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>>4980674
I think the head feels disconnected from her body. Mostly due to positioning.
I tried placing it a bit behind and straightening her neck (2n top row), and then tried pushing her head forward a bit, since I think that's what you wanted to do (3rd).
It's up to you how you wanna handle it, since you get to decide her gesture, but I think if you want to push her head even further forward, maybe you could arch her back a bit so that the head doesn't look off, something like this
https://gelbooru.com/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=5560204&tags=donguri_suzume
https://gelbooru.com/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=4268218
https://gelbooru.com/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=5560369&tags=donguri_suzume
Also notice the angle at which the neck connects with the head (plus the fact that it gets thinner at the top). I don't think that's quite right, if anything I usually make it get slightly wider as you go to the top, but that's just me making animu necks, think the angle should be more like this
https://i.pinimg.com/originals/8a/cf/f8/8acff8bc9161522dda7eacc753e887c7.jpg
https://th.bing.com/th/id/OIP.Gfa6bNlu_Ij5c63vpj7i3QHaJ4?pid=Api&rs=1
https://cdnb.artstation.com/p/assets/images/images/000/990/009/large/angel-ganev-allure-angelganev.jpg?1443928323
https://thefashiontag.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/01/2015-jewelry-trend-chokers-3.jpg
https://th.bing.com/th/id/OIP.PcWUR2I_l2_qZgfVWPOehgHaED?pid=Api&rs=1