/biz/ - Business & Finance

>>882588
bump

>>882588
bump

>>882588

wanna see my resumee?

>CS BSC at X university

done

r8 plz.

>>882588
bump

stop bumping
also i hope this is no bait
>knowledge
what exactly ? this says nothing
>caring for grandma
this isnt a "job" per se, its a social accomplishment, try to get it in otherwise
>bowling
comes of quite odd, maybe add all your hobbies in a new box under your info

also general structure is shit


try to get it in some slight design, dont overdo it

>>882643
I didnt have a good idea what kind of design to use

>>882644
check creative market.

>>882588
Wow this is so shit. You literally have nothing on there to offer an employer,.

>>882646
Can you give me an idea how it should be?

>>882647
god are you stupid or what.

Just google CV examples and copy the structure.

Are you aspiring to work as a cashier or what?

>>882654
No i am trying to get a good resume structure down for a job anywhere

>>882588
holy fuck

Please tell me this is a joke.

>>882668
It isnt a joke, I have NO experience with this thats why I needed help

>>882675
I'll bite.

You should tailor your resume to each different job you are applying. Since you have no experience do a skills based resume.

Your cover letter is going to be more important that your resume here. In about a half a page explain to your potential employer how you can solve their problem and why your lack of experience shouldn't stop them from hiring you.

>>882588

>>882679
Right now im applying to random shit so I can get a job for 30 hours a week to make money for me to go back to college

>>882711
Shit jobs don't need a resume. Go into the places and talk to the person in charge and ask for a job.

>>882719
They tell me to apply online

>>882736
Then apply online when they say that and follow up with the person. Tell them you applied and ask what you can do to get the job. Being peasant gets you hobs.

>>882588

Cared for grandmother? That might be a nice thing to talk about at your interview to show you're a caring person but otherwise keep it off the resume.

Can anyone give me an example of one then?

>>882588
HAHA, into the thrash
7/10 if bait

>>882588
nigger I hope you're trolling

you need to look at some examples of professional resumes

>>882939
I always hastily respond to these threads then realize 2 seconds later that I totally just took the bait

oh well

>>882942
>>882939
eVERYONE THINKS uits bait when it isnt

I've been doing resume help for friends for a while, anyone know what a good hourly rate would be? I feel I could turn it into a small business.

>>882985
No

bump for advice on how to reword the reusme

>>882588
That resume does not say "your company will want what I have". Tailor it to 'sell' yourself to the prospect. Say if you're good with people and know how to interact/convince/manage/oversee others. What are your strong points: sales, tech, organizing, etc?

>>883041
No Idea...

Aren't people supposed to be posting resumes or something?

Yes, I know there are several typos.

Critique is welcome, just started looking for a new job. Sometimes I tailor the objectives to the company I am applying to, and I add or delete some jobs depending on the job i am applying to.

>>883058
>2 pages
Resumes should only be one.

>>883059
Well yes resumes should be generally be kept to one page, unless you have experience to back it up.

As far as your resume is your objective is to general, your computer skills can be summed up with Microsoft programs, you have no accomplishments in computer technology unless you state them (which you havent), your volunteering experience is your best bet but you somehow skipped over the whole part by summarizing all the activities you did with i "worked" at market day and you "worked" at library science, 1# seller in market challenge wtf is that?, bowled on bowling team so lie that you set up leagues or became a captain of one shouldn't be to hard if you have experience.

>>883063
Oh damn good point, so it can be 2 pages if its good material?

>>883068
No, only if you have job history to back it up. You dont have a job history so there is no way you can go beyond 1 page.

>Knowledge of Software
>Knowledge of Hardware

>>883069
I have a job history on there, look

>>883073
>I have a job history on there

>Responsible for caring for elderly grandmother since 2009
Not job experience, also oddly phrased.
>Memorial Hospital as a Safety Attendant from May of 2012 - May of 2013
It looks odd. Can I suggest something like
>Date
>Employer/Location & Position
>Work tasks

>Elite Marketing from September 2013 - February 2015
Where? What did you do? How did you do your job?

>>883058
>two pages
Are you applying to be a professor?

>>883091
That doesnt go in a resume dude, a resume is what you have done. In the interview is where you elaborate

>>883058
unless you are writing a CV (which you are not), keep your resume at 1 page

>>883134
How would you know? i thought you needed help?

>>883137
For a resume, two pages can work, if you print them on the front and back of a single sheet.

The front should be able to stand on its own, the back has additional detail.

>tfw you post your resume but everyone is too busy responding to OP's bait to look at it

>>883198
That makes a bit more sense, thank you.

>>882588

Not enough information

Knowledge of hardware doesn't mean shit. Which hardware, which brands, what kind of knowledge.

