/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>4326849 (forgot to check back here again oops)
Nice! That's actually quite a lot of improvement for just a few days. I drew your pic again if that's cool
There's a few things worth mentioning though:
1. Don't be too afraid to make things dark. It's good that your lines are neat now, but remember that no shadows doesn't necessarily make things less clean than if there were any. For practice, you can make a separate layer and add shadows to plain lineart. I'd say you should try this for basically every piece you line, just because you already spent the effort lining it.
2. Lines don't necessarily have to be too straight/smooth. It looks a little unnatural in certain places, like the shading on your version's collar, the hoodie strings, and a bit of the hair. Honestly, you shouldn't stress about this point too much. It's something that'll just improve as you're able to draw straight lines faster. (which brings the next point)
3. Try to draw your lines fast since it'll look more natural. Again, it'll also come naturally over time, but you can do a few things to practice it too. Just practice drawing lots of circles and straight lines fast as an exercise before drawing. Alternatively, once you get a little faster at drawing in general, just keep redrawing the same img in the sketch phase, then choose the one that turned out best for actually finishing.
4. Remember, you can also draw with transparent color(or white ink for traditional). What I mean by this is that some things you don't need to draw perfectly with just a pen. For example, the stitch looking thing on the pants, the shoelaces, and the hoodie strings. What I did was draw them with a thick black brush, and then used a thinner version of the brush and drew over the thick line with the brush set to transparent mode. It's helpful for making things look a bit more consistent.

in pic related, I made her a little shorter because she seemed too tall, but disregard if that was intentional. Keep up the good work!