/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>2312121
>>2309907
Too much superfluous panels and superfluous panels. The pacing is really slow because there are so many panels of nothing. Cutting most of them as well as cutting most of the dialog you can better achieve the surreal underground comic vibe you're going for. I'd suggest you storyboard because it's very obviously stream of consciousness (not in a good way) and apply some economy to the number of panels and lines.