What were your responsibilities on market day. A resume isn't a shopping list, it's a story about you. As an employer I want to find the relevant skills I need for the position and a little information about you in about 60 seconds. This resume wouldn't even warrant a second look.

>>883054

This is good.

Most recent experience well explained. Only thing I would say is including at least a 5 year work history.

Skills and knowledge are specific. Certs and education are short and sweet.

For a one page resume it is excellent. If it was a two page resume I would add things like hobbies, a blurb about you and some other information to make you stand above other applicants.

>>883058

2 pages is fine. As I said before, 5 year work history at least and maybe a little bit more information about yourself.

People want to work with other people, not robots. If I had two resume in front of me with equivalent skills, I would pick the resume that was the most personal.


Attached is my most recent resume which needs to be updated. I've been using this resume since 2012 and the format is from a government template. It gets me interviews every time.

Page 1 is area specific. Page 2 is education and personal and page 3 I add references. I usually send it off without page 3 as I don't want my references to get bombarded with stupid shit from HR companies.

I've been told not to put pictures on my resume, but I think it makes it stand out. As long as you keep your file size down it's not a issue and even adds to the resume.

>>883376
But the thing is, idk how i could put more without going over 1 page, should i reformat it

>>883397

Use your white space efficiently. Often changing font can make a difference.

Generally you want to stay with 12 font, but most people won't notice going down to 11. There are many things you can do to a single page to squeeze in more words.

Often the most important thing is to use your words efficiently. Less words, more meaning.

Omitting certain things can also lead your reader to assume something about you that may or may not be true. This can be useful when you don't have experience, but want to appear that you do.

>>883415
Is there a certain format that is more attractive than mine? I tried doing better ill upload in a few

>>883458
Here it is, any better? took the grandmother thing off. I did have an internship at a physical therapy office before though, idk if i should put that on though

>>883465
bump

>>883376

You don't want to put pictures on your resume generally because it can lead to discrimination without being an issue for the employer, but with being a vet it's going to be a positive for you most of the time

Though you could get hired just about anywhere, even with a shitty resume done in Comic Sans

>>883571
Bump

>>883657
Bump

>>883657
Bumpp

>>883683
Bimo

>>883465
still terrible tbh
yes, put the physical therapy internship on there

going down through your resume I see nothing specific, makes you look like a faker

merge computer skills and accomplished in computer technology into one section, keep it as computer skills

elaborate on what your knowledge of hardware and software is. your current general descriptions are utter shit and mean nothing

jobs - don't just list the employer and the title. list what you did and use action verbs eg 'Ensured the safety of patients' or 'Escorted patients from ambulance to processing'. you are correct in that the interview is the place to elaborate but if you don't put atleast something about what you did on your resume it's going in the trash

elite marketing description: use bullet points and action verbs like:
Greeted and directed customers entering the building
Sold personal training seshes
Cleaned toilets
etc

for format put your name and stuff at the top and get rid of that blank space on the right. use the entire width of the page

>>883376
only advice i have is to be more specific in your responsbilites (what did you tutor? what age students?) but your resume is pretty gud

>>883185
use action verbs like 'Removed dead from houses' instead of repeating 'duties included' for every bullet

>>883738
I must be retarded because I didnt understand much of what you said?

Hi /biz/,

I am tired of receiving resumes that belong in the garbage... please, use this as a starting point

>>883861
Wow thank you very much!!!

>>883861
What format is that?

>>884057
Similar to the formatting suggested by Harvard Business School with slight variations

>>884072
Can you find that in microsoft word?

>>884083
Very small differences, but nearly identical:

http://www.econ.ucsb.edu/undergraduate/career_connection/finance_resume_template.docx

>>884088
Awesome

Do you guys think that an employer would validate my membership within a student club?

I'm meeting with a headhunter friend of my dad on Tuesday. I want to make sure that my resume is acceptable for my level so I don't seem completely out of it. I appreciate any advice and thoughts. Before you say it, I know, communications, laughinggirls.jpg

>>883054
This is not good. For your jobs, you need to provide specific examples, not general behavior. Give them an example of when you improved processes.

Also, I'm not sure what kind of position your latest job was, but try to make it sound like it wasn't a support job. Try to make it sound like a "managed services" job, whatever that is. If you can, leave out the support part of your job title.

The rest is good.

>>884193

That's not something you should put on your resume. Seriously, who gives a shit? Unless it's something like FBLA or FFA and you've won awards, it doesn't matter.

Granted I did place in an FBLA national many many years ago and I have that on a resume. You know why? Because I actually won at State and placed at nationals and a lot of businesses love FBLA shit.

But just a regular student club? Lolno

>>884281
It is basically a support job, unfortunately. Although I support other companys' IT departments instead of end-users.

Should I just fudge it to make it sound like more of a consultant role?

