/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>2091437
HEY!

That's mine in the OP!! Neat! I never thought I'd be worthy of showing up in the OP considering the kind of work I've seen posted here from time to time...


Anyway, just here to post a concept for the MC of a comic I'm working on, general critique is appreciated.

He's supposed to be the typical hotblooded/manly badass since the comic is supposed to be a deconstruction of the Monomyth.

(Not to go into too much detail, but the story centers around 9 homonculi girls created from the Prima Materia and their stories and adventures. Muse Calliope is the Muse of Heroes (made more sense than "epic poetry" but they're the same thing in a way), and her story kinda focuses around this dude).

Named him Yash cause it sounded kinda cool, and the name in Hebrew meant like brave or some shit, and it reminded me of Vash the Stampede, but then I didn't like how it was a rather typical name for Arabs, so I changed it around, made Yash his nickname, and named him Iassu by playing with Phonetics.

His form of combat is based around Martial Arts. Since Wuxia and Monomyths go hand in hand, and I'm an avid fan of MA and the philosophy around them and such. There is magic in this world, both in the form of Mana and Chi, and obviously Yash focuses on the later, which for Westerners (where there story takes place) it's rather rare and exotic. Esp since most can't manipulate Mana directly, and it's seen as a taboo (Magitech is common tho).

I know it might sound kinda cliche, but I'm speaking in general terms, and since Cal's story is a "deconstruction" of the monomyth, I'm kinda trying to set up the cliche to break expectations halfway through her story. Yash is "the main character" (big emphasis on those quotations).