/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

Got passed over last thread. 30 min, what can I do better? I feel like I need finer control over values and a stronger start laying the overall form of the face. I know there's some short-pose experts here, pls help.

>>2549569
Make the breasts look separate. Right now it looks like she's got one wtde boob with cleavage drawn on.

>>2549719
throw just a tiny bit of light on her collar so the head isn't floating. Otherwise good.

>>2549784
Darken the orange triangle to the upper left of the eye in order to more strongly define the brow.

I'm really rust and made the lady look older than she was. She was still happy with it. 30 min, what do i need to work on?

>>2547527
Add some lines on top of your shapes to help show how they turn.

>>2547453
good palette, and proportion is fine, but you could use the lighting to show form better. The construction is good but not the way the lighting lands on it. Doesn't look possible, let alone real. There's no light on the gun. The sun is behind her, but to the left, right, or directly? You gotta pick.

>>2547394
Beginner thread or start a doodle thread. Soldier is an okay doodle, the rest is just minimum effort.

>>2547336
I know tali is an alien, but those tits & core muscles don't look functional on any planet. Copy bridgman over and over for a month. Pay attention to how he shows form with just line.