/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>4262432
So something like this you gotta consider the composition and timing of the shots during the storyboard phase to make each action clear.

Character 1 throws the pie forward (away from the audience) but then we suddenly see it coming toward us. That's confusing screen direction. Additionally, both character 1 and 2 are on the same side of the shot for their respective actions. Given the sketchy nature of the gif plus their similar designs, it's not readily apparent who's doing what.
In order to fix this, start with splitting the scene down into it's essential elements: Character 1 throwing the pie, a shot of the pie flying, a shot of character 2 reacting and trying to avoid getting hit and, lastly, impact
There's a specific one from these guys I'm trying to find but this one kind of goes into it