/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>2933608
I'm not familiar with your other drawings. Also sorry for how rude my crit sounded. You have a good sense of shapes going on but it's marred by some major issues.

I think most of my issues are with the fundamental sketch. You exacerbated the strange armpit area with the rendering in the first post, but it's still 'wrong' looking in your sketch. Here's a quick redline. I added some more volume to your sketch, because I feel like erotic images are best when volume is emphasized. Even Doxy, who is super stylized, has immense volume and gravity implied in his art.

Also, there's a tangent going on with the right-hand breast and the ribs, and the tilt of the breasts do not follow the tilt of the shoulders.

Anyway, I can understand if you disagree with my redline. A lot of this is subjective because it's how I would execute it, and I'm not sure how much is intentional abstraction in your drawing.