/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>3466937
>Presentation
Tightening up linework, and rendering.
turnarounds and animation examples
going more into detail on function.
Something like this is where you should be shooting for or trying to surpass.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1SGW9gS1y35XgI2pbGFVUFES7pBk6hhyi/view
His craft is great of course, but you can tell its a well researched idea that he iterated on and explored into the ground, and he even shows steps in the design process.
Additionally you can look at maybe someone like Carlyn Lim:
https://www.artstation.com/goldantler
She recently posted a variety of stuff done in-house for Arenanet, and although its probably not as polished as she would like, the ideas are explored deeply and thought process is shown throughout. The type of work someone will put out in a studio is different than the work we can put into our portfolios while in a vacuum though, due to them working under tight deadlines and not being able to freely polish things for as long to impress people. Personal portfolio projects really should be shooting for your very best long term efforts using every trick and tool you've got (while also showing the shorter efforts which lead to the final process, so people see how you think)
>Consider doing more light passes
Oh I phrase this poorly, sorry! I meant lighting passes, as in rendering this out further. When you think about rendering, the idea is to convey materials to the viewer. Even with more stylized work you can still really show differences in material due to how the highlights are handled. The way you're presently handling the shapes and values of the light makes it fairly difficult for the viewer to tell what things are made of. Of course this depends on the aim of your portfolio, so you may treat things differently if they aren't going to eventually be modeled for example.