>>883861
chairman ceo will you be in the thread tomorrow? Im gonna redue the resume with the format and could use your crique, thanks much.

what does a 24 year old that has never worked for anything outside of an odd job put on his resume, ive been applying for summer jobs since i was 16 and ive never been called back ever

>>884193
>>884291
in addition to awards if you were in a leadership position (basically president and VP, treasurer doesn't count unless it was a huge club) and it wasn't too long ago you should put it on your resume if you are trying to get anything managerial

also +1 for FBLA, I won my event and nationals and having that on my resume gets me to the interview stage everytime up to about 3 years later

Really ain't that hard to google a cv, copy it and replace with own info

>>883054
>>883861
>>884280

Only worthwile CVs so far. /biz/cucks are low rank in their resume skills.

>>884707
That isnt as good as >>883861

>>882985
Average cost for professional help on a resume is $50-100 if i remember right, go a little less and you might make some money

>>884743
sure it isn't, i just googled it, copied it and edited the info, needs some editing and tweaking some info to look nicer

>>884747

Don't pay for resume making, it's a scam industry. For once go on reddit /r/resumes, they give out a good help for free and do (for once) not a bad job.

Don't waste your money on a scam.

>>884764
Why reddit and not here?

>>884768
more active, more specialized and more willing to help i would guess

>>884768

4chan has a pretty basic formatting and doesn't allow links, etc.

Reddit has a better interface for this kind of demand and, compared to this board, is more active. They also post CV models you can download straightforward.

>>884280
One poster said my resume is worthwhile - any detractors? I'm looking to polish this turd ASAP as my contract ends in late October.

>>884779
maybe just line up your education so it is in line with other paragraphs, nothing more from my pov

>>884779

Same poster anon.

Your thing is worthwile compared to the general 4chan level.

> Font is too small, too boxed in
> Too much white spaces you could use
> The skill section could be completed with more things that are less bullshit than "research"
> Put education first, then Work Experience and then Volunteer experience
> Summary section is useless

Make that CV cleaner, shorter, more readable, appealing to the eyes. The content is good. Put the form to the matter now.

> Add more numbers, they catch recruiters' eyes

>>883861
In this it says "University school name" or "business school name" What if I went to community college to get a certificate?

>>882588
op ur fucked

>>883861
>>884827
This is really difficult to fill out for a noob. I dont know any other languages besides english. "List any programming languages" like c++? I'm not great at any of that shit. Bottom of screen it asks for finance certificates? OR just certificates in general?

>>883861
And is this the last 3 jobs? Because on the 1 you had me download from>>884088
there is a student club and stuff, unless i was supposed to delete that

>>883861
Also when it says to list the jobs in order, well it doesnt say that, but should I put my last 3 jobs in order? Or the most relevant ones, I worked at a marketing place, a gym and a hospital. the marketing place for over a year, gym for 5 months hospital for 5. But i worked in order, hospital, marketing place, then gym

>>882588
enough

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>>884827
bump!!

>>884861
bump

This is the resume that landed me a paid internship as a manager's assistant. The only reason I let it get to two pages was because I had to send it as an email- if I send in a hard copy it's always just one page.

I have a master resume that has all of my experience on it, and I just cut it down and edit it to fit the position I'm applying to.

>Google buzzwords for resumes, put it in skills
>it works

>>883861
>physical address
does that include town, state and zip code? Or just something like 5421 north olcott lane. Or something like that?

>>884958
>>884827
>>884833
>>884836
>>884839
bump

On a resume, do you put the peoples headquarters? For example, I worked for a company that is based form michigan but they worked inside stores across various states like illinois and so. Wha twould i put??

>>883861
>Activities: [Student Clubs, Volunteer Work, Independent Activities]

Is this where I'd put a resume?

If I was in a club once or twice, like I went to 2 meetings of a drama club and 1 meeting of a "down to earth" club where you save the planet or some shit. I was wondering can i put that on a resume? Idk if theyd call because if they called the people probably wouldnt know who I am. But I have proof i went to a meeting because they still email me about their bullshit student club. Just wondering

>>884988
of course you can there's no way for them to check. just know something about those clubs

question kinda related, tomorrow I have a panel discussion with industry representatives for mechanical engineering regarding summer internships. what should I do to stand out, and what how should I network with them? thanks!

