/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>3031084
I just dont think the boobs on her would be that obvious looking, She looks young and while this is pin-upy i think its more cute than sexy, so you dont want those big funbags hanging off her rib cage likes she's had too many kids.
also the boobs you drew are out of perspective, that might really be your probloem here. You're not getting the volume. Try making a wire frame for your character, it will challenge your mind and you'll improve while making it look right.
I could not stand to watch this so I redlined it.
Heres a suggestion, instead of making lines for the boobs how about implying it with shadow and maybe a few subtle lines (kind of like how noses are done a lot, they usually have lines for the nostril but the bridge is done with a shadow that leads into those lines)
I mapped out where some of your shadows would go in the first pic
In the last pic would be more like if you wanted to keep doing it line art style. Try to use her clothing to imply her boobs instead of drawing her actual titties.