/cgl/ - Cosplay & EGL

>>9052850
She did change the pose in response to critique, it's obvious to anyone who knows anything about drawing. Doubt it's traced, it's just an extremely common "kawaii" pose.

Anatomywise, issues I see: first, the outline of her collarbones is off (I'm assuming that's what those lines are below her neck). The "v" should be the meeting of two muscles coming from her neck, as pictured. Second, the bloomers make her legs look odd (which is why people see your anatomy as messed up but can't pinpoint why). You drew her bloomers as if they are separate/not one piece, and her legs are already "disconnected" from her body by the fact that they emerge out of her dress at an angle (if that makes sense). If you connected the bloomers/not separated them down the middle, it would look worlds better.

The final thing is more a personal preference, but maybe someone else want to comment on this- her outfit is a bit uninteresting. The elements are menhera, but they don't seem connected to one another. Maybe her choker could have a syringe on it to match her tights, or repeat the wing motif somewhere on her clothes. It's a little hard to say whether I think her outfit is too plain or too busy without the background included. Could you post a picture of the whole design (the one on the shirt) blown up?

Also, I've seen shittier menhera art. I've seen shittier anime shirt sell in general. You shouldn't let that make you aim low, obviously, but this is a solid start. I like the general design for the t-shirt (the giant pills are super cute), though I'm not sure how I'd feel about the border prints or the grid. With the manufacturer, is the shirt gonna be fitted or just baggy?