/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>4934848
Good technical ability but I'm finding the panelling really difficult to actually follow, the flow seems all over the place, the multiple shades of grey aren't helping and the typesetting isn't helping either.

On the first pass, my eye goes from left to right and then down to the rule #3 never wear shoes. But I'm supposed to be reading the left line on the second line. So I start again. On the third line, the pose of the body tries to get me to read from right to left but this seems to be totally incorrect and trying to follow the dialogue is way too difficult.