/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>2485945
this is sort of off in terms of drawing and construction, which gives it a nice kind of lumpy rearranged look

but here's a redline anyway

basically what i see is the mouth tilting off from the plane of the face. same with his right eye. that piece of cartilage between the nostrils looks like it's off too, but that might be an individual thing. the way you've shaded the left eye socket and eyelids doesn't give much of a sense of shape. also he has no tear duct. the eyebrow tilts down too much into the eye socket, when it should be up on the brow. the ear is a little underconstructed. maybe try overlapping a little more in the bits of cartilage of the rim to give it a solid look.

the shading in general is just really tentative and not all that descriptive. i don't get a feel of where the light source is other that "above and to the sides and front", and even then there are places that should be darker (eye sockets/lids, under the hat rim, under the top lip) and lighter (the nose) if that were the case. maybe try reading up on planes and doing direct light studies with charcoal.

hope this helps