/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

I know I promised this like a week ago, but well, better late than never:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZUUzETVu38awOF7mxkcJA3i1GA9Hcs-hQHevYiS9SPs/edit


It's the screenplay for Alice. Idk what draft to call this, it's still slightly unfinished though, just some bits of missing dialogue (perhaps like 20? lines total), or dialogue that's semantic only. It should be done by tomorrow, but I'll put it here for now since this thread moves rather slowly.

It's roughly 19 pages total, which equates around 19ish minutes of screentime based on how screenplays are counted. Please give it a read if you've got time. I really appreciate feedback. I'll keep whatever is said in mind as I go through the manuscript/name, since a screenplay is never 1:1. The fine tuning of the story will now just come down to the execution on the visual front I think.

That should probably be done by this weekend, especially since going through a name is significantly easier than working and reworking and reworking the kinks and details of a story. I just gotta sit down and dedicate a weekend to it.