/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>6925483
honestly this didn't need a redraw, yours was pretty decent already. only things I felt were wrong was the thigh way too thick for the girls frame, and the hand being too small. by the way, since you're drawing trad and seem to have trouble with hands, try to draw them as if they're 3 or 4 finger mittens, it's what I do when doing trad myself since you can't afford to erase the same place too much. of course, easier said than done but bunching up the fingers like this is a good solution for the hands problem I think
a few things on stylization
>try to make the cheeks puff around the height of the point of the nose, otherwise you might end up emphasizing the cheekbones which is kind of a western style trait
>for the hair, try to use these flat, ribbon shapes instead of the spiky bundle. spiky works for some hairstyles of course, but in general, ribbons suit girls better
>you should emphasize the upper eyelids over the lower ones. draw them darker and bolder
>you can have a slimmer neck as a way to stylize it and make the figure more feminine looking
hope this helps somehow