/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>5144364
This is the most I can do without redrawing major portions of it. I'll run down by some of the reasons it looked off
This is gonna sound mean, please bare with me, this is in the right direction, you just need to keep going.
>no eyebrows
>no irises
>no reflection in the eyes
>gray for eyes and mouth is perfect plain gray (often not the case) and too dark
>dead too desaturated colors
>weird spot shading on the hands
>weird inflated brow
>no hair after the brow, giving the shape
>really long neck
>weirdly shaped hood
>the lines for the mouth and the neck should be more subtle and well thought out, otherwise they are intrusive and will ruin the work
Everything else is fine, these are decent hands, arms, and torso. I don't think you are beg, you obviously understand the fundamentals, you passed that hurdle, you just need to keep drawing.