/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>3453901
Your work looks like that of a westerner trying to do manga. Its just obvious. The way you learned to draw and hoe you approach is completely different, and you didnt do enough studies on what ACTUALLY makes a battle manga look good.
Just look at pic related from your page. His face lacks tonal details, his face features are uneven. And the design just feels like a DBZ OC.

The drawing itself is good and yet at the same time feels lifted from a how to draw manga book. The poses also look stiff and the composition feels lacking, not enough "Dynamism", I dont feel the page jumping at me.

Well drawn manga is something thats easy to recognize but hard to do well, and its completely different from how western comics are done. I can count on one hand the ampunt of artists I saw that really broke through that barrier.

One of the chief things you need to know is that nips cheat alot. Sure, Miura and Murata are gods of art, but most are not them, and they use various tools, filters, guidelines and "construction gimmicks" to facilitate their grander compositions. Dont be ashamed to blend it into your art, but know how to use it and when. You can put a good filtered image into a Bakuman or PunPun panel and it'll look legit, but your will look like an edit. Its because your draftsmanship is not up to par to blend in with them yet.

Work on your use of values and shape language, those are incredibly important in manga, as well as perspective and composition, and of course, lineart.

Most of all, make sure your story passes its message well and does not fsll into a jumble of words or a messy layout. Like other anons said, reference and note down mangakas that inspire you. Murata's style is something thats hard to grasp but his panelling will help, as well as Toriyama, which is masterful at fight choreography.