/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>3250939
You're trying to judge this as a series, and not as a one shot for a contest entry though. And moreover, making assumptions as to what the series would be like, with essentially no knowledge of how we'd execute that.

Priority number one, is winning the contest, or at least getting the attention of the editors, so we can present them with the names for the first 14 chapters, and a general pitch of the concept.
>If anything, it looks like you're telling the judges "look, I can draw a competent shounenshit, hire me"
I'd say the themes are consistent with the sort of stuff that tends to win contests, especially according to these guys:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HaEHI6TF09I
>There's no spark, there's nothing drawing the reader in[...]
Is that really the case though? Or did the themes just go over your head? Others have picked up on them, and found them engaging, pic related for example being a comment left on the page. He literally says the exact opposite of what you said. And an underlying theme with character development is something no other entry is doing desu

There's more to it than just the fight, the point of the story is more about "why you do what you love" and "is it worth the sacrifice" a general theme that mangaka themselves would connect with considering the incredible effort that goes into making a manga, and the fact that they're stuck in a perpetual state of competition.

As far as the characters go, I'd say it's a mixed bag, it's not the best we can do, given the context, there's not much room for humor, but many people have managed to connect with the characters, so that's a plus. But it's because of that that we're also entering a 2nd one shot focused more on humor and character interaction, to show we can do that too.

As far as the actual manga goes, that's irrelevant at this point, the first step is to win the contest.