/cgl/ - Cosplay & EGL

>>7599186
>>7600657
Has anyone given her specific critique about what she should do rather than just how it's bad?

> Hair shouldn't be up, lolita needs bigger hair to balance the skirt poof. Headpiece is necessary.
> The hem of the skirt isn't full enough. She needs to either use a minimal petticoat/no petticoat and relinquish this skirt as a lolita skirt, or she needs to remake it. The hem needs to be- what- 3? 4? times the waist. I always chance on the side of too full rather than not full enough.
> Beyond the color of the blouse, its general form and textile isn't lolita. The sleeves especially look like a men's dress shirt with the draping of the fabric. I can't tell if it has a rounded collar or not, or what those black things are. If it's a pointed collar, it's definitely out. Overall, it's too stiff. She needs a softer fabric.
> The bodice front is too plain, there are no pintucks or ruffles or interesting buttons. When you're wearing a blouse with a skirt, there needs to be interest, since it isn't hiding underneath a jsk. At least wear a long necklace.
> Colors can be a bitch to match, yes. When you can't find a color in the same family (the skirt's green is a yellow-lime green, the blouse is sage with more blue in it), you forgo it all together. This would be improved immensely if she use a black or a white blouse.
> If she wanted to go with a safari theme, bringing a tan jacket/bolero into the coord could look nice, but she better not go too far and use a literal stiff safari shirt. Keep the color, but not the fabric.
> If bringing tan into the coord, a tan wool cloche could look cute since it looks kind of like a pith helmet.
> Tan or light light brown lace-up (LOLITA) knee-high boots would contribute to the rugged safariness with maybe plain white tights
> Green needs to be added back in. She needs to stray towards yellow-greens or even green-yellow. This could be in bracelets, the necklace, or something pinned to the cloche.

I want this to work.