/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>2666835
Bear with me, I'm not a native English speaker and by all mean I don't get proper education in art.

There are... a lot problems, anatomy, value, form, edges. So much that I think it's best that you read loomis and other stuffs from the sticky.
However, I think your problem is that you look at proportion as a sort of mathematical thing, like a distance between points. In my experience, proportion is a relative thing, and it's very much dependable on form, shape and value. Meaning as I shown here, you have to feel and understand the form and the shape of the object and try to describe it, using both god lines and value, not just measurement. It doesn't have to be exact, but it'd better describe your subject well.