/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

While adding more lighting and polish, I lost the natural, relaxed, appealing look of the face, and I can't figure out why after hours of experimenting.
I fixed the obvious errors immediately, and then spent hours fixing the mouth, but the result is still inferior to the original. At this point, I'm planning on rolling back most of the face shading. Perhaps it was just too harsh.
>>3987831
>>3987833
I misunderstood. I thought you meant adding construction in gesture drawing, but you said after gesture.
Those sketches are nowhere near correct enough to be the bases for proportionally correct figures.
>It's also not chicken scratching, I'm trying to find the gesture through multiple lines
I don't know what your aim is with gesture, but to me, gesture means trying to catch the feeling of the pose in simple bold strokes.