/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

dont know whats up with the other thread, but oke

so there is a story behind this drawing;
>went to gf in a different town
>biked to the biggest train station in amsterdam
>bag with ipad, laptop, school stuff and drawing for my aplication at an art school
>locked bike and took train, but notice i dont have my bag anymore
>have crazy panic attack
>get out of train and take train back to amsterdam, takes about half hour
>run to bike where i think i left it, its not there
>really sad, go to lost & found
>this couple arrives just when i do
>thye have my bag
>let them know its mine, they give it back
>ready to scuk their dicks at this point, so thankful
>promise them a drawing

this is the process so far, really wanna do good on this one. any feedback?

so there is a story behind this drawing;
>went to gf in a different town
>biked to the biggest train station in amsterdam
>bag with ipad, laptop, school stuff and drawing for my aplication at an art school
>locked bike and took train, but notice i dont have my bag anymore
>have crazy panic attack
>get out of train and take train back to amsterdam, takes about half hour
>run to bike where i think i left it, its not there
>really sad, go to lost & found
>this couple arrives just when i do
>thye have my bag
>let them know its mine, they give it back
>ready to scuk their dicks at this point, so thankful
>promise them a drawing

this is the process so far, really wanna do good on this one. any feedback?