/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

This project is pencil sketch->thin gel pen outline->colored ballpoint. I went overboard on the pencil sketch. The paper is watercolor and it's probably too toothy for ballpoint, but I'm learning and experimenting.
I posted an earlier iteration in the coom source thread and was told I did a better job on the horse than the girl, so I corrected a few lines on her (and promptly fucked them up on the thin outline.)
I'm going to wait until the second color layer is done before I try to erase the pencil. It will probably not come clean, but as I said, it's a learning experience.