/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>4724947
Before I give this crit I just want to make it clear that I’m not >>4724640
That guy is the textbook difference between constructive criticism and whining.

Now thats out of the way, the following are mostly suggestions / areas that you may want to consider (depending upon style preference)

1. Her arms
I think this one is the most objective concern with the piece. They are very short. It would be hard to visualize her being able to reach the bottom of her pelvis with the arms she currently has. The apparent size could normally be considered a result of perspective, however the head acts as a frame of reference in comparison with the arms.

2. Her Elbows
I’d argue her elbow (the one pressing against his chest) suffers because it’s not physically possible. She is for the most part laid flat against his body, however her elbow is essentially jutting into the space his chest would be. To visualize the problem, imagine lying on your side on your bed. It’s impossible for you to raise your arm outward while still having the side of your torso flat against the bed. What is possible is to have the arm outstretched forwards

3. Head Size
This goes back to number 1. The viewer will instinctively see the heads and then use that as a reference for how large / small surrounding objects are. I’d say keeping an eye on head sizes would be beneficial to prevent characters from looking stubby. (ie her arms and his shoulders)

First image is a attempt to draw the forms. Admittedly it lost a lot of gesture.

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