>>884992
do i list what i did in them on the resume? I'm using that great one from up top
>>883861

>>885001

> Show them you're more than a brain that can crush numbers.
> Proove them you can lead a team of people like you
> Proove them you can deal with people that aren't like you and be polite

Bump for my recent questions

>>884970
bump

>>884970
bump please guys

>>885192
can't bump your own thread, but i can and will

>>885209
Really you cant bump your own? i didnt know that thanks much

>>882588
rate my shit resume; currently applying for some part-time book-keeper position

>>885218
8/10
What needs work- there's some typos throughout, make sure to fix those. Also make sure all your statements are past tense unless you're still working there .I say this because your third bullet in your office clerk experience is phrased awkwardly, and using past tense would fix it- "Took part in creation off" or "Lead creation of..."
I really just like that the format is clean and readable

under relevant coursework, should i specify whether or not a course was taken at the graduate level? seems like it would take up too much space/be too gaudy, but i've got a few grad courses on there and it might be helpful if employers new that

>>885232
Thanks man. Should I also add a career objective like what I see in most resumes?

>>885250
Honestly I don't know if it makes a difference, but I do have one on mine. It wouldn't hurt to add one

CEO guy you here?

>>885274
ceo guyyy

>>884827
It lists two schools because the resume is set up for individuals who have gone to undergrad school and then grad school. In this instance, you will have two schools listed. In your situation, since you have only gone to community college, you list the name of your community college and the certificate you are working on or the certificate you received.

>>884833
It is not difficult. You aren't supposed to replace things line by line, you're supposed to use what I gave you as a REFERENCE of what a satisfactory resume looks like, and get ideas from it. Tweak it. If you don't know any additional spoken languages or any programming languages at all, then don't add it. List any relevant certificates to the job(s) you're applying for or field you're applying in.

>>884836
When you gain more and more work experience, your college section should shrink on your resume because it begins to have less and less relevance. For example, any college clubs listed on your resume 20 years from now will look a bit ridiculous to have on your resume and will be taking up useful room that can be used to expand on real-world job experiences you've had.

>>884839
Everything on your resume should be in order of something. Jobs should be sorted by date. Sections should be sorted by priority, in combination with appearance/aesthetics (for example, you would not list "interests" at the top of your resume).

>>884958
Physical address should include your full address as if you were to mail yourself a letter from another country.

>>884973
Don't make it more complicated than it needs to be

>>884980
What?

>>884988
No, don't put it on your resume...

>>885022
Don't put it...

>>885274
yes

>>885379
jesus christ just ban this faggot already

>>885413
C&C will this resume get binned? >>885218

Any other tips for improvement?

>>885413
Thanks so much for the continued responses. I feel if I delete things on the sample resume like languages and stuff I will only have a half a page less for a resume or something

>>885413
Also technical skills such as what "knowledge of microsoft word/exel" or what? Also interests, do people read those? What are good interests to put down? My interests are video games and lifting

>>885429
no, it is good

>>885467
put down computer skills that you have (including MS Office applications). Interests just serve as a talking point where the interviewer may or may not decide to ask or speak with you about it. If it's too much of a distraction from the rest of the resume, then don't put it.

>>885494
What if the resume isnt a whole page yet? I'm still filling it out I will post and hope to get your advice sir

>>885494
In the resume where it says
" Selected [Client / Project / Transaction] Experience:"

What does that mean? And what does it mean to list projects? I didnt have a project I just went to work

>>885588
Also what would be a fancy way of putting this, "Front Desk, Responsible for Selling Personal Training Sessions, Cleaner"

>>885591
>>885588
Also "group name" for someone who worked at a gym?

>>885595
>>885591
>>885588
CEO man you here?

>>883054
Your technical skills are legit as fuck wish I had some lol

>bump

>>885591
>>885595
Bump

>>882588
If you made the presdients list 1 semester how would you label that on a resume? Would you put that you got it for 1 semester?

>>885953
bump

OP here, where do I upload my resume so you can see the whole thing and rate how I did?

OP here, here is my updated resume. Take a look!

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>>886165


Stop fucking bumping, /biz/ is a slow board and this thread is shit any ways. And take all of the [ ] out of your resume, makes it messy looking as hell.

>>886173
Sorry, just want ceo man to see it, he was a big help to me

Ceo guyy

>get email from department secretary at my uni about an internship opportunity
>posting only asks for resume
>send resume to company
>send another one about a week later
>get another email from department secretary about the same company still looking for interns
I SENT YOU MY FUCKING RESUME TWICE. IF YOU'RE GONNA PULL THIS SHIT THEN AT LEAST GIVE ME AN EMAIL SAYING YOU DON'T WANT ME. REEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

>>886165
[] needs to go.

Work on the descriptions. Met tons of great people doesn't describe your job.

>>886427
can you elaborate

I'll bite...
>Yes, I am embarrassed by it, but the Job Centre lady wouldn't let me print/apply them until they met "Their [her] standards..."

>>886427
Is this better?

>>886481
You can use slashes instead of the [] it makes it super cluttered.

