/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>3456542
I can't take this level of defence seriously, if you consider 54 pages a limitation then you really don't seem to understand what you or your writer are lacking or you're completely misusing the space as you seem to be aware as you comment on retrofitting the idea.
There are plenty of utterly terrible manga around so its no surprise that most of the more well known stories might come across as underwhelming. To put it in perspective when you enter OPTs on /a/ and still have a great deal of the better more niche stories being unknown and consider that this is a place for autists discussing weeb shit while still gatekeeping somewhat with no spoonfeeding and they're still relatively unknown amongst enthusiasts, compared to them I highly doubt you've explored this medium at all.
To reiterate earlier, spend a week reading shorts by Satoshi Mizukami (https://mangadex.org/manga/19018/ore-no-mangamichi-kari)), a lot of his works are shortstories and they all do more less. Kui Ryoko has a lot of experimental short stories, not that well suited to Jump but in terms of story structure, setting and character they excel and do it with far less dialogue and exposition than you've used. Dowman Sayman is constantly coming up with charming one shots, Nickelodeon in particular is full of little things like Comet Naruna which is 8 fucking pages https://mangadex.org/chapter/15529/1 some of these stories may not be to your tastes but they're far more succinct while also imprinting on you what a character is like, what they value and why. Wanted!! by Oda is also amazing in its brevity.
Just go fucking read them online and if you're still concerned about having them physically do that later, first comes learning.