/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

I don't post that much at all but I did post about 4-5 months ago when I started taking art more seriously. The image I posted back then was the coloured one in this post's image.

Back then, I asked whether there could be any solution to the problem where I felt my drawings were a little stiffer, and a nice anon told me that I should focus a bit more on gesture and trying to convey more of an action with my characters.

I'm using this picture because both took me the same amount of time. I haven't improved much in hands, but at least I'm drawing them now.

Does this drawing still look stiff? Other than the hair, have I fucked up anywhere with the head etc? How can I make it more appealing?

Kinda wish I had more time to draw in the last couple months, but finishing my degree was hell.