Again, they don't care if you met people, they want to know you sold them something.
-Was responsible for all managerial duties, but was forced to resign due to school schedule conflicts.-

>>886518
Can you post where I met people and what I should change it to? I changed my gym thing to what you posted about the managerial duties, great advice thanks

>>886518
Also an example of where slashes need to be compared to brackets? I changed a lot of brackets on there

>>886473

Those people are pretty useless. I've deal with my share of those before.

>apply for a job through staffing agency
>exact job I want
>go there
>she starts asking me about what kind of jobs and money I want
>I'm like "the job I applied for"

Just drives me up a wall.

>>886581
>>886576
bump

>>886576
>>886581
The time spent waiting for me to respond could have been better used.

The tons of people is in the description for meijer stores. Also, its a fucking retarded point to make. "worked inside of their stores?" No fucking shit.

Front desk / Cleaner / Personal training seller Is the other example.

Fucking read it holy shit.

Why do people include hobbies on their resume? Do you really think the employer gives a shit that you took judo or watch hentai? Jesus Christ no wonder this board is unemployed and can only get work as a car detailer

>>886716
Well the thing was, we did work inside meijer stores, it was a separate company. How would I better use it? Also thanks for the advice on the dashes

>>886716
could I put "Sold unqiue items every time so I had a large understanding of different product sales" on there too? Or should I never use "I"?

How about this for interests, i fixed it

"Interests: In my spare time I participate in sports such as Bowling, Baseball, and Tennis. I also love to learn and research. I am passionate about exercise and becoming a stronger /better version of myself."

>>886751
gay

>>886751
That's stupid. The employer doesn't care that you lift unless you're applying to a gym or gnc.

>>886779
But it asks for hobbies/interests

>>886786
Here's a tip, don't put hobbies and interests on a resume. During the interview the wmouer might ask your hobbies. Otherwise, leave it out of a resume if you want to be taken seriously

first ever real resume. will be applying for internships with this.

r8 or h8

OP here, here is my updated resume now. I took advice, does it look any more appealing?

>>886856
No. How do you claim to be an 'expert' in advertisement when you just graduated? Even if you are good at communication and advertisement, by no metric are you an expert. And why do you lost your interests in bowling or baseball or whatever? In what way does that make you more attractive to any employer?

>>886856
Not only that but at the end of page one you capitalized 3 words in a bullet point for the gym or whatever, change that capitalization.

which resume is better and how would you fix it?
I've been using the one on the left but I've had absolutely no luck with it. I feel like it doesn't explicitly show what I'm capable of and it's just a list of projects since that's really all I have to offer.
On the other hand, the one on the right shows those skills but seems too condensed.

>>886881
Get rid of the retarded relevant coursework dude, it's not real world experience, and an employer won't care. Also, dos I read it wrong or have you literally never had a job before?

>>886598
I know breh...

>>886883
never had one. >focus on school, they said.
should i get one even if it's a part time job? i just don't want one in case i somehow land a real one within a month of working there. does it hurt me that much if i'm just looking for an internship?

>>884355
I would, within reason. Emphasize on the things that are not as support engineer ish.

>>885241
Can't hurt. I'd recommend either leaving out your objective or changing it more into a personal statement and calling it a "Profile" or something. E.g. "<Adjective> engineering student with experience in x and y excited to join your team/seeking z opportunities." That way it's a summary of both what you're looking for and what and how you will contribute.

>>886881
Left one by leaps. Don't leave out your projects.

>>886856
This is the resume I would expect a 10th grader to write, if he had the experience of a 22-year-old. Don't use first person everywhere. Also some stuff is just stupid like
>4 or 5 stores
Pick one. A resume isn't an interview where you just ramble on about your experience, it should be clear and concise, the reader should be able to know you as a candidate within 10 seconds of skimming over it. You can't do that with yours. When I skim over it all my eyes see is bullshit.

>>882624

> cocky, egotistic, know it all douchbag

you're hired

>>882588

> took care of grandma

topkek 1/10 would print and pass around the office for a laugh

Is caring for an ill and elderly parent a legit reason for having a gap of a few years (post-university) on your resume? How would you pass it off?

>>886876
Well what kind of interests should I have? And what word would be better to use than expert?

>>886879
>General Manager, Full Time Manager, and Part Time Manager combined

Here? Are those not suppose to be capitalized? I thought they were because they were titles

>>886925
Appreciate the advice, changing the 4 or 5 to something more specific. And I should take out all the "i's? So just talk in third person like "COmpleted this or worked here? not "i worked here"?

>>887156
>Met tons of great people and learned how to market myself with prestige.]
About this, i thought it was good but it is sorta in first person because I said "myself" thoughts on how i could change this into a more appealing statement?

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>>887152
updated, lemme know.

