/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>3195164
i tried to change stuff while keeping it inline with your style (not perfect, i know) to hopefully get more at what i think the others in this thread have been trying to say. i also tried to clean up some of the parts where i was confused by what was going on so apologies for probably also misinterpreting some of the things you were going for.

also also the figure felt a little off balance to me so i rotated them a bit. neat trick i learned years ago for relatively static poses (read: not runny/jumpy/actiony) is that you can drop a line straight down from the clavicle parallel to the force of gravity to get a good sense of where the center of their weight is. hope i was able to help! (and if not, hopefully i wasn't too annoying)