why? You just skipped character motivation entirely. And the speed at which you change pace and mood is atrocious. I'd be willing to let it slide, but with an attitude like yours, I really don't care about hurting your feelings.

You write like a 13 y/o would write. In a world filled with not only professional-level art, but professional-level writing, your manga is really subpar. You spent nine (?) pages on a battle that has no emotional appeal. I don't know the people involved in the fight, I don't know who any of the people fighting are, so I don't care about it. And because I've read this a hundred times before, I ALREADY know MC will win and save the other guy who will give loads of exposition. Big surprise there. Other manga can get away with it because they have the cool factor working for them, but your designs are bad. By the way, you didn't add the OBLIGATORY frontal shot of the protagonist so we get a good look at him. Something like this >>6174834. You are hiding your character because deep down you know your art is bad and you don't want to give people the time to look at it. You are ashamed of your copium "muh style".

I started drawing in October, after being hit by a car.

>>6078630
Forgot to post art