>>882588
OP to start off use a summary not an objective. State what you have to offer, objectives in resumes tend to undersell you. Secondly, avoid using single word bullet points when possible. Show that you are educated and have a developed vocabulary. Every time you write something down think of a better way of stating it, number one rule of resumes don't undersell yourself.

Pls rate. Comment. Like. Share. Get me out of my current job.

Pls rate. Like. Upvote. Or share with your employer.

>>882588

- Flesh out your objective more. Include a bit on what YOU bring to the company... "seeking a job doing CISCO network administration at AT&T" or something like that. This shows that you bring something to the table rather than just being some bum.

- The whole section titled "accomplished in computer technology" needs to be re-written. "Knowledge of hardware," "knowledge of software"? Really? You're not telling your prospective employer anything about your specific skills. You want to include stuff like "certified Ruby developer" or "CISCO CCNA certified," stuff that shows your employer you're legit.

- The school volunteering section is a bit better but still not great. What is "market day," what is "marketing challenge"? You need to specify which organizations host these events, for example, "Ogilvy marketing day."

- "Bowled on bowling league 10 years." This isn't really relevant, you want your resume to be laser-focused on the job you're applying for. Sports can be helpful if it's relevant to the job; for example, if you're applying for work in the oil industry, saying that you did 5 years of college football might help, cause it will show that you're "one of the guys" (i.e. compatible with the culture).

Overall this is a pretty bad resume but it's possible to improve it. Send me an email @ misterbuttunz@gmail.com and I'll give you some pointers.

>>887763
>>887265
here is my updated one man, the first one is shit I know. Lemme know what u think

>>887265

Took a quick look. Here's a list of some of the things that jump out at me.

(1) Get rid of all of the brackets.

(2) You're missing commas with most of the place names. Be consistent.

(3) Get rid of sub-bullets. Stick to regular bullets for everything.

(4) Don't start bullets with "Was." Find an action verb. Instead of "Was the lead seller in various . . . ." Use "Lead sales team . . ." or whatever is appropriate.

(5) Avoid colloquialisms like "put my own spin on the company sales pitch." Use "created" or "redesigned company sales pitch" or something else.

(6) Don't end sentences with prepositions. E.g. ". . . I would work at" is bad.

(7) Generally write shorter sentences. Aim to be clear and concise. Shorter is always better.

(8) Don't include "was forced to resign due to school schedule conflicts." Just don't.

(9) Avoid cheese. "Learned how to deal with others in a manner that has been incredibly beneficial in my life." Nah. Save it for the interview.

(10) Only bold the headings.

(11) Avoid adjectives. You don't need "tremendous amount." I learned about X is fine.

(12) Capitalization of Bowling, Baseball, and Tennis is weird. Get rid of love to learn and research and exercise to relieve stretch. Make it shorter -- "Playing recreational sports like bowling, baseball, and tennis and working out" would be sufficient.

Help me out /biz/

I know i'm a fucking pleb but I need a job

been applying for 3 days and only scheduled interviews for 2 sales positions so far

Also, any suggestions as to what job I should apply for?

Pic related is mine, any critiques?

>>886848
You should include your name and contact info.

>>886856
Other anons already picked on the contents, but maybe you should space things out a bit more, and try avoiding long sentences/paragraphs

>>886881
>all those courses listed.
Remove them ,and make space for other content. Maybe put your hobbies in.

>>887265
looks good to me anon. Just remove that hotmail account and use a professional one.

>>887401
For your objective just add "Obtain a" in front of the sentence. Remove/narrow down all those courseworks. Lastly try to clean up the education section.

>>887988
Good so far, but maybe post some of your skills you have to offer.

>>888001
I was told to take out the brackets in mine >>887265

>>887988

Post that shit on DICE and make it clear in your profile that you're looking for an entry level gig in IT.

If you live in a city, a recruiter will find you and get you a foot-in-the-door gig at, like, $40k.

That's how I finally became a developer. 3 years and 5 months later, I'm making $100k base.

>>888001

Jokes on them, I don't have any skills
unless IT stuff counts so maybe ill put that in


For yours:

-one page
-remove hobbies
-remove "references upon request", they'll ask if they want them

These are 3 major things listed on "things not to put on your resume"

>>888011

Will do, because the worst they can do is say no

However, I am not incredibly confident in my IT skills. I am pretty shaky with SQL and my programming isn't good. I'm totally comfortable with faking it til I make it though. Do you think i'll be found out? I could probably pass a simulated test provided it wasn't advanced shit

I live in New Jersey about 20 mins from NYC so there's probably a lot of IT stuff around

Either way thanks man

>>887823
>You're missing commas with most of the place names. Be consistent.
Can you explain this a bit more
Also
> Don't start bullets with "Was." Find an action verb. Instead of "Was the lead seller in various . . . ." Use "Lead sales team . . ." or whatever is appropriate.

Confused on this a bit too.

