/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>2452685
>>2452724
>>2452732
Uhh, doing some redlines. If you're still on this: you need to focus more on structure, like contours following set forms, so the ribcage should follow an egg and the hips should follow a sphere/bowl. Your shoulders were wonky. Also consider overlap a little more, like in the thigh that comes forward, breast resting on ribcage, et cetera.
More definite shapes would help the shading, along with a higher contrast between lights and darks. Consider working in a greyscale before jumping into colour.
Finally, I wouldn't file this under 'porn', it's insanely tame.