I've been told it's good. Anything I can do to improve it?

>>888010
Yea so I didn't repeat what that anon said, but the hotmail account needs to go.

>>888013
http://lmgtfy.com/?q=skills+employers+are+looking+for just follow that link and pick out the ones you think you have, and thanks for the critique anon.

>>888023

Note Front Desk / Cleaner / Personal Training Salesman. You have [Place name], [Illinois]. But in your education section, your marketing representative job, and your safety attendant job you don't include a comma for the place name.

E.g., for your marketing representative job, you need [Place name]COMMA [Michigan] not [Place name] [Michigan].

Also take out the brackets.

Regarding "was." Never start a bullet point with "was." It is not an action verb. Use a verb like "led" or "coordinated."

>>888023
>>887823
Here it is updated again thoughts?

>>888030
The hotmail account is my email account, I dont have any others. I have 2 email accounts, 1 is a shit posting one and the other is the good one i put on the resume

>>888034
Yeah when i was blacking things out it was blacked out but I had it there all along, appreciate it

How would you re phrase "Was responsible for managerial duties"? or
" Was responsible for keeping patients with likely mental instabilities safe from harm. Worked with many different kinds of patients in numerous demographics. Was also responsible for transporting patients to various locations inside the Hospital."

>>888042

Gmail is free and much more professional

>>888045

Don't use the same words over and over

>was responsible for managerial duties
Managed up to 20 employees while leading business operations blah blah blah

>Was responsible for keeping retards blah blah
Enforced proactive safety measures to keep patients safe while providing quality healthcare and following procedural guidelines blah blah

Just don't make all the words the same. Nobody wants to read that. Fluff it up too

>>888047
help pls

>>888035
This is better. Besides what I already mentioned...

(1) take out "store" in "store shoppers." Redundant.

(2) replace "5" with five.

(3) Change Chicago land area to Chicago area.

(4) Change this to -- "Developed a unique company sales pitch to increase rapport with customers and colleagues." More concise.

(5) I'm not sure Personal Training Sessions should be capitalized.

(6) I'd change the second bullet point for the training salesman thing to "Led efforts in selling training bundles by creating xxx thereby increasing overall sales..." or something like that.

(7) For the last bullet point, I probably wouldn't mention that you sold more training sessions than your managers. Prospective employers may take that the wrong way. Just say something to the effect of -- "Received recognition for most training sessions sold" or whatever.

(8) I'd take out the demographics stuff. In the first bullet point for the hospital job. See if you make combine everything into one sentence.

(9) Under certifications, get rid of "Also CPR and AED" and write "Certified in CPR and AED from the American Heart Association." Start with action verbs.

(10) Also, don't say you interned for just a month. If it comes up, tell them the truth but don't mention how long you interned -- especially because this is in the activities section. Probably don't need the other stuff that comes after that, but it's your call. (Interning is pretty self-explanatory.)

(11) You just need to cut stuff down. Highlight real achievements or things prospective employers wouldn't realize you do. E.g., being a safety attendant is pretty self-explanatory. You don't need to state the obvious (for the most part).

(12) Also, as another anon said, you can vary up the action verbs by looking in a thesaurus. You use the word developed a lot. Highlight the collaborative process if you can -- coordinated, consulted, etc.

That's all for now. I'll send you the bill later.

>>888054
You arent really gonna charge me are you..? I thank you for the advice, but you think it is better? I will post what i come up with

>>888047

I'll try to point out some obvious stuff anon:

-Bold education, work experience, and skills. Also make the font for those larger

-Why is GPA under the line after education? Should be in the same block. Probably aligned to the right on the same line as "education" or in a bullet point

-get rid of that empty bullet point too

-Cut some of that job description down. You write a lot but don't say much. Some pretty good buzzwords thrown in there though

-"Skills/abilities" should possibly be rephrased. Maybe "relevant skills" would be better. Idk, I just don't like the way it is but its not that bade

And idk about the picture man

>>888047

Beside what the other anon said, the formatting needs some work. Google search "Harvard Law Resumes" and look under the samples. Some of them are better than others but they're aesthetically on point for the most part.

Also, unless you are a 10/10 no picture.

>>888047
Get rid of all italics, if you don't know how to use them, don't.
Move your GPA to the institution you received it, within the education category. Get rid of the stray bullet point under GPA. Is that your high school listed beneath your college? If so cut it, if you're in college then they already know you got a high school diploma/equivalent.
I personally wouldn't put on there a separate bullet for your major and year- include major with the degree you're getting, and they can see what year you are by looking at the years you've attended.
Move education date to align with the career dates.
"Brand Ambassador" is out of format, fix that.
Make sure you only use past tense words if you No longer work at that job. I say this because your last experience log is past tense but you say you're still working there.
I would change "proficient" to "fluent" in your last bullet point.
The picture is weird. Unless you're eye candy, drop it.

Good luck

>>888063
I am 9/10 and blonde blue eyes. Usually gets me work lol

>>888069
Different anon

I graduated from a well known competitive public high school and plan on working in the same relative area.

I included high school so I could put SAT/PSAT score. do you think this is a good idea

>>888142
If its Stuyvesant or someplace prestigious, you could probably get away with including the high school. But I really don't see any need to include a raw SAT/PSAT score. If you received a merit scholarship tied to that score, then you can include that.

>>888149
top 1% of public highschools in the nation? or something like that

yeah, just the "national merit commended" or what have you under highschool

>>888151
Go ahead and include the high school's name. It'll speak for itself.

National merit could go under college if you received a scholarship through your SAT, but I guess its fine to include it under your high school. I'd just be wary of making the high school section too long. Employers only really care about college and grad school, so the more you can fill out those sections the better.

>>888054
For number 6, isnt that what I already have? Just in maybe a few more words? I thought it was pretty good

>>888054
>use the word developed a lot
What about individualized for the first part in the marketing work experience? I cannot think of a better word than developed tbh. In the thesaurus there are only 3 words similar and they are all shit

>>888153
It is just a little wordy. I think it reads that way because you include "personal training sessions" twice in that sentence. Maybe -- "Led team's efforts in selling training bundles by creating blah blah resulting in increased sales."

Remember, employers will spend about 60 seconds looking over your resume. You don't really want to waste any time. Hit the key points and move on.

Also, make sure its all one page.

>>888155
should i type out "thirteen" in there or leave as 13?

>>888155
>>888054
>>888049

Okay let me know what you think guys!

>>888156
Just be consistent. I prefer to type out numbers unless they are over 100 or dates/etc.

>>888154
Then you can keep it. Your call ultimately.

>>888155
Also wondering, instead of
"Was responsible for all managerial duties"
Would this be better
"Undertook responsibility for all managerial duties"?
trying to find something to replace that last was... I think this resume is getting pretty good compared to what it was in the OP

>>888158
dont put periods at the end of your bullets, first glaring one

>>888158

Put your college major on there
And put the italicized "certified in fitness instructor training" under that
Putting the major is important

Other than that, i'm liking it a lot more. A little too cluttered but the info is all relevant.

Liking the wording a lot more too

Maybe get rid of "interests" and "activities" on the bottom; have one skills sections, and create a separate "internships" section where you talk about that

>>888069
>>888063
>>888060
Thank you anons, Yeah i fixed that nonsense, forgot to take a screenshot.

>>886473
Anybody?
>;_;
>... lost, like tears in the rain...

>>888165
.....and wear a codpiece to the interview

>>888158
Getting better .

- Don't start bullets with "Was". Use action verbs.
- SAR = Situation Action Result. You are missing "Result" on most bullets. Read out loud, ask yourself "So What?" The answer is typically the Result, and ideally is monetary or at least numeric.
- In general, use less bullets but make each bullet more detailed. If you need space, compact education into less space.
-

>>888459
I cannot think of anything for my resume instead of was, especially for managerial duties

I'm in the middle of recruiting season right now. I've applied to almost 100 positions (lol fuck job hunting). I still plan on submitting this thing to a lot more, any tips would be greatly appreciated

bump

>>882656
well the structure isnt your main problem, its education and skills. if u want to get a job anywhere

>>884936
You wrote "Excell" at the bottom

>>885616
take out your photograph

>>883054
what font is this?

>>885241
bump

need to land a job by graduation next year. started applying in august. any tips/critiques?

>>884936
>great attention to detail
>assistnat

r8 me

>>890245
this is not official, im aware of the typos. it prints one page idk why google was doin that

>>883054
>knowlewdge

2lewd4me

>resumes with pictures are the standard
when will this bad meme end?

>>890245
>Contact taking up that much space
>that pointless objective
>Putting high school accomplishments when you're in college
>Work experience not being first
>All of those awful descriptions of generic shit you did

MEDIOCRE

why are you guys filling your resumes with generic nonsense instead of listing specific things you've done? also why are any of these more than a page

>>887058
>hired
And promoted to managment

>>890053
It's a Serif font, which is not optimal because it's slightly harder to read than a Sans Serif font.

Shoot. I removed the header which only includes contact information.

>>882588
>tfw resume so good still getting interview offers on the regular a year after graduation

Honestly these recruiters are annoying as fuck. I always link them though, just in case I get into a bind later on.

>>890456
definitely take out the word "prestigious" in your opening sentence. Great way to get thrown in the trash off the bat

>>890456
And don't use the word
"I" ever in a resume. You'll look self-centered

>>890473
>>890474
Done and done